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 Trondheim wrote:
A good idea would be planetary nobels or perhaps a merchentile house under the influence of said powers or factions. Slaugth are a rather insidious and very real treath to mankind. I would love to see how you could make a story with them as the bad guys, but bear in mind that such formidebal foes will have a literal army at their beck and call. And added to their very formidebal powers that can rival all but the very best the IoM can trow at them. Read the dark heresy books for more info on these foul xenos.

And always nice to help a fellow author

I could also work them in; it would require additional research on them. Possibly as something much worse after the Ordo Scharzenkommando thinks they're just dealing with Cultists and witches.

 Inquisitor Ehrenstein wrote:

 Trondheim wrote:
A good idea would be planetary nobels or perhaps a merchentile house under the influence of said powers or factions. Slaugth are a rather insidious and very real treath to mankind. I would love to see how you could make a story with them as the bad guys, but bear in mind that such formidebal foes will have a literal army at their beck and call. And added to their very formidebal powers that can rival all but the very best the IoM can trow at them. Read the dark heresy books for more info on these foul xenos.

And always nice to help a fellow author

I could also work them in; it would require additional research on them. Possibly as something much worse after the Ordo Scharzenkommando thinks they're just dealing with Cultists and witches.

Yes, they work thrue a syndicate known as the Amarathine syndicate in the Dark Heresy books, I recomend reading Dicipels Of The Dark gods for more spesefic information. having them as the puppetmaster would indeed be a rather nice read.

I haven't seen a scrap of fiction. What are you even talking about? & I've heard mention of some Ordo-germany-space-kingdom. Really? what is this post even about?

 The Obsidian King wrote:
I haven't seen a scrap of fiction. What are you even talking about? & I've heard mention of some Ordo-germany-space-kingdom. Really? what is this post even about?

Its normal by his standards. Just be glad he has not launched his nazi loving Germans in space at us yet,

 Trondheim wrote:

 The Obsidian King wrote:
I haven't seen a scrap of fiction. What are you even talking about? & I've heard mention of some Ordo-germany-space-kingdom. Really? what is this post even about?

Its normal by his standards. Just be glad he has not launched his nazi loving Germans in space at us yet,

God Emperor. Do you want to take the time to read it? If you have criticism, please express it. Don't complain and make attacks.

Yes I have read some of the stuff you have posted. And I dare say its rather disturbing to say the least, coupeld with your infamous Star Dust affaire

Trondheim wrote:

 The Obsidian King wrote:
I haven't seen a scrap of fiction. What are you even talking about? & I've heard mention of some Ordo-germany-space-kingdom. Really? what is this post even about?

Its normal by his standards. Just be glad he has not launched his nazi loving Germans in space at us yet,

Im happy there arent any space nazis coming after my little slice of the galaxy yet. Need I inform the world if anyone attempted to attack my little chaos stronghold I'd ruthlessly destroy them, with my super chaos special killy power.

Inquisitor Ehrenstein wrote:I'm interested in campaigns against Armageddon and Todth. Would it be possible to send a few Ordo Scharzenkommandos to plant Chaos Cultists on the world, and then say "oh look! That world is corrupted by Chaos!" and invade? Anything else is fine.

. & Inquisitor, please show me where I can read it and I gladly will. But making a post like you did, in no way could I find any trace of rational thought. You made a statement yet gave no precursors to anyone who hasn't read it, therefore making the post a little bit confusing. I'm not trying to attack you, and I know that's probably how it's coming across, I'm just confused. Sorely confused. Post up a link, so the whole situation could be understood, a wee bit more easily. Sorry good sir.

Keep the criticisms constructive or move on.

-.- I apologize, Moving on.

 The Obsidian King wrote:
-.- I apologize, Moving on.

I don't think it was directed at you.

http://en.sturmkrieg.com/Category:Sturmkrieg

 Trondheim wrote:
Yes I have read some of the stuff you have posted. And I dare say its rather disturbing to say the least, coupeld with your infamous Star Dust affaire

Could you please point out what is disturbing? I also didn't write the Stardust Empire. Like I said before, please point out any concerns you have and I will make appropriate modifications.

You do know that the Scharzenkommando (the Inquisition force investigating Todth) is from a planet called Aschknas, right?

http://en.sturmkrieg.com/Aschknas

I'm not trying to be forceful, if it seems like that, just trying to point things out.

Here's the story:

http://en.sturmkrieg.com/Acquiring_Todth

Millions of storm troops? And a whole world of blanks! Dear lord...If I may make one wish that would be that you at least try to keep within the limits of establised fluff, and that you try to keep somewhat levelheaded when thinkig up the make up of a whole world and its defenders.

 Trondheim wrote:
Millions of storm troops? And a whole world of blanks! Dear lord...If I may make one wish that would be that you at least try to keep within the limits of establised fluff, and that you try to keep somewhat levelheaded when thinkig up the make up of a whole world and its defenders.

The destroyer only carries 150 soldiers. As for the Aschknas army group on standby, none of them are blanks. I also haven't written anything about the defenders of Todth.

I would change the Stormtroopers to Grenadiers or Hardened Veterans.

Munitorium Stormtroopers are the best baseline human infantry in the entire galaxy. They are even rarer than Space Marines. There are only ten thousand Munitorium Stormies in existence. To have millions of them cheapens their existence. You might as well be using these guys.

 Arcsquad12 wrote:
I would change the Stormtroopers to Grenadiers or Hardened Veterans.

Munitorium Stormtroopers are the best baseline human infantry in the entire galaxy. They are even rarer than Space Marines. There are only ten thousand Munitorium Stormies in existence. To have millions of them cheapens their existence. You might as well be using these guys.

Good point. I meant to change all references to Grenadiers.

That excerpt. Good god, Word Salad is one thing, but then word salad with gratuitously overused German words as well?

So little said with so many words.

That entire exchange can be summed up thusly: A germangibberish ship arrives, is told that there are no records of it existing, then they dock.

And somehow you managed to make it almost unreadable to me. Random exposition in the middle of a paragraph explaining where the ships came from. The aforementioned abuse of german language. Next to no context allowing a person to understand what the hell is going on.

EDITING NEEDED BADLY.

 Arcsquad12 wrote:
EDITING NEEDED BADLY.

Yeah, it does. I'm no where near done, and that was just the first revision.

Random exposition in the middle of a paragraph explaining where the ships came from.

I see exactly where the problem is. I'll take it out. The whole purpose of the wiki is to avoid this sort of thing, by linking to the relevant article about the ship as soon as it's mentioned, explaining at that article, and being done, without the need to go off in the middle of the story.

That excerpt. Good god, Word Salad is one thing, but then word salad with gratuitously overused German words as well?

Were there any besides Ehrenstein and Steinburg?

EDIT: I realized I should point this out. Todth is also a big user of the German words. I don't feel I should deviate totally since I wasn't the creator of it.





Man versteht nicht einfach was dieses Plakat bedeutet.

So little said with so many words.

Yeah, I noticed. Part of it is that the width for stories is much narrower compared with the regular articles. The reason is to have more spacing and avoid the massive text walling that would result for a story of any reasonable length.

That entire exchange can be summed up thusly: A germangibberish ship arrives, is told that there are no records of it existing, then they dock.

That is about all I got to. It would probably be improved by the second point.

And somehow you managed to make it almost unreadable to me. The aforementioned abuse of german language. Next to no context allowing a person to understand what the hell is going on.

So the main thing to do here is to improve the background explanation of what is happening, without going off into anything off topic?