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The men were screaming around him, yet the middle-aged hulking commissar fought on. His left reddish sideburn was burning, yet he screamed with defiance. "Face me you Empror-damned devils!!" As he side-stepped from a blow from a Wych. A quick reaction with his bolt pistol made the beautiful yet perverted creature disappear into a mist of bone, intestines and blood spraying the man and the dark building. Yet the battle was only beginning. More Xenos crossed the wall, behind him the commissar heard the screams of the men and women under his command getting slaughtered, in the corner of his eyes, he saw it, blood, guts, and body-parts getting thrown sky-high from the mock-trench in the ruins of the hive-city. The dull greyish light made it more eerily with the moans and yells of pain coming in a sort of perverted symphony. It made the skin of the back of the commissar run cold. He shrugged. Yet as he preferred to move on from his position he saw her.

She was strikingly beautiful. Long raven-black hair flowing everywhere, a bit over 2 meter tall about the height of him, her black lips were curled into a lithe sensual grin, her milky-white skin was oh so pleasant to look at, she was dressed just in a bikini, black leathery. Yet she was completely unholy as she licked a blade, enjoying the mixed blood-flow of the Arbitrators she had just slaughtered. They laid in a mixed heap of body-parts, torsos and heads, dismembered with a perverted skill, then rearranged into falling at bodies differently. None matching the previous owner, bringing a sort of vile order into the chaos of the broken bodies laying there, most leaning in strange positions leaning against the dark walls of a ruined spire where once millions of people have lived, now they were all rubble.

"Vile creature!!" The commissar barked, in his left hand his bolter snapped, yet the Xeno with amazing grace sidestepped, the man fired off more shots as he advanced rapidly towards her, while the bolter snapped again and again and again. The Xeno woman smiled infuriating as she dodged his bolts, the casings clanked as they fell deeply into the mud, behind the advancing commissar while it splashed around him. She even found the time to catch the last speeding bolt-shell between her blades, stopping it in it's track. Smiling with glee and pride as she did, watching the slight surprise that passed over the chiseled face of the commissar just as his look returned to outright fury.

She then extended one thrust of her sword. The power-sword of the commissar sang as he struck it. It was a ruse, then the second sword rose, the man felt nothing at first, then he realized. The throat was cut. He dropped his weapons as his hands went for the throat, his face changed expression from anger to desperation. Yet she was much faster, he felt a gentle kiss at his jugulars, he looked into the cold unfeeling eyes of the Wych as she sucked out his blood and life-force. It happened so quickly. Few seconds. Next he felt her kick his already limp body into the air, lasgun and heavy bolter fire tore it to shreds. Yet his head remained whole, he landed in the dirty, muddy ditch his troops had dug. He saw her then, she slaughtered the men before he could blink, he blinked. Then his life faded...

And thus ended the glorious life of Lord-Commissar Ludwig van Holden.

gak..

I meant that in a good way.

Thank you, I guess.

I assume you mean gak shall be pronounced by the commissar as he died, or am I way off?

It was referred to 'I just witnessed something awesome and was left speechless.'

Thanks, sorry for the misinterpretation. And I'm glad you liked it.

I like it, brief and simple. Very well written. I look forward to reading more of your stuff.

Thanks, more is coming up, I just have to imagine it up first, and get it penned down.