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I just recently finished my tyranid prime from the other thread. Could you guys please critique and tell me how it looks?

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Edited by AgeOfEgos--we really don't need that type of comment.

Troll aside. Your model does indeed look unfinished. Lots of details have been left unfinished. Id say go back and finish the detail work and give it a wash

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Ps: what specific details do I need to fix?

I would suggest a thinned black wash for the red. Your red is too bright and shows not enough detail. Also a light gret directional drybrush for the feet and black areas. Maybe try purple with pink sidebrush for the tongue. Than get some kind of contrasting colors for light for the red areas like you did for blue and use that for highlights on the red areas.


Try something like that.

Also as a last thought. Parts of the sword and gun like the loops on the gun. You could use a different color somehow. Like to pull attention to it a bit while someone is looking at it.
Like the areas on the sword near its tip where it has that hole. Darken it or do something that will bring attention to that part of the sword and make it more distinct.

It's a good start, but unfortunately nowhere near a finished product. You should go back and paint the swords at the very least, since they are meant to be bone. Start with a light, yellowish brown like Vomit Brown, and then drybrush an ivory or bone color over that. It should be well within your skill level.

 bossfearless wrote:
It's a good start, but unfortunately nowhere near a finished product. You should go back and paint the swords at the very least, since they are meant to be bone. Start with a light, yellowish brown like Vomit Brown, and then drybrush an ivory or bone color over that. It should be well within your skill level.

Ok. is there anything that I could do with the deathspitter?

 Vasarto wrote:
your model looks like gak

Give up

You fail at life


go die in a fire.

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so basically would this work as a too do list.

Fix bonesword.
Fix teeth color
Fix deathspitter details
Fix tongue color.

Anything else I can do. I really want to improve.

Slow down on your painting is the best advice I can give.

The model looks more like it’s only at its base coat of colors, Troll aside keep working at it . Maybe look up some videos on basic highlighting techniques

Elcheapodeca wrote:
so basically would this work as a too do list.

Fix bonesword.
Fix teeth color
Fix deathspitter details
Fix tongue color.

Anything else I can do. I really want to improve.

You can condense that down to: detail work. Look hard at all the red bits and ask yourself: could/should this be another colour? Like others have said you've got some good base colours down, but not much else. I suggest for the bone swords that you do them in the same colour as the beasty's carapace.

Personally I would use some washes, then layer some more paint over the washes. It looks like you already have some dry-brushing going on and that is great!

For starters the red sections;
- use Devlan Mud (or some other brown coloured wash) and get it in all the creases, folds, crevices, etc...
- using the same red colour as the base, layer on top of the washed parts but do not paint the creases, folds, crevices (where the wash went...)
- use Red wash (or some other red coloured wash) and wash over all the red sections, the previously washed crevices will get even darker
- using the same red colour as before, highlight the ridges and raised sections first, then try to feather the red going into the creases, folds, crevices, etc... but being careful not to paint over the creases, folds, crevices, etc...
- using an orange colour, highlight the raised sections thinly (optional)
- using a yellow colour, highlight the very extreme tips of the raised sections (optional)

If you do not have washes you can always water down your paints, a good milky consistency is what I go for. Obviously don't go and water down the paint pot

Look forward to your progress

It's coming along. As mentioned a splash of wash or a bit more detail work wouldn't go amiss.

I think the biggest problem, though, is that it's not based yet. That's what makes it look unfinished to me. When you're done with the painting, glue a little sand and maybe some static grass on there or something, and it will make the mini look more polished and "finished".

In any case, you know how to do blocking properly, and I'm seeing a bit of drybrushing as well. And you don't have risibly thick paint or brushstrokes or mould lines. You're already at least half way to being a gold demon painter.

Is this any better? What spots can I still improve on?
So far I have
Repainted- bone swords and added some blood effects to the bone sword
Used Kislev flesh to highlight fleshly parts including tounge
Added a brown wash to the vents and the deathspitter.
Painted teeth black.
Planning on basing with agrellan earth.

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The carapace looks decent (the blue bit) its really hard to see any more than that (the pics seem blurry, and the lighting is shadowing the rest out.


Are you using a cell phone or an actual camera?

As for lighting try taking pics with a white background (a couple pieces of "fresh" printer paper will work)

If you are using an actual camera look for the "macro setting" (should have an Icon that looks like a little flower)

as for positioning for the picture try bracing the camera a bit to decrease movement that might be causing blur.

I second the comment that the quality of the photos themselves make it difficult to see the model clearly, and I would also suggest to use daylight to take your pictures (if possible) as opposed to the yellow lighting you've got at the moment. However, the model itself is definitely improved from the original photos with the work on the sword. The blue plates look pretty good as well

The paint job is getting better. I still think as others said a wash on the red would do very nicely. Also, there are little "cracks" or vent looking things in the skin, painting those a bright color like green and then washing them looks really good.

I tried to so the wash thing with warpstone green. Do you guys like it or should I try again with moot green.

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That looks great. It helps break up the solid red of the skin.

This looks far better now than before, just a little comment on the hosing on the gun you may want to touch up a bit with a drybrush of the original colour to define the recesses a bit more. Otherwise looking great

It's coming along to a nice tabletop standard. As the others have suggested, I strongly recommend giving your models a proper base.

It doesn't have to be complicated or hard to do, it can be as simple as gluing sand, gravel, bits of rock and bark, painting it and giving them a wash.

That way, it will give your models a much more completed look.