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Here is my fluff for my BA successor chapter. try to make a sang guard heavy army with dante count-as

The Sky-Warden are a chapter founded from the Blood Angels. they were founded by marines that took a bit too much joy in flying, it seemed to heighten their bloodlust and frenzy, when it was time for the Blood Angels to create a new chapter these marines quickly bonded to create a new chapter.
(I have trouble with that part unsure how chapters are really made.)
Their first action was upon the chaos invaded lava planet of Mil'dar. The natives of the planet called these flying marines: the sky-wardens, and so out of pride for their first battle as a chapter they called themselves the Sky-Wardens. They took up Mil'dar as their homeworld. it is a planet of lava seas, where only the mountains are livable.
The chapter utilizes JPs only, there are no devestators or tanks due to how on their homeworld such things are useless, and due to their addiction of sorts to the sky.They are not stupid though, focusing their battleplans on quick lightening like attacks that target key locations, this is to completely demoralize and confuse the enemy. They are not into decorative armor thinking that this breeds egotistic thoughts and arrogance which is frowned upon. Teamwork and self-sacrifice are instead idolized. Their commanders and specialists (chaplains, libbies, etc) are dressed-up in other to spread moral in imperial troops and marines.
Rank is shown in the color of the helmet: white for sanguinary priests, gold for assault marines, and black for High-brothers. Most of the chapter is made up of High-Brothers which are almost like veterans. These High-Brothers wear armor that mimics power armor but has more foundations and drug enhancers in order to give the wearer more endurance (2+ armor save), they also use bolt pistols with shotgun like shells that are filled with lava from the planet, this breaks apart into little pieces of lava (like shotgun shrapnel) this is highly deadly (the str 4 ap 4 stormbolter weapons sang guard have). There are a great amount of sang priests in the army, and these marines hold the most important drugs and combat enhancers, they let them out into the air, and the specialized power armor sucks up these drugs giving the marines more endurance.
There are no Death Company in the chapter, this is not to say that the blac rage doesn't effect this chapter just as much. They are treated differently. The marines taken up by the black rage are saved in sleep till they are brought back to their homeworld. Once they are back at the homework they are stripped and put onto shrines throughout the planet. scouts travel to these temples on land speeders of crude JPs (common on the planet) and must battle the death company with whatever weapons the prospect brought. The scouts who live can become marines. This is extremely hard, but at the same time the death company has become crazed from the lack of people around and the horrifying dreams.



does this sound good?

You realize there is a section of dakka specifically set aside for Chapter Fluff and Stories right? (Well any home written Fiction) And that this section is not for fan made stuff.

The section you are looking for is, http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/forums/show/9.page

Sounds all right.

New chapters are founded when the High lords of terra feel like making a new chapter, the adeptious mechanious (I am sure it spelled this wrong but am too lazy to hunt for the correct spelling) takes existing gene seed from the founding chapter and uses it to produce new transplantable organs.

After that I'm not sure what happens to be honest. I don't know if the adepious mechanious selects potential neophytes or who trains them. I don't think (in most cases) that a certain group in an existing chapter would split off to form a new chapter.

I could be wrong on any of the above points, I'm not a fluff wizard.

I wanted feedback, and since this isn't a story i thought it was meant to be put here since I want to know how it works with background.

Ok, anyway. I'm not too sure how training new Chapters goes but I'm not sure they send a chunk of the original Chapter to do it and then stay there. After looking on lexicanum.com I have been unable to find much on it, until there is more just keep trying to smooth out anything you think needs smoothing out.

Well I can always change it to them just being made of a new chapter from the lava planet.

does anyone have any feedback on my fluff?

I also was wondering if anyone had any ideas for a dred for this army, maybe one that woule be more flying or grav like rather than a normal walker?

I like it.
The tactics they use make sense and you could posibly put something about some companies also training extensively for boardings on space ships.
But putting a marine in the grip of black rage against a normal adolescent human is a lot unfair and slightly impossible for the human i would have thought.

I do thought that it may be a bit too hard, that's why I was thinking it would be a test for Scouts rather than wanna-be scouts, does that make sense?


i agree a company has to be focused on boarding actions!!

As long as it is not long the Trials of the Sword. Like my chapter its fine.
But it is a little over the top with the Human vs Black Rage Space marine. No one could do that. unless if it was a squad based thing.

Sageheart wrote:I do thought that it may be a bit too hard, that's why I was thinking it would be a test for Scouts rather than wanna-be scouts, does that make sense?


i agree a company has to be focused on boarding actions!!

If the test is for a socut squad then sure it should be fine.
I'm glad you think likewise about the boarding company

huh, so maybe a scout squad would be better, i thought it wouldn't be so hard since he would be naked, with only his hands to fight with, plus his insanity would be intensified by being alone for so long that he may not be in the best mindset for fighting. make sense?
a squad could work thou

Yeah but being guano crazy would improve his chances IMO also he would have far more skill than the squad even after they have gone through all they have though combined they would have a good chance of taking him down though they would take casualties which would be the purpose of the trial, to weed out the weak.

I like that idea, a squad could work out well!

MOVE TO DAKKA FICTION please sorry!


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is that how i get somethiing moved, don't mean to be insulting. if not please tell me!