I like some parts of it a lot, and some parts of it not so much.
Good:
Dreadnought bit integration. I like the back engine parts.
Pose is good. I might raise the
CCW arm a little bit more but the legs are great. It looks bulky but lithe.
Left arm flamer is really nice.
Not so hot:
The strut things on the sides of the cannon seem superfluous. They are good bitz but not optimally placed where they are, in my opinion.
The Crozius. I'm not sure how it could be improved exactly but I'm definitely not feeling it as is (except the flamer, that's kinda neat).
On the whole, I like it a lot more then the actual Dreadnight, and I'm feeling the idea, I just think the execution in those few places can really tighten it up.
Have you picked a head for this yet? Adding a iron halo, a real spiky one, might add to it.
edit: OK, I know how I'd improve the Crozius. I'd try and get some parts from
this scenery kit. Lots of the
GW scenery kits have neat little bitz in them that might work, but those corner struts cut down would work nicely,
imo.