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2013/05/24 10:21:06
Subject: An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Chaplain with Hate to Spare
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I'm enjoying this a lot. 
Keep it up!
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2013/05/24 12:48:03
Subject: An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Lone Wolf Sentinel Pilot
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I honestly wasn't sure whether to add the flashback bit. Felt a bit info-dumpy when I was writing it. But I wanted to put it in, and I couldn't think of a better spot...
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Driven away from WH40K by rules bloat and the expense of keeping up, now interested in smaller model count games and anything with nifty mechanics. |
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2013/05/24 15:48:21
Subject: An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Chaplain with Hate to Spare
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 Fezman wrote:I honestly wasn't sure whether to add the flashback bit. Felt a bit info-dumpy when I was writing it. But I wanted to put it in, and I couldn't think of a better spot...
It was well placed. Reminiscence is important for character development and often it's nice for readers to be fed some info rather than be speculating...
Plus, I have a feeling the events of 2 years ago will come to have some new significance with the current events in the story at some point. 
Would be interesting to see a post from Jayanti's perspective soon, see what she's getting up to, especially if it's only a veiled tease... leaving us intrigued and curious but in the dark. 
Maybe her spy will contact her... 
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2013/05/26 23:01:54
Subject: Re:An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Lone Wolf Sentinel Pilot
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This message was edited 25 times. Last update was at 2013/08/21 21:34:38
Driven away from WH40K by rules bloat and the expense of keeping up, now interested in smaller model count games and anything with nifty mechanics. |
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2013/05/27 17:13:06
Subject: Re:An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Lone Wolf Sentinel Pilot
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This message was edited 9 times. Last update was at 2013/08/21 21:34:44
Driven away from WH40K by rules bloat and the expense of keeping up, now interested in smaller model count games and anything with nifty mechanics. |
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2013/05/27 21:41:22
Subject: Re:An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Lone Wolf Sentinel Pilot
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This message was edited 4 times. Last update was at 2013/08/21 21:34:50
Driven away from WH40K by rules bloat and the expense of keeping up, now interested in smaller model count games and anything with nifty mechanics. |
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2013/05/27 22:06:05
Subject: An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Terrifying Doombull
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A fine read as always, and I must say, Most of the Inqusitors in this story are rather douchy, But well done and well told
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2013/05/28 21:11:21
Subject: Re:An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Lone Wolf Sentinel Pilot
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[Redacted for major overhaul]
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This message was edited 9 times. Last update was at 2013/08/21 21:34:57
Driven away from WH40K by rules bloat and the expense of keeping up, now interested in smaller model count games and anything with nifty mechanics. |
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2013/05/29 22:20:08
Subject: An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Rough Rider with Boomstick
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ΙI really like your depiction of Inquisitorial manoeuvering and backstabing. And to offer a little critcism your portrail of Henghist was a little rushed. I don't think a Radical would be so brazen with his views on xenos in the very middle of the Tricorn!
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You shouldn't be worried about the one bullet with your name on it, Boldric. You should be worried about the ones labelled "to whom it may concern"-from Blackadder goes Forth!
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2013/05/30 12:37:24
Subject: An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Lone Wolf Sentinel Pilot
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OK, I am currently re-writing a lot of this. I had been making it up as I went along but I want it to turn into something bigger and more carefully structured, which means a bit more planning and tidying up is going to be necessary.
I want the character of Henghist and his faction to be a much more important part of the story so I will be giving them an overhaul. At the minute his role can be summed up as "get mentioned,turn up, die."
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2013/05/31 03:02:10
Subject: An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Conniving Informer
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Managed to race through the first bit in my lunch work break. I like the protagonist's inner thoughts and the homour of the writing so I'll be back for more (after getting on the beers tonight) to get further into this one!
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2013/05/31 23:30:55
Subject: An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Lone Wolf Sentinel Pilot
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First four posts have been extensively rewritten! More dialogue, character descriptions and scene-setting added.
Unfortunately this means there may be some temporary plot inconsistencies with the later posts, but I'm working on them too.
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2013/06/01 23:24:20
Subject: An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Lone Wolf Sentinel Pilot
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Everything has been brought up to date, yay! I'm much happier with it now. If you've already read this far, there have been a few new scenes added should you wish to re-read up to here. It's the "Director's Cut," if you like.
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This message was edited 1 time. Last update was at 2013/06/02 00:37:56
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2013/06/07 19:27:12
Subject: Re:An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Lone Wolf Sentinel Pilot
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This message was edited 4 times. Last update was at 2013/08/21 21:35:05
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2013/06/07 21:44:07
Subject: Re:An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Lone Wolf Sentinel Pilot
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2013/06/08 16:05:41
Subject: An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Terrifying Doombull
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Now this I did really enjoy, you seem to be evolving a much more steady grip on the story. And also on the characters you so lovingly portray in it
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2013/06/09 18:36:02
Subject: Re:An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Lone Wolf Sentinel Pilot
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This message was edited 3 times. Last update was at 2013/08/21 21:35:21
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2013/06/09 20:18:03
Subject: An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Terrifying Doombull
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A nice enw addition, may I ask that you have a read of my own works? When you find the time?
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2013/06/27 20:26:15
Subject: Re:An Inquisitor's Memoir
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Calm Celestian
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With only a few spelling errors to nitpick I must say this was a great read and look forward to anything else you may type up. If anything it makes me want to reread the  series again. INTRIGUE!!
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My Sisters of Battle Thread
https://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/list/783053.page
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