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The Doom Fists

Origins
During an unknown founding between the 33rd and 34 millennium the Doom Fist Chapter was commissioned. After the massive amount of military might lost in the Pale Wasting, the High Lords of Terra commissioned 11 new chapters to replace those which were lost. The Doom Fists were one of these 11 chapters. The records of the exact founding date have been lost.

Home World
On the outer edge of the Ultima Segmentum, near the Eastern Fringe, lies the cold ocean world of Meshegan. Within its wind swept islands and roaring seas keep the citizens of Meshegan toil to extract minerals and an abundance of fish for the 6 massive hives on planet. The other 13 planets within the Sub-Sector Vitroa fall within the protection of the Doom Fist Chapter and serve as additional recruiting grounds. The Doom Fist Chapter recruits manly from the population of 75 million from those families and individuals who show promise on Meshega.

Deep within the largest mountain, on the largest island, lies the fortress monastery Anarba where citizens make pilgrimages to honor and respect their protectors and Angels whom they rarely see. During this time it is not uncommon for families to leave children behind, hoping the Legion will take them and make them Space Marines. More often than not these children die or become serfs rather than a glorious Space Marine.

Combat Doctrine
Being from the Imperial Fist lineage, the bolter holds the closest place in a Doom Fists' heart. The Doom Fists Legion despises any trace of Xeno and will go to great lengths to ensure no taint or spread happens in their watch. Such as the Battle of Betteis Pass when the Legion held back a Dark Eldar raiding party and recaptured lost slaves. The Legion could not risk any sort of taint, believing that the slaves had both denounced their humanity when giving up in the face of danger and now having Xenos influence on them, and burned all slaves and traces of the Dark Eldar in the Pass before moving on.

The Doom Fists believe in scorched earth tactics, it is better to purge a world and start over than to let a world fall to anything but humanity. When the situation allows the chapter will unleash devastating orbital bombardments before deploying any marines other than scouts. Once the earth has been ground to a pulp the Fists will deploy in overwhelming ground force, most often by Rhino and certain elite elements by drop pod. Once the Marines are deployed, the Captains will set the many devastator squads to the rear and use overwhelming bolter fire to take key objectives. Rarely will the Doom Fists deploy the newly acquired Centurion armor.
Organization

The Doom Fists currently reside below Codex strength due to the loss of the 6th company in the Battle for Vorlorus. Deployed to defend the world of Vorlorus the 6th company came under constant attack from Tyranids when those they were defending turned out to be a genestealer cult. Though the Master of Sanctity tried to rally his troops they were over run and completely destroyed, even the battle cruiser Helmoc’s Fire was destroyed.

Beliefs
Doom Fists Chapter honors the all Holy Emperor, believing him to be the greatest leader but not a God. All Doom Fists believe one day the true hero of humanity will return to them and unite all successors the Imperial Fists into a Holy crusade.
During the founding of Meshega the colonists had to purge out a colony of feral Orks who went by the name of Pointa Spears. It took decades of cleansing of the planet to fully remove the Ork stain and all citizens grew to hate any Xenos. To many young men had died, children slaughtered and resources burned by the brutal Spears that to this day young kids are told scary stories of large green monsters coming to steal the teeth of children.

Gene-seed
The Doom Fists were formed from Dorns geneseed, through the Death Strike Chapter. Before the Death Strike’s losses during the 13th Black Crusade, they were tasked with founding the Doom Fists. During this time the Doom Fist chapter learned the lessons of Exterminatus in the Ulik Sector, how to deal with impossible odds in the Verdan Wars and the Doom Fists developed camaraderie with the Iron Hands.

Battle-cry
Faugh a ballagh(Clear the Way)-Chapter Battlecry


Notable Campaigns

Fleet
5th Company Lunar Class Cruiser- Righteousfury

Nothing?

I actually rather liked the part about the voices :-)

If I may: what you have here is definitely within the fluff, and that's good...but I fear you might have gone a little *too* within the established norm of 40k. Right now they read like a very normal chapter of Imperial Fists, which is fine, but it doesn't make the background all that interesting to read.

I would suggest making a few very minor additions to what you have along some the following lines:

1) add some unique unit/aspect that seems a bit out of place, or at least unusual for space marines ("We have some weird cult of plasma taking hold, because of the high degree of sun-worshipers we recruit.")

2) add some sort of real strife/problem/flaw that they have, so that they gain a little more individual character ("Our plasma cult inevitably ends up melting faces/bodies/pets and that's becoming kinda a problem!")

3) some serious foe putting their chapter to the test, or perhaps some sort of history of them "struggling" to create more conflict ("We were doing just find until the high priest of plasma accidentally opened a portal in our systems sun! Now a bunch of scary demons/necrons/puppies are pouring out of it and it's all our fault!")

Just a few little suggestions :-) Really there is nothing "wrong" with it as it stands though.

Our I'm stealing that.

Chapter Master Harbo slammed his fist into the stone table in the center of The Hall of Voices with a force which would have shattered a mortal man’s arm. Captain Whetilo didn’t flinch; he was used to his leader’s rage, as it is within all sons of Dorn. “We have received a signal of help from the Sword of Democles system’s astropaths and we will respond. We will not allow the Xenos to taint another world!” bellowed Harbo. “We will smite those who wish to harm the Emperor’s children, we will cure those who will not fight for themselves and we will purge that which remains!” Whetilo took it all in, the cold concrete walls, the deep navy blue of his brother’s pauldrons, the banners of past glory, all waiting for his moment. “Brother Captain Whetilo, are you and the fifth prepared to honor and glorify our beloved Chapter in this mission?”

“I am my Lord, I humbly ask to have squads of the 10th join us. Our neophytes need seasoning if they are to replace our fallen brothers of the 6th.” The Chapter Master smiled, Whetilo knew he had asked the right question. If the chapter was to rebuild its strength then the 10th would need every opportunity to hone their skills. “Of course my Captain, I look forward to you bringing back those worthy of joining our ranks. Say your goodbyes, for some of you will return with the Apothecary. Faugh a ballagh!”

” Faugh a ballagh!”

Whetilo crossed his arms across his chest in a salute, spun on his heels and left. The Sword of Democles would soon feel the Doom Fists’ glory.