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I came up with the 1st part of a story, about the history on my Imperial guard regiment. I'm busy on fluff for them, check it out http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/list/319876.page

check the part of the Tharko rebellion for the basics.


hope you like the 1st chapter.

chapter 1 ---- Hard Landing

The mood was grim inside the valkyrie. Nobody wanted to do this, turn against their own kin. of course, they were told the Tharkans Rebelled, and by doing so they betrayed the Imperium. but still, nobody of the Khazk 17th Infantry wanted this. But they had jobs to do, to teach the Separatists a lesson, and by the Emperor, they would.

The squad had just taken their seats inside the landing craft. Sergeant Grier checked if his squad was secured tightly. The going wouldn't be without the Valkyrie almost shaking itself apart. So was Tharko's atmosphere.

The squad was silent, and when Sergeant Grier finished his check up, He told his squad to recite the litany of protection. As one, squad Echo of 3rd platoon started reciting the litany.

"Hey you done back there? The drop's in thirty seconds! strap yourself down Sergeant." The pilot's voice sounding through the cargo hold. "Hopper, make last minute checks on the controls, I want this to be an easy ride for 'The Joker'. And I don't want you puking on the floor, Echo!"

Sergeant Grier secured himself next to trooper Sevehk.

"good luck Sev, when the valk lands, I want you out as fast as possible, get to cover and meet up with the rest of Echo." Grier said to a 25 year old man with a small stubble on his chin and cheeks. " Did you hear that Echo? This is a combat drop, not a drop off at your holliday location!"

"15 seconds! I am not waiting for you Sergeant Grier!" the pilot's voice once again sounding through the back.

Silence.

"Hopper, start the countdown." said the pilot on a demanding tone.

"Drop in ten, nine, eight, zeven,...

" Remember your training Echo Squad." Grier trying to give some comforting words to the drop virgin guardsmen. "You'll see action for the first time today, act like Guardsmen and make your family proud! Make you regiment proud!"

...four, three, two, one...

...Release.

Sev's stomach suddenly felt like it smacked against his brains, as the Valkyrie seemed to crash down.

hundreds of Valkyries were released from the troop transports. the 17th and 60th infantry would make planetfall first, to make a beachhead for the 701st Armour.

"wooeeheaw!" The pilot yelled, apparently having the time of his life. Echo squad didn't share this, They were too busy not to puke. after 5 seconds of free fall, what seemed 5 minutes for Sev, The valkyries thrusters came online, and 'The Joker' headed for it's designated drop - zone.

"Two minutes to drop - zone." the man identified as Hopper said through the intercom in a calm voice.

The valkyrie started shaking violently. They must have entered the atmosphere now. Thought Sev. The valkyrie stopped shaking after a few moments, and Sev let out a long sigh.

"Keep it together, you drop virgins!" Yelled Grier. "Unstrap yourself, put on your goggles, rebreather unit and mask!"

Mask...a bag with an oval hole in it to look through. how could this possibly be a mask. Sev concluded.

The squad obeyed, and were ready just before Hopper's voice sounded again

" thirty seconds to drop zone." His voice calm as ever.

Almost now...In a few more seconds I'm not a drop virgin anymore. everything is going to be....... Sev tried to calm himself as suddenly the valkyrie started shaking again. Vibration? or probably just the wind. His hopes were shattered as Hopper's ever calm voice sounded again.

" Anti-Air fire."

with that, Sev let out another long sigh. He could hear the increasing sound of explosions outside. He knew by now that the enemy was well armed. This added to his concerns.

"Target spotted, Hopper open fire on that gun emplacement."

Hopper opened fire with the missile pods. Sev couldn't see anything, but he did hear an explosion and the calm words from Hopper. "Target down." Drop zone in sight."

A few more moments went by until the Valkyrie slowed down, and started landing. The valkyrie shook one more time, this time as it landed.

Echo squad all stood up before the ramp, when it opened. Echo squad left 'the Joker' as they ran out to cover, Sergeant Grier leading the way.

Sev followed suit, but with his mind someplace else. 'I made it, I'm not a drop virgin anymore. And I actually survived the landing!'

Gunfire drew Sev back to the place where his attention was most needed.

'Oh yeah, I still have a war to survive.'

I liked it, write more soon.

I will.

on this here page.

I still need to come up with a better name.


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Part 2 of Hard Landing.

Sev almost lost track his squad with all that daydreaming. Bullets flew everywhere. Sev didn't see the enemy yet. The valkyrie landed in an open square, and then left off, back to the carrier in orbit. The Tharkans had built barricades to take cover behind in preperation to the inevitable assault. But the missile assault of 'the joker' made the defenders to withdraw out of the open, and into the safety of the buildings encircling the square.

Sev's squad had reached the cover of the baricades. Sev took cover as last man, earning him some unkind words from Sergeant Grier.

"Why the Feth did they drop us off here, Emperor's teeth?!" Trooper Weitz demanded, taking cover as the Tharkans fired towards the baricades. Lasfire raked against the pieces of rusting protection.

"Orders, you Puke head!" Grier yelled. "We need to secure this site. This square is big enough to park two Valks next to eachother. We clear this square, then reinforcemets will show up. And I'm talking about armour!"

A lasbeam flew past Grier's head.

"gak, enough talking, more killing!" was his reply to this. "Weitz, Rick, Laper, Hirque, stay here and give coverng fire. The rest with me. We take that small building there on the right, we move up from there. On me. Shaky, aim straight with that flamer!"

Imediatly, 4 men started their covering fire, and as the enemy fire dwindled, Grier, Sev and the others sped out towards the building on their far right. Grier was the first to reach cover in front of the building. Sev got there third. Trooper Hep was the last, but he never got there. Hep ley there in the middle of the open. down, but still not dead, Hep Yelled in anguish. His belly was hit by a couple of lasbeams.

Sev wanted to get him to safety, but he was held back by Grier, who swung him towards the closed door.

"Break it!" Grier ordered. " Shaky follow his arse."

Sev rammed the door with his foot. It gave way, and Sev threw himself out of harmes way. Then Shaky ran in firing his flamer. Sceams of pain could be heard outside. Shaky yelled the all clear sign, and the rest entered the building. Sev entered first, and saw three burning. Tharkans on the floor still moving, still screaming. Shaky seemed delighted by the work he had done. He would have taken time to vomit if Grier didn't push him forward. Trooper Durov, who entered last, ended their lives. as Fellow kinsmen, they deserved the right to die quickly.

"Sev, Durov, check upstairs." Grier giving orders again.

Sev ran up the stairs, Durov at his heels. Sev ran straight into a Tharkan. For the first time, Sev could see his enemy. The Tharkans had brown leather armour. as PDF they didn't have any flak armour. And they had the same head protection as the Khazk. A respirator, goggles, and the mask over his head. For a moment, they just stared at eachother. Then Sev raised his lasgun and fired 2 shots in the Tharkans chest. The Tharkan dropped, wasn't moving. Sev stared at him before Durov pushed him forward again.

Sev claimed his first kill.

Good two chapters, really intreting caant wait fot more

I like it it is a very good first person perspective, yet seems a little detatched, could be a bit more involved, still very good!

thanks guys!

Aun'shi: yeah the second part is a bit...wierd. I have to rewrite it sometime. only after that will I start work on part 3, the final part of Chapter 1

Part 2 edited, third and final part of chapter 1 coming up in a day or 2

Great job!
cant wait for part 3!

Hard Landing---------Part 3

Two buildings farther along the street, Sev and the assault team of echo squad cleared the last building on the right. Shaky looking gleefully at his roostered targets. Bravo Squad had arrived as well, the covering teams of both Echo and Bravo squad pumping lasfire in the last stronghold of enemy resistence on the square. Bravo Assault had cleared the left side of the square. The only remaining buidling was that big building in front of the square.

Sev reckoned it had to be the house of an important citizen, maybe a mine owner. There were at least eight enemy shooters firing through the windows. Echo Fire Base had reckoned that by the muzzle flashes. But the size of the building might add at least 10 more Tharkans inside. The combined efforts of both echo and Bravo Assault were needed to take out the last strongpoint.

'Echo, respond.'

'Bravo, Go ahead.'

'Grier, move up your fire base, follow Bravo. Take Assault to the mansion. Last assault if the day Grier, You and me. Just like old times.'

'Echo here, copy that. Old times, lets go. drinks on me Mikal.'

Grier and Mikal used to be underhive gangers back on Khazk. With the same gang alegiances, they often raided rival gangs. It was a good life, full of action for them. But then they were drafted seven years ago. And then the gak began.

'Weitz, move you arse up to a better fire position. Follow Bravo. We're taking the mansion, make those enemy shooters keep their heads low.' Grier crackled through the vox bead.

'shaky, not this time. grenades in first, then you can torch 'em.'

Skaky shudered, letting his head hang.

'Durov, sev, Zemmer, grenades on three!'
One.
Two......
Zemmer, where are your damn grenades? Grier bellowed
'I wasn't issued any sir.'
'Oh yeah.' Grier rememberd the reason. The gak couldn't throw a grenade straight. Messy.

Three!

two grenades were thrown through a hole in the wall. Fire base started an unstopping tide of searing las shots. Explosions, the cracking of lasguns....screaming. suddenly Shaky rushed in, torching along the way.

Damn it, thought Sev. The man needs a leesh.

In, in, in! Grier went in next, followed by Zemmer Sev and Durov.

It was dark inside. The explosions had damaged the lights, who were flicking on and off occasionaly. He saw to his left and right that Grier and Durov were blasting at targets. Sev couldn't even see his enemies. He remembered his goggles had a protective layer toprotect the eyes against thesun, and quickly ripped it off of his head. He immediatly saw a Tharkan rushing towards him. Sev turned his lasrifle to full auto, and let of a burst of las fire towards tthe target. The Tharkan went down. He felt himself being pulled down, las fire cracking where his head just was. Sev found himself behind a turned over table, facing Grier.

'Keep your head cool, Sev.'

Echo Assault has made an acount for themself. The mansion now littered by five dead Tharkans. But more were moving in on their position, and Echo found themselves pinned. Sev saw Durov glancing over the table beside him. He pulled his head back as las fire headed hi way.

'Where the hell is Shaky?' shouted Grier.
'Don't know Sarge, I haven't seen him in here', Zemmer's informed.
Cracking noises of las retorts sounded all around them.
'Hell, we're pinned! Bravo, Echo here. where the hell are you!
The las retorts died away. boot steps exchanged the noise of cracking las fire.
'Right here, Grier.'
Grier found himself staring into the eyes of Sergeant Mikal.

Echo and Bravo Assault secured the rest of the building. The mansion was clear, but still no sign of Shaky.

'Mikal, have you seen a big bearded man with an old flamer listening to the name of Shaky?'
'Sorry, I haven't s...'
' Medic!'

Durov came back in the main hall of the mansion, suporting the old bearded man. He was shaking badly. That was where his name came from. He's been wounded over ten times, everytime they found him shaking very badly.

'I found him in a back room. He was holding a knife. Shaky here stabbed three Tharkan sergeants to death. '

'Let me guess, You found him...shaking?' Zemmer asked.

Durov just glanced in his direction. Nobody liked Zemmer. Not since the actions on Volgargen VI.

'Hahaah! let's get this old shaking giant to a field medic. This man needs a medal!' Grier laughed.

' I rather like a Lho stick and some painkillers, Sarge.

'Weitz, vox the all clear. And tell them to bring a medic.'

Then Sev made Mikal remember something.

'Hey, sarge, don't you own Sergeant Mikal a drink?'

The loud laughter of Grier and Mikal sounded through the mansion.



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End of Chapter Hard landing. Now I need some time to come up with a second chapter. Constructive critisism welcome.

ITs pretty good... I wouldn't mind better description on the part of the rooms and buildings they were fighting in.
Other wise, an all round good story so far. Keep it up trooper

Hmm, yeah, I re read it, and it could use with some better enviromenr descriptions. I'll keep that in mind for the next chapter. Thanks for the advice .

Next part. just an inter chapter, to clean up the events of Chapter 1 Hard Landing.

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Inter-chapter

All the abble bodied men of Echo and Bravo cleared the square of any obstacles, making sure the armour and supplies could be dropped off safely. Most barricades could just be dismantled, but the stronger ones, the concrete walls, needed to be blown away. Echo used it's Tube charges for the job. The Square was now safe and secured against Tharkan attack.

The rest of third platoon, Alpha, Charlie, Delta and Foxtrot squad, secured the perimiter of the designated drop zone. Platoon command made it's base in the Mansion. Lieutenant Phiron, together with the rest of Third Command squad, studied the maps and other valueable stuff they found. Echo and Bravo did a good job.

Sev and Durov, two friends since Booth camp, were chatting to each other. They were sitting at a table in a standard Guard isue tent, drinking some Grouch, Khazk local alcoholic drinks. Inside the tent, Trooper Dario, the platoon's medic, patched Shaky up for the eleventh time in his military carreer. For Hep, the first casualty of third platoon, help came too late. Hep bled out long before the Arvus Lighter carying Dario and the rest of the camping equipment of Third arrived. A body bag being loaded in the departing Arvus marked his deffinitive departure.

Weitz had suffered a wound too. A las shot clipped his shoulder. He lay in the field hospital as well. Dario walked over to Sev and Durov.

"They'll make it." Dario said, pointing over his shoulder, indicating Shaky and Weitz. "Look what the mail has brought."

Durov and Sev looked up and saw Sergeant Grier, Mikal and Lieutenant Phiron heading their way.

The trio stood at attention. Lieutenant Phiron nodded, and the three troopers stood at ease.

" 'Gents, as you all know, we are invading a mining planet. scouts are needed to scout out the enemy's strong points. Now, the Tharkans clipped the wings of a handfull of Valk's coming planetside. Third platoon's scout squad was on one of the clipped Valks, so now we are left without a reconaisance unit. Word here from Sergeant Mikal told me Echo squad would be up to the task. Echo squad is Thirds Scout unit. now. "

Sev and Durov nodded their approval.

"Now that's taken care off, I have a first job for Echo squad."

The whining sound of a valkyrie's engines declared the arrival of the suplies and Armour. The loud engines of the valkyries kicked up big dust clouds, and the men were forced to put on their goggles again.

The two Valkyrie's carying armour had their troop comparted removed to make room for giant clamps strong enough to carry a Leman Rus battle tank. The Valkyries dropped their heavy cargo, and left off, heading back to the Fleet to pick up the next cargo.

A Khazk pattern Leman Rus Conquerer named 'Lion of Khazk', and a Salamander scouting vehicle seconded to Thirds new Scout squad, were dropped at the square. The 'Lion' rolled off in an alley just wide enogh for the Khazk fabricated battle tank, and it's crew dismounted the humble machine.

Trooper Laper huried off to the stranded Salamander, hopping in and parking the scout tank at a safe spot next to the mansion. Laper was the only one to recieve a tank driving course in Third Echo squad.

By now the rest of Echo, minus Weitz and Shaky, stood at ease with Sergeant Grier, Sev Durov.

Sergeant Mikal spoke for the first time since joining Phiron.

'Echo's first job sir?'

A third Valkyrie, the suply drop, landed, wwaiting to be unloaded landed/

Lieutenant Phiron issued his order.

"Echo, at the double, unload that Valk, go! Go, go, go, this war isn't fought by itself!"

Grier and the rest of Echo obeyed their order, and started to unload the supplies.

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Inter chapter done. Chapter 2 coming up soon.

But I need some feedback on this little inter chapter. is it to long and boring? or just long enough?