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see ya around mate... will have a go at sleeping too i should^^

ähm... awfully quite around these parts here... no shopping lists and no updates whatsoever...i wont even ask about pis...ups seems i did so in a non direct way^^

I figured I had nothing new to add, so there'd be no point in posting my incessant babble about random stuff and bumping the thread...dammit I just did...
The stormraven will be delayed by a few weeks because I spent some money at the trip to crew that show...
I think I have about £15, and at £5 a week I'm looking at a stormraven in 6 weeks if the weather doesn't get warmer and brighter because I need to buy glue...and warmer & brighter because if it picks up I'll be doing a leaflet round...

the lists is something i associate with this thread^^

and this trip wasn´t it school related? why dont you get your money back by your parents? or did i get something wrong?

It was, and my mum gave me £5 for lunch (we went to pizza hut), but then it was a 16 hour day, and we all got pretty hungry by 8:00, and they had a tuck shop there...so...yeah...

gine with the wind...but eating is sometimes needed^^

yep, waking up at 6:30 am and getting home at gone midnight is pretty rough when you have school the next day...

ouch...your still fourteen and need your sleep...

yep, and interesting fact of the day:
teenager's body clocks run about 1-2 hours later than adults, which is why they like to wake up at 10:00/11:00am and go to sleep at midnight... Personally I like to wake up at 9:30/10:00 and get to sleep at 11:00...

and your insight is based on what empirical data collected about you and your friends...there is a scientific rule: only results really relyable is when done in big numbers... unless your friendship count is in the thousands and you got stabil data from all of them (all sexes too), then i am game^^

It's research done by scientists, I just heard about it...

aha...well...then...

Well, I guess it would explain why I wake up at 2 and go to bed at 3 am. Correlation? None known, unless I'm the later version of an adult night owl

LOL...

...another person looking at my humble little fluff and blog...aw...
No new fluff, but I might bome up with some more for the fight against "da armera"...maybe he got dragged away and revived by his loyal grots and built a kustom stompa...and went in a suicide attack against the marines, taking as many of them down as he could before getting blown up...hmm...

lol when your on look at the service site here and see for yourself the scorelist^^

^^
I'll go add some stuff...


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finished!
Look at the paragraph on praxis- there's some moar...

and now moar here:

"The army, so far, consists of Lenore, Audax, Praxis, 5 sternguard, a command squad, a kitbashed sanguinary guard unit, 5 devastators, an ursus rhino, a sanguinary priest, 5 "snipers" (name pending) and will soon get some allied ordo xenos and malleus. Later on: Due to gungnir's specialisation in hunting chaos and assassinations, they often encountered temple assassins and inquisition along the way- the inquisitor operating in-system was inquisitor Velox, famed for leading the assault on a tyranid hive ship and personally killing the norn queen, saving most of the deliverance system- a useful ally to have. Also, there is a small detachment of malleus operating in the nearby Targus system, in a training base on a small moon. In charge is brother Altus. Responsible for this base, but not in-system, is librarian Vendolius. Later gungnir's elite will go on to form a deathwatch squad, which will then prove so sucessful that they will be charged with training grey knight neophites and serving alongside the grey knights in action, becoming members of the ordo xenos. the majority of muninn go on to found a sucessor chapter- the bespoke talons, led by chapter master Lenore."

Praxis is armed with a heavy flamer, tactical dreadnought armour and his crozius arcanum. He is an old and venerated chaplain, and is the master of sanctity's right-hand man. He rose to this position through a campaign against the orks of a small tribe- the head hittaz. Led by warboss 'eadbasha, the orks had grown in prominence, and managed to become the leading tribe on thier planet. they quickly spread like wildfire across the system, recruiting other orks to his cause. when they stumbled across a bik mek who is only known as da 'armara, all hell broke loose. They pillaged through the system, and became large enough for a full-scale waagh!. The local PDFs were overrun, but the message got through before comms were cut short. And so the Muninn battle company responded in full force. Chaplain Praxis had served the raven guard for just over century when he arrived on the planet of Ghendor.

The twenty thousand astartes were greeted with a brigade of battlewagons, led by da armara' himself. The astartes became prepared for this, and had donned flamers and meltaguns in place of missile launchers and plasma guns. The space marines accounted for over 300 battlewagons that day, engaging in brief hit-and-run attacks in rhinos and on bikes. that is, until 'eadbasha arrived on da armara's kustom battle fortress. standing twice the height of a land raider and londer than a baneblade, the marines were ground under it's massive deff-rolla, including the then master of sanctity Chaplain Vetus. Then Praxis appeared in it's path. His rosarius saved him from being crushed by the huge, fume-belching monstrosity. Somehow clambering up the front of the ginormous vehicle and bringing his heavy flamer to bear, he torched the inside of the foul tank, stopping it in it's tracks. 'eadsplitta stormed out of an escape hatch in the side of it, fuming about how Praxis killed "da armara". He ran at the chaplain, and swung with his giant axe. The chaplain locked it with his crozius arcanum, and for a few moments, they were locked in place, each with both arms on their weapons. As the chaplain was slowly pushed into submission by the giant, he snarled through his skull-helm: "Victorus...aut...mortis." and drove his helmet into the beast's face. The ork lurched back, howling and clutching it's nose, when the chaplain burnt it into the ether with all the fury of his heavy flamer. With the death of thier leaders, the orks scattered and were swiftly killed by the remaining space marines. Vetus's broken body was entombed inside a chaplain dreadnought later.

"After the space marines had finished the remaining pockets of resistance weeks later, they were in the ritual of burning the ork bodies to prevent thier spores sprouting more of them up in the future. Then a huge smoke-belching monstrosity burst out of the side of a nearby hab, followed by a horde of thousands of orks, wiping out a full company of marines and several platoons of imperial guard. Apparently da armara had survived, and been buried under his battlewagon. His loyal grots had repaired him with bioniks and he had re-awakened, and spent the following weeks building and customising a stompa. He smashed through orks, men and astartes alike until he came across Praxis' accompanying land raider and flattened it with it's stomach-mounte cannon. It then smashed it's occupants, praxis' honour guard, into paste with it's giant wrecker ball, before making it's way through the imperial lines in an attempt to get away in all the confusion. Redirecting the group's deverstator squad's fire from the horde to the escaping stompa, praxis waited for the right moment. He gave the order to fire, and 3 missile launchers made it on target, the first making a mere dent in the thick armour, the second making a hole in it, but ultimately causing no serious damage, and the third, fired by sergeant Galenus, flew true straight through the hole and detonated the fuel stocks, blowing it from the inside out. The vast majority of the ork horde were destroyed in the ensuing conflagration, with da armara escaping from his prescious stompa moments before it exploded using an emergency conveted shokk attack gun to teleport away... "

so... second try^^

this installment of your fluff reads a whole lot better, scenic action and character portray...
i think you can build on this a whole lot of stories...you have a potential writersgene in you!
one minor thing i would change is the beginning... when writing fluff you have to decide if you want to do a listing of charcters or trying to tell a story... with this piece of fluff you did both and if you seperated both you would get more points from me^^ the begining reads a bit like a list and then gets on full steam in a blazing history lesson of your chapters far off legends and then you reach a point where you begin to tell an epic battle...big heros against even bigger villians...
you can do all of that and all of it would be cool and i will promise to like all! but mixing it is like mixing a hamsandwich with straberry icecream and a chewing gum...all good on their own but a bit too much together...did i make that understandable?

It then smashed it's occupants, praxis' honour guard, into paste with it's giant wrecker ball

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with a line like that i think you give a good scenic description...but.... i think you could do a better one as this sounds a bit to comix like... you almost see that big letters above going: "BAAAM" ---"SMASHHH"---""FLUTSCHHH"...in big crayon colors...i think with that you kind of take away some of the awsomeness of your storytelling...üicture the scene in your head and then try to think like an old fart...and then how he would use the wording^^

dont get me wrong you got me with your chapter line hook and sinker and i am eager to read a whole lot more of their tales... hopefully real soon...whatr i think would be classy were stories of their everyday life... that would be a great challenge...and would make the big battles later so much more thrilling...you could do the part where they root out the remenant orkinfestations in that system...on a dayly basis slaughtering the orks... how the big characters interact with their fellow battlebrothers and such stuff...

hope i have not shyed you away from writing as i think with a head like yours you can make lots of cool stuff...in the spirit of the saying: you gotta teach`em while they are still young^^

vik (who still shys away from writing fluff in a foreign language...)

thanks, and I'll take it into consideration. I might make a second article with the actual story, and edit this one to have lists and the bare core of the characters...yeah I'll do that.
Having a day-to-day account of a space marine on an ork-infested world sounds cool, and I might adapt the fluff to have all three main characters in, as well as an ordo xenos inquisitor...

for me that would sound a bit like the tv series band of brothers... nice ring to it when adapted to 40k^^
your decision sounds quite good... the right direction i think... and i am not afraid to follow yet another thread^^

http://www.dakkadakka.com/wiki/en/The_sons_of_Corax

Hey, vik!
I got a furioso for b-day, and I'm wondering whether to have it as GK or raven guard (RG "death company" chaplain dread or GK "libby" dread (instead of FW and rag cannon, NFW and psycannon))
so which? The sons of corax or the daemonhunters?
I think, as the raven guard are nearly done (stormraven and CH bits left), then I'll go GK.

well i would bed to difer i think... if you do the dread as a ravenguard your not hopping the badwaggon...also i think the claws of the furioso would be goodlooking as some visualstand in for the whole ravenscheme...
just my asked opinion...^^

Viktor von Domm wrote:well i would bed to difer i think... if you do the dread as a ravenguard your not hopping the badwaggon...also i think the claws of the furioso would be goodlooking as some visualstand in for the whole ravenscheme...
just my asked opinion...^^

But I've already put hints of it into my fluff...and it's too late now, he's already nearly done. I must say he's going rather well- Imagine a libby dread with psycannon for an arm, storm bolter on NFW, all the libby insignia and BA logos gone and a TAGK head instead of the death mask. I need to wait 'til saturday for the psycannon and TAGK head, but he's doing well.
Fear not- once I get up to around 1500pts, I'll be getting a chaplain dreadnaught with claws.

well if all is planned out already why ask then?...

by the way...when will we see some new footage of your new shiny minis?
you should have asked for a cam on your own for bithday...^^

Viktor von Domm wrote:well if all is planned out already why ask then?...

by the way...when will we see some new footage of your new shiny minis?
you should have asked for a cam on your own for bithday...^^

I asked before work on it begun...then I thought- "Meh. I'll make it GK."
Pics will be taken after I go shopping at GW on saturday and build them.

ok...so this is a date then...i expect pics to happen til sunday 23:00 greenwich time...

do i get an aye?

Viktor von Domm wrote:ok...so this is a date then...i expect pics to happen til sunday 23:00 greenwich time...

do i get an aye?

when I finish building them all.
This is about 40 models, so it might be into the week.
Would you prefer pics this weekend of a few GK's plus some raven guard, or pics later on of all the GK's plus some raven guard?

of course^^ unpainted , still on sprue...anything to feed the raging masses that are screaming for blood...er ... pics that is^^