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purplefood wrote:

Asherian Command wrote:

Mukkin'About wrote:Yep, this is great work. Gives me an idea of what kinda stuff i'd need to come up with to do my own!

I am actually going to do a little story. Of Tyrion and Cato Scarius who met each other and basically had a huge fight over an insult Cato said about Tyrion's beloved homeplanet.

Can i just say that's a bad idea?

Sure. I won't put it up XD. Its just an Idea. But It is in the fluff. My Chapter Literally hates the Ultramarines. Believing them to be flawed more than they know.

Asherian Command wrote:

purplefood wrote:

Asherian Command wrote:

Mukkin'About wrote:Yep, this is great work. Gives me an idea of what kinda stuff i'd need to come up with to do my own!

I am actually going to do a little story. Of Tyrion and Cato Scarius who met each other and basically had a huge fight over an insult Cato said about Tyrion's beloved homeplanet.

Can i just say that's a bad idea?

Sure. I won't put it up XD. Its just an Idea. But It is in the fluff. My Chapter Literally hates the Ultramarines. Believing them to be flawed more than they know.

And i'm sure he has a perfectly reasonable reason for that but it's always a bad idea to add an already defined 'super' character into your fluff.
It's like if i said my Wolf Lord killed beat Marneus Calgar up for being a blue hole. It basically looks like you have taken a predefined character and killed him off (or other) to make your character look better and in the end only makes him/she.it look Mary Sue

purplefood wrote:

Asherian Command wrote:

purplefood wrote:

Asherian Command wrote:

Mukkin'About wrote:Yep, this is great work. Gives me an idea of what kinda stuff i'd need to come up with to do my own!

I am actually going to do a little story. Of Tyrion and Cato Scarius who met each other and basically had a huge fight over an insult Cato said about Tyrion's beloved homeplanet.

Can i just say that's a bad idea?

Sure. I won't put it up XD. Its just an Idea. But It is in the fluff. My Chapter Literally hates the Ultramarines. Believing them to be flawed more than they know.

And i'm sure he has a perfectly reasonable reason for that but it's always a bad idea to add an already defined 'super' character into your fluff.
It's like if i said my Wolf Lord killed beat Marneus Calgar up for being a blue hole. It basically looks like you have taken a predefined character and killed him off (or other) to make your character look better and in the end only makes him/she.it look Mary Sue

Nah Cato owned Tyrion. Cato was just a giant douche that decided that he knew everything. Tyrion was super pissed and its Tyrion a pure Crusader at heart who so rageful sometimes it has gotten him the nickname "The Rager"
And plus its not like as if the two chapters like serving with each other. And plus Calgar probably just deleted the record so they aren't seen as douches by the galaxy.

New Lore!
Assault on Merianis

In a desert on Merianis, the shifting sands blew as the freezing winds of Merianis blew past the ruins of a once great city before the old night. A single Astrates claded in a Desert Camo stood watching the sands. His armor hiding him. His helmet which looked like a Crusaders helmet, was buckled to his belt. His blonde hair was flowing in the wind.

He looked out over the desert. His brown eyes scanning the desert. His symbol on his left shoulder marked him as a Wanderer. The Wanderer of the Galaxy. He smiled as the sun started to fade, the once blue sky was now a purplish red. Merianis was legendary for its sunsets.

The Wanderer Turned and jumped down from the building landing on the concreted ground. Cracking under the momentum of the falling Astrates. He smiled faintly as he saw two other Astrates of his same armor arrive from the shadows.

The two astrates were both high ranking. A Epistolary Librarian and a Librarian Captain. The two high ranking Astrates saluted him. The Librarian Captain spoke, "How was the sight of the sun-set Angel Bahram?"

Bahram nodded his simile still borne on his face. "It was worth the sight, I haven't seen this planet in ages, it is good to be home Captain Katzfiel. I think we should enjoy staying here on Merianis for the time being of course."

Captain Katzfiel was middle-aged by the looks of his face and had piercing blue eyes and brown hair, his scars were all cut across his face. Though his face was more like someone Crafted it like the ancient Terran Greeks Hellenistic period artists. On his armor were endowed with symbols of survival, all bearing marks of his survival of the destruction of the chapter.

Katzfiel eyes scanned Bahram looking into the very heart of his brother, seeing that Bahram had meant every word that he said.
Katzfiel nodded to the Librarian, Katzfiel spoke kindly. "It is finally good to be home I agree, but we are not here for the sights, we must beat that Damned First Knight. So that he doesn't find the artifacts on this planet of our chapter."

Bahram nodded, he had heard of the First Knights, of the Storm Crusaders, Collecting Artifacts of thought lost worlds, and using them for their own purposes. Bahram spat. "The Bastard won't get a chance. We will find the Artifacts first and return them for ourselves! They are ours to keep."

Bahrams ignorance stunned the Librarian such a thing to say about the Crusaders had stunned the librarian as he had once worked with a Captain of the Crusaders. Katzfiel waved the Librarian not to speak. Katzfiel continued as he updated Bahram on the situation. "There is also something here, I don't know what it is. But I feel like the Old Race, The Eldar, are here. I can feel them through this planet. They have done a great job of masking themselves."

Bahram sneered, "Bah, the chances of the Eldar being here are 0 to none!"
The Librarian looked at Bahram and shook his head. "If it was really that rare then how come we both sense?"

Bahram laughed. His tone was ignorant but he knew the Librarian was right. "Angel Bahram." Spoke Ketzfiel. "Prepare the Company for a defensive action."
Bahram saluted the Captain, turning towards the Wanderers encampment.

The Librarian looked concerned at Ketzfiel. "What bothers you so Captain?"

Ketzfiel looked at his brother, he spoke solemnly. "I don't know what to think, Tarot. But something here is blocking me. I can't really explain it. This is my home, but I just don't know what bothers me so. It feels so Different."

Tarot lifted his hand pondering on what his captain felt. He lifted his eyes on his captain, "I don't know what to think of this either. Lets tell the rest of the company, so that we do not regret it latter."


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You need to improve your grammar.

Yeah. I know :(

The Son's of the Phoenix
Chapter Master: Galis Torin
Geneseed: Storm Crusader
Manpower: 2,235
Founding: 7th Founding
Homeworld: Fleet Based. Recruits form the Naladinas system.
Current Activities: Crusading against a Ork Wagh! 500 Phoenixs are present.
Organization: Follows the Book of Ignatius.
Tactics: Crusading, Naval wars, Assaults,

History:
The Son's of the Phoenix are one of the largest fleet based chapters of the Storm Crusaders ever to exist. They are well known by many other chapters, and are also known across the southern imperium as experts at assaults and naval combat. The Son's of the Phoenix are so well trained they have entire 3 companies trained for boarding actions. The Son's of Phoenix like every other Storm Crusader Descendant split off the chapter and supply Guardians, and Alpha Squadron members. Like most of the Crusader Chapters they abide to the book of Ignatius and they also abide to Calnor Alrnia.

The Son's are very unquiely structured in that they have renamed the Guardians, They are named the Miles militis of Hawk. The guardians of the Son's of the Phoenix are created differently from the Crusaders.
_Yeah thats all I have for the chapter. Sadly not that much is written not even famous battles D:_

HELLO EVERYONE!
I Have finally Reached 3000 posts! Which means It is my Storm Crusaders number of marines and stuff. And as such I will be posting all of my work in progress stuff right now! AS soon as I find my cable it is a go for blue team! And the story is coming!
Just please comment about the other stuff for me so I can get better at writing!

Hey guys sorry its been so long life caught up to me and stuff. But I have been working on the Assault on Merianis I am just trying to find a good way to make some battle scenes and make it heart beating good and make it responsible as the Wanderers according to their fluff have 2 Reaver titans and I want to use one of them for the battle.

Captian Agro blocked strike after strike with his axe, such a weapon was unheard of to be used to parry blows. The Arena of the Strike Cruiser, the Emperors shields surrounded the arena watching the two Astrates fight in close combat. The second astrates wore Dark Green armor his hood covered his face barely, but he had a halberd that was twice the size of him. According to his marking on his shoulder pad, which was an hour-glass surrounded by fire. A First knight.

The steel Ceramite was shining from the lights above them it was a dull lighted room that the two combatants had been ready to fight in. The First Knight seemed almost completely flexible as Captain Agro lashed out with his axe swinging it, to catch his enemy off guard. The First knight dodged it with little to no effort. Captain Agro saw that the First Knight was off guard, finally as the last dodge left the first knight in a difficult position. Captain Agro lashed out with his free hand and grabbed the First Knights neck.

“Game Over Malanis.” Captain Agro spoke.
Malanis laughed, the first knight smiled. “Game over for you Captain Agro.”
Malanis kicked Agros hand out of the way free himself from the deadly grip. Malanis jumped over Captain Agro his halberd catching Captain Agro’s leg making him fall to the ground. Malanis spun the blade towards Captain Agros throat.
Captain Agro laughed. “It is game over for me then.”
Malanis bowed his head retreating his halberd. Knowing he had won.
Sergeant Aegeus laughed, but Leonidias grew red in the face.
Sergeant Aegeus shook his head to Leonidias.
“Leon, for the thrones sake! Do not do what you are thinking!”
Leon returned with, “Quite old one, just because you know what I think doesn’t mean I have to listen to you.”
Sergeant Aegeus shook his head knowing most of the things coming out of the young battle-brother were all so ignorant it was painful.
The Company of the Emperors Shields growled at the loss of the Captain in combat, but he was outmatched as the First Knight was older than all of them, and had served in more campaigns than the entire crew on the strike cruiser.
The Techmarine laughed his robotic laugh made it seem like there was a malfunctioning servitor, though it was obivious it was at Aegeus. He was sitting on the bench that the arena boasted but most of the Astrates usually stood, but those of a certain age sat knowing that It was a waste of energy to stand up for this. The Techmarine knew Aegeus and Leonidias since they arrived in the company but the hilarioty of the situation was too much for the techmarine not to laugh.
Leonidias stood tall and proud. (and ignorant). As the First knight bowed to leave.
Leonidias was about to speak when the First Knight spoke to Aegeus.
“Segerant Aegeus is it? Can you tell me why all of your chapter has such a hate for me? If you have something to say, say it to my gaking face!”

Leonidias spoke with as much hate as anyone Astrates would. “Oh REALLY?” Leonidias spat. “Alrighty you are a gaking Mother of Senoritiy! Your chapter is a bunch of Zealotious Moranic Green Skins!”
In the back ground Captain Agro slapped his face. And Aegeus spoke “Oh by the throne no.”
The First Knight laughed hardly. Seeing Leonidias as just a mislead youngling. “Leon is it? Let me tell you one thing Only one marine in my entire chapter meets that requirement and that Would be Captain Tyron.”
Agro nodded. Having met the Captain before. Captain Agro spoke. “That fits Captain Tyrons Personality very well it seems. It seems Leonidias was right for once.”
The entire assembly of marines laughed.
Aegeus finnaly spoke up. “And Leonidias, I know what you think but in all seriousness, Malanis here could probably tear you a new one. And rip your skull off and probably use it as a trophy for his armor.”
Malanis laughed slightly. “No, that would be an insult to my armor. For I cannot spill the blood of another Fellow friendly Astrates such as Leon here.”
Leon face grew bright red, with every single insult. He finally grew tired of this and walked out of the room. But not before the two magicinfiacnelty claded Astrates walked into the room. Aegeus glanced over to Captain Agro. “So are they?”
Agro nodded, the room grew silent. “They are the Guardians. The very elite of the Storm Crusaders.”
The Guardians waited for Malanis.
Malanis bowed to Agro. “Thanking you for letting me duel you, it was a honor. I shall be leaving for another system.”
Malanis turned and lifted his head nodding to the two guardians who walked with him down the hall way. Leonidias still stood at the doorway. His eyes filled with confusion.
“What the gak was that?”

Again check your spelling.
Also it's Ceramite.

purplefood wrote:Again check your spelling.
Also it's Ceramite.

opps. >.> <.<
>(>.<>

Hey guys I will be writing the Wanderers part soon just give me some time and I need people to read this stuff really really badly. As I need help with it.

Hey guys sorry for the delay been working on stuff.
Also Working on a few things like the Wanderers and the Daily Peon has requested my help, in their lore changes, and rules making. (Ironic)
Anyway I have 2 termiantor squads for the dusk guard and 1 combat squad and 1 tactical squad and 2 characters for the Wanderers. Which should be fun. And it also means I am half way done! I will test out some stuff first rules wise with Keltizifiel and rules with Captain Agro.

Alrighty I have question for all you lovelys. Sanguaniary guard + Death Company or Assualt squad + Tactical squad? And should i buy it from Amazon or the LGS?

-.- Anyway for christmas I got 3 tactical squads and 1 sternguard squad and 1 commander. So I am building the Wanderers portion of the Strike Force. Then I will go onto the Emperor's Shields. Any Suggestions of what to do with the Emperor's Shields?
If anyone still reads this?

I have written portions of the next part I am just getting really lazy in making the next chapter.

Been a while since I updated. I wrote this a couple of weeks ago but it still in its beta phase. Would like some help writing it.
Part 3

Bahram was followed by his Angel Knights, each one of them bearing unique features upon their shoulders.
The Desert like cameo of their’s shivered in the rising sun.
But the broken masonry dust was still layered upon them.
The amber skies above them shifted, as the eldar’s sleek craft flew over the bewildered marines.
The building they were situated in was once a office building for the former denizens of the planet of Merianis.
Bahram’s squad reeled as five eldar appearing like dust, elegantly walking to the building.
Bahram pulled out his combat knife from. “Warp spiders! 30 Meters!”
A shot whizzed past Bahram, which hit the poor unfortunate Angel Prince behind him. He roared with anticipation throwing his combat knife at the warp spider who shot the bolt.
The knife viciously tore through the Eldar’s helmet. He pulled out his saber off his back. Bahram saw the warp spiders appear behind him.
His squad immediately fired into the warp spiders, making many of them fall to the Wanderer’s guns.
The exarch charged Bahram, who was smiling at the destruction of the xeno’s creatures. The Exarch swiped with it’s twin claws, Bahram leaned away from the attack hitting only his shoulder plate.
His blade spinned as it met its mark on the alien’s chest, rippling through the wraithbone armor with little ease.

The Alien spat its defiance, as it fell to the concrete of the building.
Bahram spun his sword in victory of his fresh kill.
He spoke into the vox. “Angel Kaltzifiel, the enemy spiders and this postion are delt with. We shall return back to the government square in a matter of hours.”

Kaltzifiel responded on the vox. “Copy, Angel Bahram, you may return back to the square, we getting pounded at our position.”

Bahram laughed. “What can’t handle a bunch of cowardly aliens? I shall not only be back but my kill count shall be higher than yours.”

Kaltzifiel laughed through the vox, his youthful laugh, encouraged Bahram. “Yes Bahram, we shall see.”

Bahram clicked off the vox. He started to etch down on his shoulder the symbol for 25. “There we go, lets see if Kaltzifiel can beat my record.”
He smiled as he finished etching the symbol.

The rest of the Angel Knight squad started to load their specially designed bolters with a unique shells.
The medic of the squad stood over the body of the fallen Knight and performed the purification as he stabbed the medical device into the fallen knights’ body, sucking the invaluable object from its carrier.
The Angel Healer nodded his head to Bahram.

Bahram smiled. “We are going to a warzone.”

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Kaltzifiel opened his eyes as the warzone around him unfolded he perceived everything there faster than any other Commander, his psyker abilities made him see a situation faster than any other astrates captain.

Kaltzifiel saw a projectile heading towards him. He edged to move out of the way as the object according to him was moving slower than he was.

He ducked and real time resumed. His eyes seeing the lance had drained his ability to use it were limited.

His desert cameo armor was well decorated and he bore many awards from his campaigns.

He was still youthful, considering his life span of over 500 years. He couldn’t believe that he would have to come to this hell hole. Which was now ran by the Enigmatic eldar.

His entire company was sprinkled across the entire city. But they were slowly retreating back to the government building fortress.

Which in itself was well protected. He was still a half a block from it, and the eldar artillery was pounding on them.

He peered through the window of his current location, He was the only wanderer who was in this area.
He was searching for a trapped squad, but it turned out to be a trap. He thought how careless he was for letting himself be cornered like this alone and no back-up.
A single glimmer appeared in the corner of his eye.

The eldar guardians ran to cover as a plasma canon was fired upon their position incinerating a few of them to little more than ash.
A devastator squad of Wanderers had just arrived from the road. Apparently seeing that their Captain, was surrounded.
Kaltzifiel stood up, leaning against the wall of the former bank.
He strapped on his helmet and immediately he viewed the world differently. His sensors immediately felt motion behind him, he spun around to met his new assailants. His sword stretched out from him.

He grasped as he saw a squad of striking scorpions appear to try and defeat.

His open hand sparked with electricity.

His armor shimmered as his power over this electrical orb grew. The scorpions leapt at him, elegantly moving all around him he swept his sword across the neck of one and the other he hit with electricity the Scorpion wreathed in pain as it was destroyed by unnatural power. Immediately the Scorpion kin assaulted Kaltizfiel.

He barely had time to react but he flicked his wrist and the body of one exploded and the other charged at him unaffected by the warp power.

Kaltizfiel sword was held low as he struck a dueling pose as the charging Scorpion charged at him with an Exarch’s blade. Kaltizfiel leapt at the Scorpion, the two bashed each other.

Kaltizfiel dodged each attack, but even he couldn’t avoid the blade of the Exarch hitting his leg. The Exarch struck for killing stroke, but Kaltizfiel’s knife dropped from his knife holder into the captain’s hand stabbing it through the Exarchs head.

The Exarch’s body went limp as the knife struck right through it’s helmet. Kaltizfiel pulled his knife from the aliens throat and kicked the alien’s corpse across the room smashing into the former door.

Kaltizfiel looked at the mess he had caused and laughed seeing his job finished. The Devastator Squad Angel appeared at the doorway running towards Kaltizifiel.

The Angel spoke, “Angel Kaltizfiel! The Eldar have just let loose their titan! We need more than just our heavy weapons!”

Kaltizfiel nodded. He spoke into the vox. “Destiny of the Flame, we need our heavy! Alpha Zulu beta delta 12. We've got an enemy eldar titan that needs disposing of.”

Above them a giant pod crashed to earth unleashing a Reaver Titan painted in the glorious colors of the Wanderer's Chapter, its desert camo reflected in the sunlight.

The Angel next to Kaltizfiel smiled. "That will take care of that problem." '

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UPDATES??!?!?!?
Yeah my birthday was last week and as such I got a entire raven wing which means the Wanderer's chapter will now have bikes! I need a good idea of what type of style I should do the Wanderers? Anti Tank + anti troop and lack anti heavy armor as they are meant to fight my eldar.

The Wanderers Strike force.









Though i do not have my shots of the sternguard.

UPDATE heres what i have added. but I will stop posting if people don't post!

you have some nice looking marines!

Thanks I think I need to prime them lol.

Hello Guys. I was wondering should I put this in Dakka Fiction or keep it where it is?
Anyway I have some Grey Knights that will one day become the basis of the Custodes army that will be involved in the next Battle that will involve the Wanderers.

I have at least 24 Grey Knights now! Of they are the metal ones! I have
1 Brother Captain Terminator
5 terminators
8 Power Armored, with 1 incinerator.
10 Power Armored Grey Knights all halbrieds and 2 force swords.

It is in Dakka Fiction...

purplefood wrote:It is in Dakka Fiction...

oh opps lol.

OKAY BIG UPDATE!
*This has nothing to do with the Wanderers*

Heya guys here is my custom SternGuard Squad!

This SternGuard Squad has a Heavy Flamer, Combi Plasma, a Silenced Bolter, A Sarge with a Power Weapon, and a Bayonet Attached to a Bolter.
This is Angel Bahram's squad


And My brothers GREY KNIGHTS. As he doesn't want to get an account and gave me his grey knights to use. And they are very well painted.



These will become my future custodes! (Of course I need to repaint them or I could just leave them like this)

The Wanderers Lore Panel Part 2
-note this lore is experimental and I have only just recently come up with it. The Chapter now acts like a separate entity acting like special forces and basically recruiting from random planets.
The wanderers were once called the Knight's Legion. A secret within the chapter, the Knight's Legion were formerly one of the brightest and staunch warriors of the imperium. The Wanderers are now a shadow of their former selves as their chapter planet and their original head quarters staff were slaughtered. The chapter renamed itself the Wanderers as they felt that they would wander the universe to fight the enemies of the Imperium.
The Wanderers now organize themselves into Knight Hosts being around 30-50 Astartes. And the smallest version the Angelic Cell being around 10-29 Astartes. The largest and least common is the Grand Company 51-140 Astartes in grand total. The chapter has only 2 Grand Companies, 3 Knight Hosts, and 4 Angelic cells’ all consisting of different numbers that are randomized. The chapter currently has 450 members all of which is spread among the 3 organizations. The Chapter is lead by a Council called the Angel Princes, one of the most Notable is Captain Keltizifiel, or Prince Keltizifiel the Angel of the Flame.
The Wanderers have recently been involved in the third war of Armaggeddon. During the war they come across a particular chapter known by most as the Revilers, during this brief meeting the two chapters were described as hated enemies beyond equal measure almost to the brink of war.


Recent

The Wanderer committed 1 of its Grand Companies and 2 Knight Hosts to the War. They volunteered to aid the Black Templars, they are Lead by Chapter Master Gabriel. Chapter Master Gabriel was permitted to be apart of the War Council on the Black Templar’s capitol Battle Barge Eternal Crusader. After fighting in a battle where he claimed the head of an Ork Weird Chieftain and his technology (Which he destroyed completely after finding.) After it was found that he possessed psychic powers but only used it the Black Templars
The Chapter other activities were against the Order of the Bloody Hand, a renegade chapter. The Chapter has 1 grand company present with a Reaver Titan and 2 warhounds which were given to them to protect a valuable treasure on the planet. This Effort was lead by Angel Prince Keltizifiel and Librarian Priest Cassiel. Keltizifiel and his Grand Company were able to defeat the Eldar and the Order, with the help of the Storm Crusaders, Emperor’s Shields and Dusk Guard Chapters, that sent strike forces to aid the planet. The Wanderers also gained Merianis as a recruiting world even though the planet seemed to have no human populations after sending in a request to a nearby system the Storm Crusaders chapter sent a colony force to live in the system, and ceding the system to the Wanderers. Though the Merianis campaign took a heavy toll on the Wanderers for example the death of Cassiel gave a particular blow to the chapter. As Cassiel was a proven hero of the Chapter that was known to be strong headed and yet strong willed. It is only fitting his death was because of his strengths.

Another Wanderer Angel Prince Known as Gavreel, his close friend Techmarine Forcas and their Angelic Cell; which consisted of only 25 Astartes were positioned on the planet of Tinal IV an minor hive world, of strategic importance. The Wanderers arrived to find a planet completely at war. The PDF forces were almost completely obliterated by the invasion. Those that had survived were retreating. The enemy was a Chaos War-band lead by an Infamous Chaos Sorcerer, Crocell The Reaper. Gavreel and the Commissar Sam and Colonel David (known for knife fighting.) the three Commanders decided to fight together against the Chaos War-band which contained daemons, and chaos space marines alike.

For Many weeks the wanderers lead small attacks on the chaos supply lines crippling their use of super heavy vehicles. Which the wanderers used it to their advantage.

The siege of their main captiol city which laid firmly in the hands of the Imperium was besieged for months. Neither side seemed to gain ground.

Until Gavreel decided to use the chapters advanced weaponry (Which hadn't been used before hand) on the Chaos Space Marines. Utilizing this technology taken from Xenos Races the Wanderers used this weaponry to give their Space Marines advanced bolters making them act more of a sniper rifle than a automatic weapon.

With the siege at full back blown towards the chaos forces each of the wanderers picked off leaders and and heavy weapons alike from afar. Thus completing defeating the chaos force's support against armored vehicles.

The last remants of the Leman Russ PDF forces of Tinal which consisted of 50 leman russes broke through the encircling chaos forces. Slaughtering hundreds of cultists in their wake. With the enemy line broken, Gavreel and his Angelic Cell were able to bring their full force to bare on the Chaos Sorcerer who lead a retuine and was summoning daemons onto the world.

The two met in combat and Gavreel fought well but if it wasn't for his Techmarine Forcas he would of surely perished, delivering a bolter shell to the heart of Crocell. Crocell was left on the field as the two wanderers lead the rest of the forces to a victory of the siege.

After the Siege the imperial forces looked for the last remnant's of the chaos army, but with the arrival of a small contingent of another Angelic Cell lead by a Veteran Angel Bahram, he aided in defeating another contingent of forces.

But many days later a massive force of chaos forces appeared as if from nowhere, leading from the front was Chaos Lord Amduscius who lead the fore front of the entire chaos forces.

The Wanderers were contacted to retreat to another the once bustling city of Liberty Villa a once corrupted hive city that was saved a few weeks earlier by Veteran Angel Bahram and his squad mate Noremac who slaughtered the bustling school of cultists.

Lord Commissar David, took his PDF forces there to provide the Wanderers with a suitable aide as well. Gavreel and Forcas with the rest of the wanderers were able to bolster the defenses of the hive city.

Though to their suprise they saw a Daemon Prince also leading the chaos forces, (After a recon mission) it was soon revealed to them that Corcas had been resurrected by the chaos gods as a daemon prince as he still retained the same heraldry as he did in the battle before.

Though how this happened was not questioned, but only that the Daemon had to be destroyed and his forces dispersed. For a week the battle ensued till the wanderers heard word the Black Templars had sent a small contingent to aid the bewildered forces.

Gavreel and his forces defend the streets of Liberty, firing into the Chaos Space Marines while the PDF forces retreated to give the Wanderers suitable amounts of support from behind.

Veteran Angel Bahram seemed to win the day by placing a packed melta bombs onto the building in which stood an entire heavy support team of chaos forces. Though one of his squad mates Noremac died when activating the charges, that killed him, and stopped the formation of the Greater Daemon, a Champion of Chaos called Aithnic (A Champion of Slannessh) and a Chaos Summoner.

Gavreel had lost 10 astrates in the ensuing campaign, he knew that they could not defeat the Massive Chaos Warband by themselves, but hope came as a Black Templar force lead by Theamt a Castellan. The Black Templars has just made planetfall to aide the besieged forces. Theamt was equipped with Terminator armor and lead his Sword Brethren which then teleported onto the field where Gavreel and the last of his Angelic Cell were held up. (While Angel Bahram was busy facing a Chaos Cultist force.)

The Two commanders agreed to fight against the Daemon Prince in combat. The two Astrates lead the assualt, cutting through the Chaos Forces with steel, bolter, and sword. The Loyal Astrates forces finally reached The Daemon Prince. Alongside the Daemon Prince Stood 2 Greater Daemons. But Alongside them stood shadowy figures of Astrates claded in black and white armor. This gave the Astrates enough resolve to assault Corcell and his Greater Daemons. Gavreel jumped into the fray with his teleporter and Themat crashed through with both thunderhammers on hand to face Corcell. Gavreel and Theamt fought like heroes but it was Gavreel that cut the head of Corcell. The psychic lash banished the lesser daemons diminishing the chaos forces. The Shrouded Astartes then disappeared without a word.

The last of the chaos forces were slaughtered by the Black Templar forces. The Battle harden Commanders agreed to destroy the evidence of the chaos invasion. Gavreel and the last of his Angelic Host stayed to retrieve the fallen of their chapter and of the Loyal Imperial Guard that they served with. The Commissar Lord Sam was wounded in battle by a shot by a bolter shell from Chaos Space Marine. Colonel David literally unscathed compared to the others he had claimed the life of at least 1 chaos lord and his retinue by killing them with his knife and a hot shot lasgun.

Gavreel and his Friend Forcas found the last of their angelic cell one of their members had defected to nurgle as he had been left dieing by his Battle-Brothers (Though this only happened because he volunteered too.) He was blessed by nurgle to be a Greater Daemon of Nurgle. Gavreel and Forcas fought the beast until Forcas was consumed. Gavreel fought the daemon and placed the melta bomb that Forcas had given him before the battle, and banishing the Daemon back to the warp once it was spawned. Gavreel echoed the loss of his friend, and vowed to himself never to tell of the event he had witnessed, only to the Council. After this battle he was given a Knight Hosts. The Angelic cell which was renamed the Forcain Cell.

Angel Prince Gavreel was given a Hammer inscribed with the names of all his fallen brothers of the Battle of Tinal. He has lead many successful campaigns ever since against the Chaos Space Marines.

Commissar Sam Aas has kept the planet under order ever since the war.

Check your grammar Ash...

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Astartes not astrates.
Also, Commissar Sam and Colonel Dave?