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So, please tell me if theres anything that needs changing (major fluff contradictions for example) and if theres any incorrect grammar.

Oh, and tell me what you thin k of it ;D

Im kinda proud of it.

A’rk ‘the one eye’ has risen from a Youngblood to legend among the Bladebeak tribe of necromunda. It all begun three years ago, in the sewage delta at ‘cigarette end. A’rk had been hunting a particularly elusive prey for several days through the refuse marsh. All Youngblood’s must slay and bring back the body of its kill to the tribe unaided to be accepted into the carnivores. It was a rite of passage. A’rk, being an impetuous youth, had gone looking for the biggest, and baddest Giant spider in the region, which had been dubbed ‘Swift Fang’ by the Kroot for its deadly tendency to attack and withdraw fast. He hadn’t seen it once, but its trail of destruction was as clear as day. Mutilated settlers, giant spiders and rats lay discarded uneaten across the delta, and on the third evening of tracking it through the marshes, he spied upon its lair. A giant webbed cocoon nestled between an ancient human tank, and a rotten and twisted tree. A’rk moved closer, inch by inch. He could just see the spider’s legs poking out from behind a Web. Silently, the Youngblood unslung his rifle, and loaded a shot. He took aim, and held his breath. This was it, he would become a carnivore for slaying this beast, no doubt about that. However, something else, something from another world, was on the prowl that night, and it had got to Swift fang first. If A’rk hadn’t been so focused, he would have noticed the stench of spider ichor, and the panic pheromones that wafted through the still air around the nest. A bipedal creature, twice the size of even A’rk stepped out from the gloom, and fixed it’s yellow eyes upon the Kroot. The creature had two sets of arms, and was covered in a thick carapace. It was a Genestealer, and it had found its next victim. A’rk fired before the creature pounced, managing to score a hit to the heart. Any other creature would have been fatally wounded, but the ‘stealer kept coming, sailing through the air and pinning A’rk to the ground, the rifle spinning out of his hand. The creature clawed frantically at him, and in a few short seconds A’rk’s face was mutilated. The Kroot screeched its rage and threw the beast of with his legs. The ‘stealer crashed into the web, and found itself ensnared. A’rk charged howling.

The four armed monstrosity untangled itself in time and managed to deflect vicious kick to the face with a swat of its rending claws. However, A’rk was in a terrible blood frenzy and leapt onto the creatures back. Holding onto the ridged carapace, he tried to strangle the alien with his hands. However, with disdain, the Genestealer threw him from his purchase, and closed in for the kill. A’rk had been massively winded, spots and blinking lights flashed in front of his eyes. He was only dimly aware the Creature had clambered onto him, and prepared to impregnate him. However, A’rk was no normal Kroot, and as the beast leaned in, it left its neck unprotected. In a snapshot decision, A’rk lunged forwards and bit into the throat. The creature screamed in agony, and pulled back, but A’rk would not let go. He held on for dear life, and every movement the thrashing ‘stealer made, it tore the wound larger. Thick green ichor poured from the open wound and splashed over the Kroot’s face. Upon contact with his bloody scars, it sizzled and burned, causing A’rk unbearable pain, but still he held on. With a final decision, the Kroot snapped his jaws shut, ripping a three kilo chunk of flesh free. The Genestealer staggered backwards, all four of its arms grabbing the mortal injury. It shook violently, lost it’s balance, and crumpled, dead upon the floor. A’rk then made a foolish decision that made him a legend. He swallowed the Tyranid Flesh. A’rk dragged his kill back to the tribe. It took him four days, due to the gene stealers size, and the injuries he had sustained. By the time he returned, all the other Youngblood’s that had taken the passage had been inducted into the carnivores. He returned, limping heavily, splattered in blood, with the slain Genestealer dragging behind him. The tribe were shocked. They had thought him dead. They were also cautious. Dramatic changes to A’rk’s DNA were also starting to become visible, and he began to show tell tale signs of mutation.

However, his kill compensated for the curse he had laid upon himself and he was welcome into the carnivores. He quickly rose through the ranks, as this DNA mutated him further. He became stronger, faster and more agile as the months passed, and eventually he arose as the pack leader.

With his new found power, he petitioned to the shaper council to explore the world of necromunda, and bring glory to his tribe. The shaper’s, wary of his new form and the implications if he mated, duly accepted, and A’rk moved into necromunda, where he would find his fortune…

I'm pretty sure Kroot eating Tyranid equals bad times. Not to mention, Kroot don't evolve that quickly, the process of eating to change genes is something done over generations, not within the span of a few weeks.

The novel "For the Emperor" shows what happens when Kroot want to eat tyranid flesh: The shaper smells the corruption and declares the flesh taboo, eaten flesh would be regurgulated. A Kroot corrupted by Tyranid DNA would be instantly killed to save the kindred and the entire race. And for a good reason:

Genestealer DNA is as aggressive as Kroot DNA, both trying to dominate each other. The result is unpredictable but certainly unstable and unwanted by Kroot, hitting the race where they are most vulnerable. As a side effect it will be a beacon for the next Tyranid fleet and the poor victim will become part of a Genestealer cult and lose all will. Not the stuff heroes are made from. Sorry, pal.

BTW you might be interested in the current, fan-made Kodex Kroot with good background information:
http://trobarts.customer.netspace.net.au/5th_ed_kroot_mercenaries_army_list_by_kompletely_kroot_V5.85.pdf

Bolloks.

Back to the drawing board i suppose.

I liked it. I'd just repost it, the only changes being that he didn't swallow it, didn't mutate, and just rose through the ranks - gained support - challenged the current pack leader, either lost and was banished to the city with his followers, or took charge, and lead his followers into the city. Problemo solved.

Darkvoidof40k wrote:I liked it. I'd just repost it, the only changes being that he didn't swallow it, didn't mutate, and just rose through the ranks - gained support - challenged the current pack leader, either lost and was banished to the city with his followers, or took charge, and lead his followers into the city. Problemo solved.

This to be honest would work great.

True, but my Gang leader- never mind.

Never mind what?

Maybe, rather than eating and mutating, he tore the rending claws and carapace from the 'stealer, and used them as a pair of knives and armour.

Just an idea though, do what you think is cool.

or, A'rk and his tribe have done such a terrible thing on Pech (the home world of kroot) that they got banished from pech. they found necromunda a nice and comfy place to stay, and they just don't care anymore what the elders say. They could be kind of a feral renegade clan. I think this will justify eating gene-stealers.

^
this idea remedies my problems.

Whats other peoples views of it though?

"... and started the first Genestealer cult on Necromunda, following their master as slaves without a will, waiting like sheep for the next Hive Fleet to absorb them!"

Hm. so know one likes the idea of a kroot munching some 'nid

Is anyone adverse to the leader killing a large 4 armed critter that can exchange its dna easily, but is in no way related to tyranids?

ghosty wrote:Hm. so know one likes the idea of a kroot munching some 'nid
Is anyone adverse to the leader killing a large 4 armed critter that can exchange its dna easily, but is in no way related to tyranids?

Every Genestealer Cult player loves your idea (except me, as I like Kroot too much).
No problem with some rare Kroot evolving to have an additional pair of cc arms, but if some victims absorb hostile DNA, the race has a problem and will try to kill the threat just to survive as a race. Just glueing on Genestealer arms is standard procedure to model Genestealer Cult though.

Keep in mind that humans have far less mobile DNA, but even they have strict incest taboos all over the world to avoid genetic degradation. For Kroot, such taboos are even more essential.

BTW have you read the background texts in Kodex Kroot? I think they make such things very clear.

My kroot leader is a lot more subtle than just a kroot with an extra pair of 'stealer arms.

Though in truth i did try and gs some small atrophied arms, but im just not that good with GS.

Anywho, Im having a mosey through Kodex Kroot at this point in time, so it should clear up my confusion.

Do kroot have houses btw?

Kodex Kroot will answer that
But yes, they had cities once.
Dawn of War features one current Kroot barrack:



BTW, I use this toy as my mobile Kroot camp

colour me intrigued.

Do they nest or anything? I always imagined them living in like nests with bridges linking them, like endor.