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2012/10/31 20:33:11
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 7: Illumination ( 7th chapter completed 25.10.2012)
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Mutated Chosen Chaos Marine
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What web-browser do you use? Google Chrome has a built in spellchecker.
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2012/10/31 20:34:50
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 7: Illumination ( 7th chapter completed 25.10.2012)
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Did Fulgrim Just Behead Ferrus?
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That might be a solution yeah, even though Google's spellchecker isn't that great...
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2012/10/31 20:37:27
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 7: Illumination ( 7th chapter completed 25.10.2012)
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Mutated Chosen Chaos Marine
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Eh, gogle's speilchecker iz prety gud. It catkes all mah speiling errars befare i post, so that i dunt luk dum.
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2012/10/31 20:40:59
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 7: Illumination ( 7th chapter completed 25.10.2012)
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Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit
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Lol me thinks your one one is broken lol
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Come into my web, said the spider to the fly.
Come rest your wings, and let us talk eye to eye.
For I am a spider, and you are the fly. Now that you are here, let us sit, and say hi.
But I have have no morsel to share, nor anything to eat. But wait, what is that stickiness upon your feet.
Ah now I have you, now I can eat. Now I can enjoy you, or store you as meat.
For I am the spider, and you are the fly. How else could it have gone, between one such as you, and one such as I.
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2012/10/31 20:42:41
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 7: Illumination ( 7th chapter completed 25.10.2012)
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Mutated Chosen Chaos Marine
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Wat no gogle speilchecker is workin perfictly. it sez im speiling everyting perfictly.
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2012/10/31 22:30:50
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 7: Illumination ( 7th chapter completed 25.10.2012)
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Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit
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Lol I hope I'm not that bad lol, sorry chrome spell checker.
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Come into my web, said the spider to the fly.
Come rest your wings, and let us talk eye to eye.
For I am a spider, and you are the fly. Now that you are here, let us sit, and say hi.
But I have have no morsel to share, nor anything to eat. But wait, what is that stickiness upon your feet.
Ah now I have you, now I can eat. Now I can enjoy you, or store you as meat.
For I am the spider, and you are the fly. How else could it have gone, between one such as you, and one such as I.
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2012/10/31 22:44:37
Subject: Re:The Panthers Claws Chapter 7: Illumination ( 7th chapter completed 25.10.2012)
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Terrifying Doombull
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No you and LL is just about equal on that point. I however wins the first place handsdown for being bad at spelling 
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2012/11/01 13:40:55
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 7: Illumination ( 7th chapter completed 25.10.2012)
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Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit
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I think you've got a orkgle spell checker LL lol
You've got an excuse Trondheim as english is not your first language, mines gakaneze :( lol
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Come into my web, said the spider to the fly.
Come rest your wings, and let us talk eye to eye.
For I am a spider, and you are the fly. Now that you are here, let us sit, and say hi.
But I have have no morsel to share, nor anything to eat. But wait, what is that stickiness upon your feet.
Ah now I have you, now I can eat. Now I can enjoy you, or store you as meat.
For I am the spider, and you are the fly. How else could it have gone, between one such as you, and one such as I.
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2012/11/01 16:45:51
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 7: Illumination ( 7th chapter completed 25.10.2012)
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Terrifying Doombull
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Well yes....I will force you all to learn Norwegian as my army of undead viking ninja zombeis takes over the world!!!
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2012/11/01 17:06:36
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 7: Illumination ( 7th chapter completed 25.10.2012)
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Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit
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I'm up for learning a bit of Norwegian so you don't have to unleash your zombies on me thank you very much lol
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Come into my web, said the spider to the fly.
Come rest your wings, and let us talk eye to eye.
For I am a spider, and you are the fly. Now that you are here, let us sit, and say hi.
But I have have no morsel to share, nor anything to eat. But wait, what is that stickiness upon your feet.
Ah now I have you, now I can eat. Now I can enjoy you, or store you as meat.
For I am the spider, and you are the fly. How else could it have gone, between one such as you, and one such as I.
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2012/11/01 17:36:44
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 7: Illumination ( 7th chapter completed 25.10.2012)
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Terrifying Doombull
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Good minion, I will order them to wait with your indoctrination then.....
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2012/11/08 19:28:15
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Terrifying Doombull
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Well.....it needs work I agree on, first of all its guns and not gunz. And Astartes uses poerfists and not power claws, Orks use those. Neside that Chapter Master dose not sit well with me, a warrior like that should not act like a spoiled bratt.
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2012/11/08 19:55:36
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit
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The power claws are from the 1st company who field power claws and thunder hammers and storm shields. I tried to depict the Chapter Master as unstable and unsuitable for the rank he holds as he was picked while the last Chapter Master was delirious and dying so he's meant to be unfit for the job and I tried to show that (maybe a bit too much). How could I improve it please Trondheim?
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Come into my web, said the spider to the fly.
Come rest your wings, and let us talk eye to eye.
For I am a spider, and you are the fly. Now that you are here, let us sit, and say hi.
But I have have no morsel to share, nor anything to eat. But wait, what is that stickiness upon your feet.
Ah now I have you, now I can eat. Now I can enjoy you, or store you as meat.
For I am the spider, and you are the fly. How else could it have gone, between one such as you, and one such as I.
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2012/11/08 20:04:01
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Terrifying Doombull
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I see well that explains it then, I would include that bit of information in the text. Well thats a tricky question, I suppose when you make me want to strangle that bung hole you have gotten it rigth. Perhaps include a bit that showcases his unhinged mind before he goes all bat crazy on the the three dudes
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2012/11/08 20:53:17
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit
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I've changed the bits you said Trondheim, how does it sound now, is he unhinged yet?
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Come into my web, said the spider to the fly.
Come rest your wings, and let us talk eye to eye.
For I am a spider, and you are the fly. Now that you are here, let us sit, and say hi.
But I have have no morsel to share, nor anything to eat. But wait, what is that stickiness upon your feet.
Ah now I have you, now I can eat. Now I can enjoy you, or store you as meat.
For I am the spider, and you are the fly. How else could it have gone, between one such as you, and one such as I.
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2012/11/08 21:06:58
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Terrifying Doombull
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Now he sounds like my old boss, who was VERY unhinged. So well done!
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2012/11/08 21:10:57
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit
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Lol I hope you rang the nut house for him, I hope he still sounds like a Space Marine, a unhinged Space Marine Chapter Master that is. Does the rest of the chapter pass muster?
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This message was edited 1 time. Last update was at 2012/11/08 21:15:08
Come into my web, said the spider to the fly.
Come rest your wings, and let us talk eye to eye.
For I am a spider, and you are the fly. Now that you are here, let us sit, and say hi.
But I have have no morsel to share, nor anything to eat. But wait, what is that stickiness upon your feet.
Ah now I have you, now I can eat. Now I can enjoy you, or store you as meat.
For I am the spider, and you are the fly. How else could it have gone, between one such as you, and one such as I.
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2012/11/08 21:17:48
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Terrifying Doombull
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Well I left before that happend, he sounds like a Marine alrigth. And yes the rest of the ladzs passes muster with flying colours.
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2012/11/08 21:21:41
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit
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Lol cheers.
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Come into my web, said the spider to the fly.
Come rest your wings, and let us talk eye to eye.
For I am a spider, and you are the fly. Now that you are here, let us sit, and say hi.
But I have have no morsel to share, nor anything to eat. But wait, what is that stickiness upon your feet.
Ah now I have you, now I can eat. Now I can enjoy you, or store you as meat.
For I am the spider, and you are the fly. How else could it have gone, between one such as you, and one such as I.
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2012/11/09 00:19:13
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Mutated Chosen Chaos Marine
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Very well written. I feel bad for Agathon.
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2012/11/14 16:41:20
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit
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Hopefully not for too long LL, his time will come. In the next chapter I'm thinking of Detrus sending three companies to Bashan (the sub-hive still holding out), then a huge space battle in the chapter after that. What do you people think about the three companies part, yay/nay?
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Come into my web, said the spider to the fly.
Come rest your wings, and let us talk eye to eye.
For I am a spider, and you are the fly. Now that you are here, let us sit, and say hi.
But I have have no morsel to share, nor anything to eat. But wait, what is that stickiness upon your feet.
Ah now I have you, now I can eat. Now I can enjoy you, or store you as meat.
For I am the spider, and you are the fly. How else could it have gone, between one such as you, and one such as I.
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2012/11/14 16:44:35
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Terrifying Doombull
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YAY BLOOD FOR THE BLOOD GOD!
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2012/11/14 16:55:31
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit
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DIE HERETIC SCUM!
Cheers, there's one vote for the 3 companies to go on a little..trip.
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Come into my web, said the spider to the fly.
Come rest your wings, and let us talk eye to eye.
For I am a spider, and you are the fly. Now that you are here, let us sit, and say hi.
But I have have no morsel to share, nor anything to eat. But wait, what is that stickiness upon your feet.
Ah now I have you, now I can eat. Now I can enjoy you, or store you as meat.
For I am the spider, and you are the fly. How else could it have gone, between one such as you, and one such as I.
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2012/11/14 23:56:00
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Mutated Chosen Chaos Marine
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I vote in favor of the 'little trip'.
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2012/11/16 15:55:36
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit
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Lol cheers LL, bear with me as the next chapter is going to be a long one and is going to take some time to write. I've made a start so hopefully you wont have too long to wait to slake your blood lust.
Themanwiththeplan
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Come into my web, said the spider to the fly.
Come rest your wings, and let us talk eye to eye.
For I am a spider, and you are the fly. Now that you are here, let us sit, and say hi.
But I have have no morsel to share, nor anything to eat. But wait, what is that stickiness upon your feet.
Ah now I have you, now I can eat. Now I can enjoy you, or store you as meat.
For I am the spider, and you are the fly. How else could it have gone, between one such as you, and one such as I.
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2012/11/19 16:51:32
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Terrifying Doombull
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I approve of it, it seems the good chapter master has gone somewhat mad. I sense the deaths of the loyalist dogs! GLORY TO THE DARK GODS!
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2012/11/19 17:02:40
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 8: Judgment (updated 8.11.2012)
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Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit
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Yep he is really going down hill and is just going to get more paranoid as we go along that will climax near the end. And you will have to see but forlorn hope kind of gives it away Thanks for the review. cheers.
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Come into my web, said the spider to the fly.
Come rest your wings, and let us talk eye to eye.
For I am a spider, and you are the fly. Now that you are here, let us sit, and say hi.
But I have have no morsel to share, nor anything to eat. But wait, what is that stickiness upon your feet.
Ah now I have you, now I can eat. Now I can enjoy you, or store you as meat.
For I am the spider, and you are the fly. How else could it have gone, between one such as you, and one such as I.
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2012/11/19 17:15:06
Subject: Re:The Panthers Claws Chapter 9: Forlorn Hope (Work in progress)
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Terrifying Doombull
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Climax? I will et some paper towls then
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2012/11/19 17:20:19
Subject: The Panthers Claws Chapter 9: Forlorn Hope (Work in progress)
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Thunderhawk Pilot Dropping From Orbit
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calm down now it wont be that sort of climax it will come to a head, or am I just digging my hole deeper here
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Come into my web, said the spider to the fly.
Come rest your wings, and let us talk eye to eye.
For I am a spider, and you are the fly. Now that you are here, let us sit, and say hi.
But I have have no morsel to share, nor anything to eat. But wait, what is that stickiness upon your feet.
Ah now I have you, now I can eat. Now I can enjoy you, or store you as meat.
For I am the spider, and you are the fly. How else could it have gone, between one such as you, and one such as I.
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2012/11/19 18:02:30
Subject: Re:The Panthers Claws Chapter 9: Forlorn Hope (Work in progress)
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Terrifying Doombull
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Head  Oh my are a naugthy boy eh  And your hole...well I dunno about it
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