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So i was really bored and wanted to write some ork stuf since they get no love what do you guys think of the beginning i got down so far for a short story/comic? The plot of the story is going to be how a grot formed a rebelion against the orks with his fellow grots and was inevitably stomped to the ground

The Rise And Fall Of Buzgrot
The Cunning-ist Grot to Ever Live

[Setting: Aboard Gork’s Big Toof Battle Cruiser destined for the battle of Armageddon. Runtherder Smashgit begins his story to a bunch of conniving grots]

Listen ‘ere yous gits! I’m gunna tells you the story of Buzgrot and ‘is cunning plan aboard the shootiest and most obvious brutal battle cruiser you good for nuffins will ever get the chance to see wit yer own red beady eyez. And I’s only gunna tell it ONCE so you betta ‘ear it good…

Buzgrot was like any other grot you would ‘ave met. He was puny, thinked he knew more than an ork did, and squished just as easy wit a big green fist! [Ork laughter]
The only difference between ‘im and the rest of yous, is he was learned by the most cunning Big Mek in probably and most likely da whole ork fleet. Aboard Gork’s Big Toof, Buzgrot was showed how to fix up a broken down scrap pile of a mess warbuggie, and fix it up proper wit style; wit just a bucket of red paint and a few nuts a bolts to throw at da other grots not doing what they s’posed to. This made Buzgrot one of da most respected grots wit da orks, which don’t mean much besides he was less likely to be sat on. [More Ork Laughter] What made him good wit da boyz also made ‘im less good wit yous grots. By the end of dis story, however, you’ll know of ‘em much different.

to be continued...

Probably better off here...

ok cool thanks for the move to dakka fiction never knew it existed