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Congratulations for the win!
The report is written nicely and it is very detailed, even to the point it strains my eyes and brains to read and remember those numbers. They are too prevalent here, one should only write down meaningful casualties and such. For example, it isn't really interesting in the long run to know just how many armour saves you passed this turn, unless you saved ludicrous amounts of them. But even then, it does not add much depth to the report. Of course, it is rather different issue when dealing with like one squad of five terminators (even in this report there's a whole lot of them) but the reporter should always consider the effect on the reader.
You should also restructure your report and possible future reports because now it seems there's text on every other line. By this I mean you should form paragraphs and make different turns into more coherent blocks of text. To me Ailaros' reports persist as one of the best formats there are but I think you weren't quite as prepared for this. Check them.
Anyway, it is always interesting to read reports with such "rare" armies and especially with army lists differing from the normal. Good job!
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