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I love the universe and theme of Warhammer 40k since I was child. I don't play the tabletop game but I instead play Dawn of War trilogy. I'm also not a strong writer and my grammar isn't great. So I do apologize for my atrocious typing. I decided to join the forum for hopes of creating fluff with other people or discussing lore of warhammer 40k. I'm a noblebright...I just want to get that across. I really enjoy the concept of people overcoming obstacles becoming a Mary sue (jk) in warhammer 40k dispute the grimdark and gritty themes of warhammer.

My end of goal of this year is to create a typical complex background story or actually real story for my own and anyone entertainment, it's about a Xeno Ordo inquisitor name Callian The Scorn and his retinue of misfits being involve in exodite world known as Felwinter. The story doesn't mainly revolve around the inquisitor but his silent and stoic right hand man Shi hario (the name can be change anytime.) . Obviously, you can tell by the name his ethnicity is of a Asian descendant. I'm not striving to create a anime arc or create a bland Mary sue. I thought it would be a cool idea to explore different ethnicity of warhammer 40k.

Shi hario a descendant of a long forgotten feudal world that places honor and loyalty above all exemplified one of the old ancient Terran warrior culture long forgotten now. He witness how the world of Felwinter and the exodites tear apart his Inquisition retinue slowly as they travel to investigate a ancient city of the exodites in highest mountains of Felwinter known as Lon's Gate. Inquisitor Callian determine to learn secret of Lon's Gate and other secrets it might hold.

Name: Felwinter
Segmentum: Segmentum Pacificus
Sector: Classified
Subsector: Classified
System: Classified
Population: Classified
Affiliation: Classified
Class: Ice world

Overview
Felwinter a heavily forested world cover in snow all around the world. It's another world where only the strong survive and those who fail to adapt dies. It’s wildlife consists of apex predators and other animals that arrived from Frenis after the Great Crusade, The Frensian wildlife were introduced by group of pirates who planned to use Felwinter as a exotic hunting ground; Fenrisian wolves, drakes, great white bears, fenrisian mammoths, and frensian elks were brought in from Frenis. The introduction of the frensian wildlife to Felwinter almost replace the original wildlife. Felwinter's remaining wildlife that survived were the felwinter dinosaurs, felwinter white ravens, and the felwinter great white lions.

The Felwinter’s original inhabitants are the exodites who rule and roam the world. They are directly and spiritually connected to the world just like the craftworld eldars, The world houses the spirits of all fallen exodites in Felwinter. Those fallen exodites spirits are deeply rooted in the world, they have everlasting influence on felwinter growth and condition. When the introduction of the fenrisian animals came to Felwinter from the pirates. The exodites call it “The Time of the Taming” where they spent millenniums cultivating and learning to tame most of frensian wildlife and same time removing the pirates from the world.The frensian wildlife multiply tenfold almost replacing the existing wildlife, but the exodites learn to tame the frenzy wolves, drakes, white bears, and elks. The exodites manage to bring stability back to Felwinter’s environment and wildlife. The frensian wildlife after millenniums still retain the same physical traits and attributes of their native homeworld.

The exodites call themselves the Frost Athains (lords), but before they title themselves the Frost Athains. They were once divided into two large tribes a millennium ago over a dispute whether the exodites should integrate more technology in their lifestyles.

This dispute was controversial for the Felwinter’s exodites. The two tribes were split one calling themselves the Cor’sum who supported integration for more technology, while the other tribe call Sa’ume rejected the idea. The sa’ume became a nomadic tribe exploring the in and out of felwinter. While Cor’sum begin creating a magnificent city filled with technology that could help cope with the harsh winters. Though, the felwinter’s exodites learn to tame wildlife of the world. It still didn’t stop the predators from hunting the exodites especially a megasaurus.

The Cor’sum and Sa’ume continue on with their lifestyle, the Cor’sum had turn Felwinter’s largest and highest mountain into a city naming it Lon’olace. Lon’olace attaining similar architecture of a eldar craftworld city but still having a tribal aspect to it. The Cor’sum had a pleasant lifestyle and slowly relinquishing the old exodites way of life. The Cor’sum steadily working and progressing their technology and lifestyle just like their craftworld counterpart.

The Sa’ume on other hand also progress in their lifestyle and culture. They begin taming and riding the fenrisian wolves as their mounts. Since, felwinter’s dinosaurs, drakes, great white bears, and the lions live closer to the mountains where Cor’sum live. While fenrisian wolves can be find almost everywhere in Felwinter hunting down mammoths and elks, the wolves had became a trademark in Sa’ume tribe. A Sa’ume tribesman was always seen with a wolf on his side. Sa’ume became fierce riders and knew every details about Felwinter.

The Sa’ume and Cor’sum both bitter and disappointed at each other choices change when the arrival of a necron dystany.

I hit a writer block after this and I need research more on the necron lore to progress the development of the world and my story. I really want feedback on how I can improve or change the fluff on my world. All this background story is subject to change. I just wanted create a world that has snowy temperament and wolves. For the exodites I would imagine their culture of a hybrid of between viking and Mongolian. I really would like if people provided their own two cent and addon to this little project of mine or share there own aspirations of their own created worlds or stories.

Thanks Dakka and people who took their time to read this heretic's post .

So far, so good. There were a few spelling and grammar mistakes but it was still quite readable. The world you're creating is intriguing and that's an important part. The idea of a world's habitat being drastically changed by human actions is a good one; it has just the right mix of real history, reasonable logic and applied on a 40k scale. 40k also suffers from some whitewashing despite having a variety of planets and cultures, so don't be afraid to have different ethnicity groups in your stories.

Look at the Fiction section and read some stories if you're looking for inspiration. You can also share your own stories there when you've finished putting something together.

I quite enjoyed reading that acctualy, and as Mr Nobody said you are of on good footing. As mentioned, dont be afraid to invent and creat your own world and take on things.

Also do read things in the fiction sub formum here on Dakka

Oh! I just finished repling tothis exact question in your Introductions thread! I posted a response to this already, there. Please do let me know if it helped at all.

Good luck