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I've shared the document with my local gaming group, and got some praise for it, but I haven't yet gotten a good chance to test it yet.

Basically, it's an Attacker/Defender-type mission, where the Defender defends his half of the board - behind a board-wide line of difficult terrain. The Attacker has a small zone, but the first unit of his to cross the line of terrain is harder to shoot at.

It also implements some sensible and flavorful changes to the Maelstrom cards.

I tried to make it balanced, but since I haven't had a chance to playtest it yet, I don't know how every army or army type would fare in this mission. Any thoughts on it are welcome.]]> http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/preList/678762/8426368.page http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/preList/678762/8426368.page GMT Eg lets say the attacker places 3 objs around his backline. The defender will ultimately have to "break out" to capture them, sort of defeating the idea and theme of the scenario (a desperate defense)
Why not amend it to a bunker assault type game, where the attacker must destroy or capture fixed objs in the defenders zone (say 3-6 objectives alternated but only in the defenders half)?.

Also this is a bit strange:

Sudden Assault:
Enemy units within 6” of the very first unit from the Attacker's army to cross the Line
cannot fire overwatch at it in the first game turn, and must otherwise fire Snapshots whenever
shooting at it in the first game turn

Lets say the defense line is 3" deep as per the rules. The attacker will need to make up at least 15" before he gets into the defnders half on turn one to benefit from this rule. Thats a pretty big gap for most units.
Why not amend it to the first attacker unit to enter the half period. No turn limit applies.]]> http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/preList/678762/8428550.page http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/preList/678762/8428550.page GMT
But there are lots of things that could easily cross the line on the first turn - turboboosting units, scouting/infiltrating units, jump units that run [or even ones that jump then assault a Defender unit that's right up against the line].

]]> http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/preList/678762/8428769.page http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/preList/678762/8428769.page GMT Perhaps make it that the first attacking unit(s) to cross the line gets shrouded for that turn?]]> http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/preList/678762/8428982.page http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/preList/678762/8428982.page GMT
I also made it so that the first Attacker unit across the line gains Shrouded until it's next turn.]]> http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/preList/678762/8434559.page http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/preList/678762/8434559.page GMT