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I'm working on what's going to be a novel when I add all the parts of it together. Right now it's a series of stories that take place along the length of the storyline about Kevin's relationship with Alex. Kevin is extremely desperate, and he has a very strong crush and obsession with his friend Alex. In the beginning in late high school, he pleads with her to take his virginity and also tries to convince her to be his girlfriend. In college, she finds him a girlfriend a few times, but relationships never develop. Alex suspects that this is because he is too focused on being with her. In late college, he starts to become obsessed with her again.

Alex is from Germany, and Kevin has a really weird interest in German stuff. He also writes weird stories that people interpret as being about her. Kevin is also really creepy. Alex has the potential to be very attractive, but never is. Kevin is still convinced that she's

Here's a short story that takes place at a Games Workshop that's fairly self contained.

http://blog.sashaweb.net/kevin-freaks-out-at-games-workshop-and-embarrasses-alex/

Here's a longer story that's not yet completely finished that shows what Kevin's relationship with Alex and what his issues are like.

http://blog.sashaweb.net/kevins-relationship-with-alex/

I also have pictures.

I got this far

Heinrich had been working on, when he was extremely nationalistic as a reaction to antisemitism. Kevin had no such excuse for having a boner for Germany.

And closed it. Swing and a miss Inquisitor, try again. Maybe something that is far, far removed from these topics. Mix it up. And work on your proof reading, I don't know why they are soaking their models in sugar and salt, and I don't really want to know.

Spellchecking is something you should look into, unless "brining models to the store" is something new and hip.

Also, I think I broke my neck from all the induced cringing.

I actually flicked through the first one and yeah...those themes are definitely on the wrong side of M for dakka I reckon.

On another note, I don't think I've regretted reading something more. That includes news stories linked in the OT.

BrookM wrote:Spellchecking is something you should look into, unless "brining models to the store" is something new and hip.

Also, I think I broke my neck from all the induced cringing.

motyak wrote:I actually flicked through the first one and yeah...those themes are definitely on the wrong side of M for dakka I reckon.

I said that Kevin is a really creepy character. You read the description, right?

You aren't supposed to describe someone out of a story. If it's a serial then fine because the description can come from previous parts but description and characterisation is done in a story.
You also do an incredible amount of telling instead of showing which is pretty much the opposite you are supposed to do.
I'm not going to address the storyline, because I do not have the time,,,

The only thing I enjoyed was the enraged Patrick ogre. He is supposed to be an ogre right? The picture is kinda fuzzy.

Please keep your barely disguised sexual fantasties for your own time. Your corrupting my sweet nature which everyone knows I have. right. Right!

Good grief man! What sort of hellish place do you find all these folks? And yes, TheManwiththeplan. We all know you are not pure of hearth, more like Irish of hearth

That will do.