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Here's a story that I'm currently working on.

Advice and input for ideas or style is appreciated.

Death of Aun'O Hai'fal'dar

After reading it, I have a few questions.

1) Do you think that I should have the paragraph about what eventually happens at the beginning to create interest, or do you think that it would be better to leave the xenos enemies as a surprise?
2) How much more description of the aftermath of the death of the Ethereal should I describe?

It's about an inquisition raid against the Eldar who are making an alliance with unidentified xenos (Tau) that then leads to the death of leading Ethereal of a distant Tau Sept, triggering a war. I'm adding this here, in case I didn't give enough information yet in the story itself since I'm just starting it.

Really like the story, i think you have some real potential as a writer. Good luck!

Thanks. I just updated it.