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Made in us
Moldy Mushroom





baton rouge,louisiana

After traveling in'The Blue Snapa' for three months the,boyz have been getting pretty restless for being stuck in the rok for so long. The only way to keep them selfs intertain is by betting on squig fights, playing grot bowling, and pin ten grots on the gargantum squiggoth. In the kaptains quaters ,Kaptain Klawsnapa was playing poke-ar with a couple of warbosses that was under his command. First was Pyroprox, he is the warboss that love FIRE so he has alot of burna boyz that work for him. Second is Bozzmetal, he is the warboss that wears mega armour 24/7 and has three meganob bodyguards. The third and final boss is Streakrazer, he is a spead freak warboss but his lower half is cybork-netic (he blames it on a carnifex for eating his legs and bike). "So Kaptain"speaks Bozzmetal"Why 're we looking for them chaos nurgleth boyz". Pyroprox looks up at the kaptain and says in his grimmy vioce"Yeah Kaptain, I meen we could stomp them nids skull in like we do to everything else that comes our wayz". "YES I knowz we can, but the spore season was low this month so we low on some good strong boyz". Then Bozzmetal noded in agreement and took a sip of his fungus beer. "Streak what you have to say in this matter"says the kaptian. Streakrazer lays down his poorly looking cards on the metal table and says" I must agree with you kaptain, but why them chaos boyz". "Cuaze they have a great resistant against them nids or anything that crozz they're pathz" as he punches a grot for spiling his squigs food bowl. Bozz grabs the grot and throws him into an open vent with a spinning blade. They luaghed loudly as they heard the grot scream as it went into the vent. At the moment the grot hit the fan its blood was scattered every where in the vent. Thats when mek Screwloose ran in and said to the kaptain"We found them Kaptain, we found them". He seemed extremly out of breath for running from the mek station at the sixth floor. The kaptain stands up from his chair and asks"where they b screw"in excitment. "One them kommando boyz fuond on a space hulk sir"as he sits on floor tired."Good, good"says the kaptain in a happy mood"now we can greet them in perzon". He and his warbosses strode out of the room towards one of the pourly made elevators to go and prepare their welcome party.

This message was edited 1 time. Last update was at 2011/10/10 13:23:34


 
   
Made in ca
Lord of the Fleet






Halifornia, Nova Scotia

I'm sure its great, and I read through most of it, but it could seriously use some line breaks. Proper paragraph format and all that. A giant wall of text is not fun for anyone.

Also, don't forget that after a period you put two spaces, and one space after a comma.

Seemingly little things, but very important to the reader, as most of us will ignore your well written post if its formatted poorly.

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Made in us
Moldy Mushroom





baton rouge,louisiana

Thanks for the advice i needed it.

 
   
 
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