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So, here is the first story about the Bloodfists from the 4th company of the Knights of Blood. More parts will follow. Want to sign up for the 4th Company? See 40k General Discussion. Excuse me for any wrong typos and all that stuff, English aint my main language
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Mike Brown stood in the Command Bridge of the Knights of Blood Strike Cruiser 'Bloodhanded'. He saw Brother-Captain Tiso, mumbling a curseword inside himself. Just before he wanted to ask what the problem was, he saw it. The Tau were coming inside the system. They were under attack, and there wasnt a way to escape. The Strike Cruisers Gallar-Shields were badly damaged, and if it would be disabled for even half a second while in the Warp, the ship would be full of Deamons. Brother-Captain Tiso quickly organised a defence. All ground forces were send back to the ship. As Mike saw the captain and his bionic arm, on wich he wasnt wearing armor on at the moment, moving to him. 'Mike, I want you and your squad to board that Tau ship and get it down.' 'Yes sir, I will' Mike said. 'You will get a bomb to blow up the commando bridge of their ship. Ive ordered an stormraven Gunship to fly you in. The ship will carry you and the bomb inside their ship.' 'Yes sir. Well blow up that Xenos scum.'.

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As Mike moved to his squad, he saw them all preparing their armor and weapons. 'Sister Hale, best put on your helmet. Were going to make a trip to some Tau ship..' 'Finally!' she shouted, desperate for some action. Brother-Librarian Sledge was also excited, and he got daydreaming that he would blow up the entire Tau ship with his physic might. 'Lets move to the Stormraven.' , Mike ordered. As the squad approached their Stormraven Gunship, they saw a big machine approaching with loud steps...
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Mike immediately recognised the Dreadnought. It made him happy to see that Honoured Brother Sam was coming with them. He knew that he would be very usefull with destroying the Tau. Mike quickly greeted him, and then ordered his squad to get in the Stormraven Gunship. After the Furioso Dreadnought was attached to the gunship, the ship moved out of the hangar, into the space.
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Sergeant Mike Brown of the bloodfists watched to the Tau ship. They were closing in on it, but he saw no way to enter it. He decided to ask the captain, Battle-Brother Tiso, how they would have to get in. 'Well,' Tiso´s voice said from the commando bridge of their strike cruiser, ' you will see'. Exactly after Tiso finished his sentence, the weapon batteries of the Bloodhanded all pointed towards the Tau ship. As the Tau paniced, the bateries fired as quickly as possible, to make sure the Tau couldnt put on their extra defensive shields. 'There you go' Tiso said. The Stormraven immediately moved towards the hole in the Tau ship, and the Bloodfists inside prepared to enter the enemy's ship...
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The techmarine who controlled the Stormraven spotted some Crisis Battle Suits. As he ordered the servitor to fire, the Crisis Suits shooted the servitor and the assault rifles down in one explosion. The techmarine cursed them, and pulled the triggers, and fired a Bloodstorm rocket at them...'Landing zone secured. Prepare to disembark.'
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As the Stormraven landed, the assault ramp opened and Hounoured Brother Sam was released. Mike ordered his men (and the Angry Furioso Dreadnought) to move into the ship. 'Sir, the doors wont open.' one of them said. 'Brother Derick, shoot that door down.', Mike ordered. 'Yes sir!' Dereck fired his Multi Melta at the door, but it didnt damage the door, apart from a black place. 'How are we going inside?! I have tried to open it with some things I came up with, but it doesnt work!' said a angry, red bolts firing brother Sledge. 'Well, thats were Sam is for..'
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As Honoured brother am smashed trough the door, an alarm went off. 'Quickly, get inside!' All of them managed to get insid the ship, Honoured Brother Sam carrying the bomb that would blow up the Tau commando bridge. 'Captain Tiso..Can you hear me?' 'I can hear you very well, Sergeant Brown. Whats your status?' 'We entered the enemy ship. Were moving to the commando bridge' 'Good, keep on moving. Hope you like reinforcements...' After captain Tiso said that, his voice disappeared. 'What did he mean with that?' mumbled Mike. Suddenly sister Valence screamed: 'Sir, we got company. Enemy fire warriors moving to our location!' All of the men were loading their weapons, preparing for the attack. 'They are with around 30!'
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As the Tau came in, Mike raised his bolt pistol and fired. The first unlucky Tau got the bullet straight in his head. The bolt exploded in his head, wich splattered trough the room. The rest of the squad followed. Bolters fired, making a rain of bolts in the air. Dereck fired his Multi melta at the enemies most far away. Hale Valence was firing her plasma gun at the Xenos, but the gun nearly overcharged and it had to cool down. The Tau managed to send Kroot to the room, who dived onto her. For a moment, she was lost in melee, as she only had a combat knife with her. But the Kroot were too busy trying to kill Valence to notice the bulking machine called 'Sam'....
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The Kroot attacking Hale Valence senced something behind them. When they turned around to see what was there, it was too late. The Furioso Dreadnought smashed into them, cutting them down, and stomping them on the floor. After the Kroot were finished, the remaining Tau were killed quickly. So far, all of them survived. Mike searched for Hale Valence between the bodies. As he found her, she was covered with blood. She was still alive, but wounded. She could come with them in this statte, but as she was frightened, he decided to wait for a moment. Mike laughed in himself. A few minutes ago she had blond hair. Now she had red hair. She was a GINGER. He got thinking in himself how horrible Valence would think that was, and how grumpy she would be until the next time she could wash herself..
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'Allright, lets go and blow up that damn Xenos!' In one moment the squad moved outside the room that was lying full of dead Tau. 'Head for the Commando Bridge!' The journey trough the ship was easy, as they nearly didnt encounter any Tau. 'Sir, thats the door to the Bridge.' 'All ready to kick the ass of that Xenos?' Sergeant Brown asked. 'Yes sir!'. The group answered like one. 'Sam, make that door ready for an Ork Stompa, will you..' Honoured Battle Brother Sam threw all his power at the door, and with succes. He smashed trough the door with both his bloodfists in one strike. The marines immediately stormed in. 'Get them down! Head to the middle!' As Mike moved with his squad inside, he heared a loud bang,and the sound of the Bridge changing in a vacuum. 'Valence, your helm, put it on, now!' Hale Valence quickly put her helm on, while the Commando Bridge was soaked empty of air to breath in. A Red with black Thunderhawk Gunship approached inside the Bridge. 'I said you would like reinforcements, didnt I?' spoke the voice of captain Tiso in Mike's helmet..
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Just as the Thunderhaw landed, the hole in the Commando Bridge closed. A huge doorlike thing moved in front of it, and air came back in the room. Just as Valence put off her helmet and said, slightly happier then a few minutes ago, 'Finally, I can put my helmet off!', a Tau Ethereal appeared, together with a warrior grou[p of Crisis Suits. Luckily, captain Tiso took some devastators with him. Vladimir Russki, one of the devastators, firede a nice Krak missile, that hitted on a critic place in one of the Crisis battlesuits. The suit exploded, killing half of the suits in one, big explosion. The rest of the devastators quickly finished the rest of the Tau off.
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In the meantime, captain Tiso and some of the Bloodfists moved the bomb from Honoured Brother Sam's back. As Tiso wanted to arm the bomb, a Stealth Suit emarged from the shadows, moving quickly to Tiso. Before amy of them could warn Tiso, Tiso's Bionic arm smashed trough the suit, grabbing the Tau out of it, before the poor Xenos found his end on a Power Sword. As all the Knights of Blood looked to the captain that got further with arming the bomb, like nothing happened. 'Allright, all of you, put your helmets on' , Tiso ordered. 'Were going to open our gap and fly back to our nice ship, blow up the bomb and killing all of those Xenos.' Ass all put on their helmets, the devastators blasted trough the door. All air got out of the room, the Knights of Blood quickly got into the Thunderhawk. 'Boom' Tiso said. He psuhed the button to detonate the bomb. As the Marines saw a bi explosion (no sound in space..), they knew what had happened..

go sergeant Mike Brown!!

added a new part

WOW! that's no small part you've added. i like it!

thanks

added a new part again.

it just keeps getting better! i want more!!

Thanks Any negative critics? lol.

new part is up.

thenoobbomb wrote:new part is up.

What would I have to say different lol.
'I hate you! Im not going to add something! Thats not true.'

thenoobbomb wrote:Thanks Any negative critics? lol.

Only a couple of small things.
Mike brown sounds like a real average name for a space marine.
A few spelling and grammer mistakes.
Try not to repeat key words in the same paragraph.
Its a command bridge not a commando bridge

Ok thanks. Mike Brown is made by some people, so, well, I follow my duty lol. Thanks for those critics

what's wrong with it? i'm not that good in making up names..... the name i gave a stromtrooper of the bataviran was: keith kolojeihe....well doesn't sound that cool...dont you think?

ni making names?

His point was, that its an average name

i can read.....

and i'll change the little mistake

thenoobbomb wrote:Thanks Any negative critics? lol.[/quote

well....as a claasmate and a friend, you should know that i always have negative critics. i just won't do it for fun.....mostly

can you read?!

well.....yes

if i couldn't....how would i have ever get to go to our school?

exactly....you don't know!

Now, the story is moving to an end...

...or isnt it?

dont hope so

hoping wont help..

*cries*

crying wont help...

.. More enemy Xenos will help....

woohoo! more xenos.....

When will the next part come?

Never.. Let it just die, friendly. And dont revive it..