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This is a TV Script that I had written and not edited yet that I wish to share with everyone. Please read tell me how you like it (or not)

Synopsis: This Story Follows the 5th Company Ultramarines, a Company with little litanies and personal glories they have one of the greatest strategic jobs in the Ultrmarines, there captain is the Master of the Marches. The Master of Marches is charged with deploying Squads, Companies, attachments and emissary’s to battles, political unification and domestic problems. Captain Caito Galenus is charged with this task and is given command of the 5th Company to Defend the Ultramar systems and McCragg. The Ultramarines Chapter is then tasked with a crusade against the Eldar Xenos in a neighboring system and will require 8 Companies leaving the 5th Company and 40% of the 10th Scout Initiates. After the other Companies have gone a Massive Ork Invasion hits the 500 worlds Ultramar system threatening the western part of the region hitting the planet Tarterus. Captain Galenus must leave his post and lead his Inexperienced Company into battle against the green tide of Orks and hold them there until the chapter gets back or they are defeated themselves.

Sorry mate, its very long. I got about a 3rd of the way through it but in script format its very hard to read and visualise.
Perhaps break it into a novel format and see how it goes from there?
You could post up a chapter week by week in the fiction section on here and judge the feedback.

Ratius wrote:Sorry mate, its very long. I got about a 3rd of the way through it but in script format its very hard to read and visualise.
Perhaps break it into a novel format and see how it goes from there?
You could post up a chapter week by week in the fiction section on here and judge the feedback.

It is Broken up to Chapter Episodes about 10+ pages each. The Very First Episode is longer because it is the Pilot. Ill post in the fiction post once I figure it out.

 Ratius wrote:
Sorry mate, its very long. I got about a 3rd of the way through it but in script format its very hard to read and visualise.
Perhaps break it into a novel format and see how it goes from there?
You could post up a chapter week by week in the fiction section on here and judge the feedback.

Did you read all of it?

No, sorry, I didnt get through all of it Im afraid.

 Ratius wrote:
No, sorry, I didnt get through all of it Im afraid.

Well its a differnt writing style its meant for a TV Series and not a book. Mostly because of the actions and what they do

Anyone else Read it?