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Made in us
Decrepit Dakkanaut





Hyperspace

From the weakness of the mind, Omnissiah save us...
The latest subject was strapped to the surgical slab before the robed Tech-Priest, the ancient machines that would turn this mere human into a superhuman laid out on a large, reinforced table next to the slab. The subject was covered in faint marks, invisible to a mere human eye, but to the Tech-Priest, it was blatant as sunlight. Instructions on where to cut, benedictions, and identifying marks. Satisfied that all of the information was correct, the Tech-Priest extended a whirring saw, and sliced open the top of the subject's head, exposing the brain. A small mechandendrite extended from the apparatus suspended over the slab, cutting though the emotional center of the brain and paralyzing the centers that allowed for rebellious thought. The entire emotional center was lifted clear, and the arm retracted. The Priest lifted one of the cold machines on the table, and manipulated it until it began to spit out a clear fiber. Another mechandendrite carefully moved the neural weaver into position, laying a fine network of artificial nerves that immediately fused with the biological brain tissue. Next, the Priest picked up a series of circular metal devices, and plugged them into the thin neural weave. With a small soldering iron, he fused the neural plugs with the weave.

From the lies of the Antipath, circuit perserve us...
Working quickly, he picked up a small chip, and plugged it into the largest neural plug. He laid it into the hole created by the removal of the Amygdala. A green light appeared on a status indicator. Several more of these devices were procured, each of different sizes and colors, and plugged into the neural plugs that studded the subject's remaining brain. When all of the plugs were filled, the appendages of the Tech-Priest retracted. They came back down a second later. Two bonesaws unceremoniously amputated both legs below the knee. In the hollow where the kneecaps once were, the Priest implanted two more, larger plugs. He screwed small cylinders into the side of the plugs and whispered a prayer. They lit up green.

From the rage of the Beast, iron protect us...
Two gleaming brass and steel legs easily slotted into the knee-plugs, their sculpted brass kneecaps obscuring the mechanical horror that lay beneath. The Priest experimentally stimulated the brain of the subject remotely, and the legs moved, as if swimming in air.
The chest was opened by another silver saw, and the lungs removed. They were replaced by a single, complicated-looking apparatus with pipes that connected to the esophagus and to the subject's back. A metal plate was welded in place over the ribs to protect the vital organs. Another tube was extended from the stomach to the rear of the upper espohagus, creating a capped hole in the back of the neck. Satisfied, the Priest extended yet another mechandendrite, and fused the ribs and skin back together, sealing the chest.


From the temptations of the Fleshlord, silica cleanse us...
The Priest moved his attentions downward. The genitals were removed with a swish of scalpel, and replaced with an atmospheric sampling array. Moving upward again, the eyelids were also excised with the shining scalpel, and goggle-like augmetics fused to the face in their place. The Priest removed the tear-glands with a miniscule mechandendrite, and the darting apparatus above implanted two tanks filled with holy unguents and oils instead. With a quiet gurgling sound, the goggles filled up. An almost inaudible moan escaped from the subject on the table. The apparatus above picked up a curved metal plate, carefully aligned with with the missing upper skull, and fused it to the bone. A tiny antenna extended from a hole in the side.

From the ravages of the Destroyer, anima shield us...
The Priest began to chant in both Lingua-Technis and High Gothic, sprinkling holy oils over the new outer augmetics and armor-plugs.
"What was flesh is now made one with the Omnissiah. Mortal being, tested by the Machine-God, becoming new again, is becoming one with the Holy Machine. May the Omnissiah process your data, and the galaxy tremble before your metallic footfalls."

Machine God set us free...
With a mental push, the chains on the slab lifted, and the subject awoken by a shot of adrenaline, ready to walk off to the chambers where he would be equipped and armored. The Tech-Priest raised a dataslate, and quickly typed the new Skitarius' designation.

Julius-Beta-11.

Omnissiah...


Spoiler:

Certainly a different style of writing. I aim to cover more of Julius-Beta-11s experiences in the future, from lowly Skitarius, to Alpha, then to Ruststalker. Feedback, as always, is appreciated.

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Peregrine - If you like the army buy it, and don't worry about what one random person on the internet thinks.
 
   
Made in gb
Mekboy Hammerin' Somethin'





Papua New Guinea

Having just read an article about a proposed head transplant in 2017 I found this to be a very interesting story to read right after. I always imagine that these sorts of procedures take place in completely unsterile environments because the medicine and science available can so easily overcome the requirement for a clean operating theatre.

When people are debating the ethical, moral and social problems of transplants today I always find these sorts of stories pretty fun, especially with the way you've handled this, with the process being more like tuning up an engine to fully modifying a human being; the remote testing of the legs in particular put in mind of revving an engine by tugging on the accelerator cable. Good stuff.

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Be Vigilant!
BEHAVE!

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Made in no
Terrifying Doombull





Hefnaheim

Well done! I dare say this was a good and a good take on the whole Adeptus Mech dealings with creating thier soldiers and what not. But by the dark gods! Castrating the poor soul! Now that is cruel
   
Made in us
Decrepit Dakkanaut





Hyperspace

 Trondheim wrote:
Well done! I dare say this was a good and a good take on the whole Adeptus Mech dealings with creating thier soldiers and what not. But by the dark gods! Castrating the poor soul! Now that is cruel

Thanks!
I suppose I was half poking fun at the AdMech for doing everything in the "cruelest" (MOST EFFICIENT, PRAISE THE OMNISSIAH) way possible, and half wondering where all these bulky sensor arrays were supposed to go, so I did it the most "insane" (EFFICIENT) manner possible.



Peregrine - If you like the army buy it, and don't worry about what one random person on the internet thinks.
 
   
Made in us
Master Shaper




Gargant Hunting

 Verviedi wrote:
[i]
The genitals were removed with a swish of scalpel


Well, never knew Bob Barker led the AdMech

Irishpeacockz-Blackjack needs a pay raise for being the welcomer to the crusade
Palleus-Write a school essay about Kroot! Pride. Prejudice. And Cannibalsim. 
   
Made in us
Decrepit Dakkanaut





Hyperspace

2BlackJack1 wrote:
 Verviedi wrote:
[i]
The genitals were removed with a swish of scalpel


Well, never knew Bob Barker led the AdMech

I do not understand the reference.

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Peregrine - If you like the army buy it, and don't worry about what one random person on the internet thinks.
 
   
Made in us
Master Shaper




Gargant Hunting

After episodes of The Price is Right he would say "please neuter or spay your cats and dogs", or something along those lines. Admittedly, it is a bit obscure of a reference, as he retired a decent amount of years ago, and The Price is Right probably isn't too popular of a game show compared to other ones.

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Irishpeacockz-Blackjack needs a pay raise for being the welcomer to the crusade
Palleus-Write a school essay about Kroot! Pride. Prejudice. And Cannibalsim. 
   
Made in be
Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit





In the Warp, getting trolled by Tactical_Spam, AKA TZEENTCH INCARNATE

Interesting stuff! At first I thought he was being turned into a servitor (which would explain some of the more.... questionable parts of the surgery), but that was just my brain skipping over the 'turning him into a superhuman' line in the beginning

Overall, this was a pretty good read, you really managed to describe the entire surgery in a clear and easy-to-follow manner; makes me wonder what Julius-Beta-11's going to be put through once he becomes an Alpha or Ruststalker though... (something tells me being castrated isn't the worst thing that'll happen to him)

Keep up the good work!



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Kharne the Befriender:Took him seven years but he got it wrangled down

 
   
Made in us
Decrepit Dakkanaut





Hyperspace

Thanks!

Read "Memories". It's the end of his story.

I will absolutely write a tale from the perspective of some imperial (or Mechanicus!) menial watching them fight an enemy, which will focus on their inhumanity in greater detail.

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Peregrine - If you like the army buy it, and don't worry about what one random person on the internet thinks.
 
   
Made in us
Master Shaper




Gargant Hunting

Both this and memories are pretty good stories, and I would gladly reccomend them looking for a twist on the AdMech.

Irishpeacockz-Blackjack needs a pay raise for being the welcomer to the crusade
Palleus-Write a school essay about Kroot! Pride. Prejudice. And Cannibalsim. 
   
Made in us
Decrepit Dakkanaut





Hyperspace

2BlackJack1 wrote:
Both this and memories are pretty good stories, and I would gladly reccomend them looking for a twist on the AdMech.

Thanks! I'm glad you like my take on them.




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