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Hye ya'll! Just started writing some fluff for my SW army, please feel free to leave C&C!

The Purgin of Ordiss

“My Lord, a message just got through to you from Inquisitor Klaven, off the highest urgency.”
Wolf Lord Thyrnir stopped for a moment in his steps. This soon?
“Send it through to me, brother Egill.”
“Roger that, sir.”
Wolf Lord Thyrnir kept walking towards his seat and strapped back down as the message began sending from the flight deck of the Thunderhawk Odin’s Revenge to the comm piece in his ear.

*****STARTING COMMUNICATION SEQUENCE *****

Commander Thyrnir Wolfslayer, I am pleased to have received your message of confirmation on a successful atmosphere penetration on the planet Ortiss. Now, you and the Space Marines you command have already been briefed but then we received the message from you concerning the details of your mission. After a lot of thinking we have decided that it is better for you to know what is coming in great detail or it might be the death of you.

The briefing hologram said that the Ork Mob you are to destroy is in fact a new, mutated breed of Orks, one that we have not encountered before. It was mentioned that the Orks in question are stronger and more dangerous than ever before. Let me explain to you why that is, per your request.

The last we heard from the Imperial Guard regiment stationed in the mining colony of Ortiss was not very encouraging news. They sent an Auspex feed from a security observation tower just outside the walls showing the mayhem these beasts are capable of inflicting.

I realize that by the time you hear this you will be landing or already slaying these green skins in the name of the Emperor so I’ll get to the point. The Orks have been infected. And along with it new Tyranid threat has arisen, and this time its not in the form of any gigantic beast, but from a single tiny organism that seems to pray on the Orks making them even more feral and destructive than before. We know this because only recently there had been reports of them wandering alone, unarmed and running like they had their life to lose, in the middle of the canyons. After ridding them from this world the guardsmen who looked over the body’s found them to look odd, not to mention the Orks behavior, so they brought it back and our scientists looked it over. What they found was a tiny alien life form that they could immediately identify as a Tyranid organism. It’s jaws where lodged in the green skins membrane but instead of teeth they found long tentacles with some sort of mildly erosive fluid leaking out the tip but other than that it resembled a minimized version of a single ripper. Upon its removal the creature was dead, but the discoverers of this new larva where certain this explained the twenty-odd Orks found running around in the middle of nowhere, each one alone, unarmed and seemingly without direction or purpose.

Then the incidents got completely out of control. Within weeks, all the squadrons who had been assigned on patrol outside the mining outposts walls had vanished without trace, and so had the rescue crew’s that had been sent out to locate them. When the massive horde of this new enemy finally appeared before the walls, the Imperial Guards didn’t stand a chance.

However, the evidence we have from the autopsies made, reports filed and the recording we received, this is what I can tell you for certain. These beasts have turned into completely mindless, feral ravagers. They have even lost their already handicapped ability to use and make weapons; they attack only with their hands, feet and teeth. We can also be certain that they are now faster than ever before, jumping distances as far as half the way up the defensive walls of the mining colony. They have grown even stronger, the larva like Tyranid supposedly injecting them with growth hormones, seeing as they climbed over the rest of the walls and according to reports it took a headshot or multiple rounds, even more than usual, to put them to the ground. Beware, Wolf Lord Thyrnir, for even though your Space Wolf strike force has a long saga of successful and mighty victories this is a new level of threat no man has faced before.

I expect the threat to be eliminated without mercy or doubt. Report to me at every chance you get. Purge them from this world.

*****ENDING COMMUNICATION SEQUENCE*****

Hello and first of let me welcome you to the Dakka fiction realm

Now to your fluff, first of all I think The Purging of Ordiss would be a more fitting term, secondly I think you would be better of using the correct terms for the ranks within your army. a good source for this would be the SW codex.
So instead of Commander Thyrnir I would use Wolf Lord whom is the equivalent of a captain in others chapters.
And well as for security camera I would use a Auspex feed or something like that.

But all in all I really liked it! bra jobba!

 Trondheim wrote:
Hello and first of let me welcome you to the Dakka fiction realm

Now to your fluff, first of all I think The Purging of Ordiss would be a more fitting term, secondly I think you would be better of using the correct terms for the ranks within your army. a good source for this would be the SW codex.
So instead of Commander Thyrnir I would use Wolf Lord whom is the equivalent of a captain in others chapters.
And well as for security camera I would use a Auspex feed or something like that.

But all in all I really liked it! bra jobba!

Thank you for the warm welcome!

I agree that the Purging of Ordiss would be a more fitting term, I'll change it with the next entry. I had it on the tip of my tongue but it never came out(English is my second language..) so I put apocalypse instead. Now, I should have been able to just open my SW codex or the 40k rulebook, but seeing as they are not at my house but at my friends(he hosts all the games and I left it there ) I couldn't, and that explains the Wolf Lord thing to. I'm a little new to SW and haven't yet gotten myself much into their formation but now I can edit that. Thank you.

Well no problem, and the pleasure is all mine! Anyone from Iceland is a much welcomed addition to Dakka! And yea I can see your problems

Trondheim has it

 lordrevege wrote:
Trondheim has it

Huh?

Interesting, but short. We didn't even get to read them making planetfall and pick over the wrecked mining colony for tracks to hunt their prey.