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Hey guys thanks alot!

I will do as much as i can with your suggestions, I'm not sure how long it'll take but it'll get there and I think i might make them D.A successors and change the world envrioment more, The squads are each a small squad called a coven and they ritually eat an enemies spirit after battle? through the use of their chaplains?

Also i am in the midst of making a special character too, so look out for that. If you also have more ideas please feel free to PM me

Cheers,

Well the S.M.'s have a special irgan where they process the memories of a xenos brain when eaten and maybe your chapter's organ is changed and requires a ritual mantra before consumption (You are D.A. Successors! You love information!)

Name: The Coven.

Primarch: Lion El' Johnson

Warcry: "Only In Death You Will Find Salvation"

Specialty: Traitor Marines and The Fallen.

Chapter Master: Telric Valouris.

Chief Librarian: Manus Farin

Chief Chaplain: Gerric Manor

Chief Apothecary: Fulgris Goren.

Chief Techmarine: Adrium Inus

Homeworld: Severence XIY is a death world, It is covered in vast seas with islands about the size of Australia. Despite it being a water dominated world, They prefer flame and plasma based weaponry however they do have specialised waterbased teams along with all manners of specialised equipment for waterbased operations.

They rever flame and plasma based weaponry because they think that it has a purify effect on the enemy and it somehow re-news the eneys spirit and gives it back to the Emperor. The homeworld is currently in the midst of a civil war between those that want to embrace Father Nurgle and those that won't tolerate such insult to the Emperor.

The chapter holds a religious ceremony every that 100 years to revere their primarch and the Emperor, They revere The Lion like he is a god, almost to a heretical point.

The offical icon of the chapter is an upside down sword with a lit candle for the handgrip and they don the pre-heresy black with bone edging and dark green higlights and miscallenous parts, They are a very, secretive chapter, they will not remove their helmets outside their fortress monastery walls, and if they catch anything about the Fallen they will drop everyhting in order to find and hunt them down.

Their Omophgus organ is mutated and requires any xeno flesh to be ritually blessed and oiled and it is required to have a sacred chant from a chaplain before it can be properly eaten otherwise they will get extremely sick which lasts for a few months or possibly die.

Hope you like it and give some more feedback.

Very nice.

Seconded.

I intend to add more stories and characters later on and maybe some new weapons created soley for water based attacks.

What do you think about the water beased stuff? It's not too out there or is it possible?

@theRobotlol, Do you think it is possible for me to maybe include something about your homebrew CSM? I'd love to include something about them.

Cheers.

3Strike wrote:I intend to add more stories and characters later on and maybe some new weapons created soley for water based attacks.

What do you think about the water beased stuff? It's not too out there or is it possible?

@theRobotlol, Do you think it is possible for me to maybe include something about your homebrew CSM? I'd love to include something about them.

Cheers.

Ohh, yes please, that sounds intersting! How would you link them in?

If you would like I could add in my DIY chapter?? I need to reboot some fluff though.

@ JC, Sure i don't mind. just let me know and ill add it into the thread name.

@TheRobotLol, I'm not too sure actaully i was thinking of adding something along the lines of a freighters of my chapter continally get raided and attacked by your legion and maybe a special character gets captured.

3Strike wrote:@ JC, Sure i don't mind. just let me know and ill add it into the thread name.

@TheRobotLol, I'm not too sure actaully i was thinking of adding something along the lines of a freighters of my chapter continally get raided and attacked by your legion and maybe a special character gets captured.

That sounds very intersting. Please go ahead, I'l add something to my warband info when I reboot it soon.

Alrighty I will, Are there any characters you'd like me to include, special or other of your warband?

3Strike wrote:Alrighty I will, Are there any characters you'd like me to include, special or other of your warband?

Ooh, yes please,

The Chimeric lord, Lord of Nurgle, Voice and second in command of the Chimeric host. (Their ultimate leader is a dark secret)



And..

Lord Carrion, Khorne lord of the Chimeric host. Could be called the warbands' executioner and thrid in command (No pic as of yet WIP) (This guy is pretty much the fluff punching bag, so you can beat him in a fight of something big)

(And maybe throw in a mention of this guy..


Lol.

Not a problem, just working on a draft now, Maybe the beast could be a pet to the chimeric lord? Also does he actaully have a name besides the chimeric lord? ( just incase i missed something.)

3Strike wrote:Not a problem, just working on a draft now, Maybe the beast could be a pet to the chimeric lord? Also does he actaully have a name besides the chimeric lord? ( just incase i missed something.)

The pet idea sounds good, and only his closest guard know his true name (Lord Dominus, Mortalis Carrow)

Cool, would you prefer him to remain nameless or not? It's all up to you but be warned im not the world's best writer. lol

3Strike wrote:Cool, would you prefer him to remain nameless or not? It's all up to you but be warned im not the world's best writer. lol

Could be something like the higher-ups in your chapter know his true name, being that he is their enemy, but the rest and most of the imperium simply know him as the Chimeric lord.

Or something like that.

All right man, I'll keep that in mind, Similar to how only the higher ups know about the Fallen.

3Strike wrote:All right man, I'll keep that in mind, Similar to how only the higher ups know about the Fallen.

Yeh, that sounds good

Hopefully, it's a good story, I'm scared at how it'll turn out, i'll also be introducing Demichev, one of my first characters i created. beware he burns! lol

Sounds good

I cannot wait for your rebooted stuff!

I'm gonna do it as soon as I have some pics, so I can keep the thread going (unlike last one). Should be about 5/6 days at max

That's great,

I'm currently writing my story and i have barely a paragraph, i have really bad writer's block at the moment. D:

How's it coming?

Hmm maybe one of my Ghost teams could've helped you locate him or take him. Perhaps infiltrate their base/ship before hand and lower defences and you smooth right in?

Hey guys, the story is slowly, very slowly coming and I might save a ghost team for later as i've got most of the story planned out in my head and i am trying tostick to the plan and not going in over my head.lol

Alrighty cool cool

Here's some info on Demichev:

Demichev was born on Severence, He was chosen randomly from a family to become an astartes, However froma young age he was always getting into trouble for setting things alight and taking pride in his lovely work. He quickly rose in the ranks in a very short time to due to his quick thinking and often suicidal plans that work and even though he was a trouble maker, he always looked after his battle brothers no matter what, He used to be a captain of a assualt squad until he was severely injured from attempting to have a head on battle with a blood-thirster, he thought he was able to distract it long enough for his battle brothers to leave the battlefield however shortly after initating the fight, he swatted down in one feel swoop from the daemons hand. His company veteren quickly decided between leaving him to die or admit him to a dreadnought, he chose the latter becuase of the stubbornness and his willingness to die for his chapter. He is armed with a flamer and his ccw called flamebreather which has the abilty to insta-heat in which the blade glows red hot and is able to slice through the toughest of armor, it is a speciallay made weapon from salamanders chapter becuase he saved the life of one of their higher ups.

Tell me what you think ?

I like it How is the story coming?

It's coming very slowing between writer's block and personal issues, it might be more then a week before i finish it, i've only got a page or so down while also trying to add various other tidbits but we do have a few new characters.