Blood Claws are pretty bad, same price as
GH's with no boltguns,
bs 3
ws 3 and gakky charge rules unless you pay for an independent character to put with them. Unless you have a fluff reason to play them, just don't.
Might want a
LRC instead of a Redeemer, just because if you plan to disembark and assault, there isn't much room for the turrets to get templates down, plus you have to be in melta range for them to be good outside of dropping off dudes, which is where
LRs don't want to be.
Might want a 2nd Rune Priest instead of a Wolf Priest for prescience(I'm assuming he's with the
LR squad of
GHs.) You'll reroll 1's in the first round of combat with wolf standard anyway so his preferred enemy rule won't be that game breaking while presience will let you reroll all the 2's and 3s you miss. Plus force weapons are nice, Crozius's arern't so much anymore.
Everything else looks good. I like it.