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Hey guys, after the feedback on the mandragora assault I decided to scrap it. This new series includes necrons (I'm using the codex this time!)
Against the tau of Cano'var. hope you enjoy!

The tau outpost was in serious disarray. Fire warriors were rushing to the armoury, preparing for the large and inevitable assault that would be a massacre.
"Sir, the exterior sentry turrets have been deactivated!" The technician shouted to Commander Novastorm.
"AA units are down sir!" Shouted one of the other technicians.
Novastorm new from recent experiences that this could just be a system glitch, but he wasn't taking any chances.
"Send a team to check it out, I don't want anything getting through the perimeter fence." Novastorm replied calmly.

Meanwhile...

On the Necron mothership, the small fleet of doom scythes and night scythes were ready for launch. They just needed to wait until overlord Vîtokh gave the order to attack.

\+TRANSMISSION+/

Catacomb Air Force, you are go for launch. Kill any resistance on site. Make sure that the outpost is destroyed and any hostages are to be transported to Inevitables teleportation frequency for Imotekh.

"This is night scythe 14, all systems online, launching in three, two, one, launch." The night scythes pilot said into his communications mic.


That's it for part one, hope it's improved since my first story,give feedback,bye!

Not bad. A couple suggestions. Instead of the technician... Write a technician... and try not to repeat yourself. Example here: ...the technician shouted... ...shouted one of the other technicians... Maybe: "Sir the exterior sentry turrets have been deactivated!" a technician shouted to Commander Novastorm. (like the name btw)
"AA units are down sir!" called another.
One more thing, Novastorm knew not new.
Well, that's my opinion, good luck keep writing!