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Luck. back to the codex.

What else then? I do have my music thread to attend to.

Yeah, and I'm one of the Navy SEALS that killed Osama Bin Ladin. I have the highest marksmanship score in all of the NATO armed forces and just barely lost out to the husky Ruskies.

 Mynameisalie wrote:

 liquidjoshi wrote:
Then I doubt you're that much smarter.

Dude, look at it like this: even Shakespeare is trying to help you.

I'm not quite sure how to explain the fact I got an IQ only 4 below Einstein's, in that case. But enough of me. Let's get back on the codex instead.

That's nice, but you must learn to use the intelligence in a way that is useful, not squander it. It doesn't require that much intellect to write a great story, just time;

"Put enough monkeys in a room with a typewriter they'll produce Shakespeare."

 Azariah Kyras wrote:
Yeah, and I'm one of the Navy SEALS that killed Osama Bin Ladin. I have the highest marksmanship score in all of the NATO armed forces and just barely lost out to the husky Ruskies.

Dammit, that was sarcasm wasn't it?

 Mynameisalie wrote:

 Azariah Kyras wrote:
Yeah, and I'm one of the Navy SEALS that killed Osama Bin Ladin. I have the highest marksmanship score in all of the NATO armed forces and just barely lost out to the husky Ruskies.

Dammit, that was sarcasm wasn't it?

*Slow clap button press

(Clap) (Clap) (Clap)

Good, that still works, anyways. You never got the original point, that anyone can be anyone they claim to be on the internet. Your claims of IQ are nothing to the internet, it means nothing to anyone here, nor will it ever.

Remember that discussion we had about Aspergers?
I really do have it. Don't make fun of that fact, please.

 Mynameisalie wrote:
Remember that discussion we had about Aspergers?
I really do have it. Don't make fun of that fact, please.

How does that have anything to do with this situation? I never mocked it.

I have Aspergers Syndrome, like I told you in those ridiculous PM's you sent to me.

 blood reaper wrote:

 Mynameisalie wrote:

 Azariah Kyras wrote:
Yeah, and I'm one of the Navy SEALS that killed Osama Bin Ladin. I have the highest marksmanship score in all of the NATO armed forces and just barely lost out to the husky Ruskies.

Dammit, that was sarcasm wasn't it?

*Slow clap button press

(Clap) (Clap) (Clap)

Good, that still works, anyways. You never got the original point, that anyone can be anyone they claim to be on the internet. Your claims of IQ are nothing to the internet, it means nothing to anyone here, nor will it ever.

And I just have to ask.
Why do you not seem to like me? In even the remotest sense? I'm feeling increasing levels of hostility coming from you for no apparent reason.

 blood reaper wrote:

 Mynameisalie wrote:
Remember that discussion we had about Aspergers?
I really do have it. Don't make fun of that fact, please.

How does that have anything to do with this situation? I never mocked it.

I have Aspergers Syndrome, like I told you in those ridiculous PM's you sent to me.

The sarcasm thing. You kind of indirectly mocked me for not being able to detect sarcasm.

Nothing you tell us about yourself can be proved or judged. What you write, however, DOES tell us about you.

What I see here:
- You are overconfident in your own skills
- You cannot detect sarcasm
- You do not take criticism well, declaring people who take issue with your attitude as "whiners"
- You dodge questions with responses like "it's just the way I write"
- Your writing is not gold, it is that of a fourteen year old with some serious delusions
- You seem to want us to validate you by saying that your writing, your concepts and your codex are all genius and should be incorporated into Warhammer 40K so that all the world can see

My prescription? Grow up and stop thinking that you are just going to get stuff handed to you, and learn some humility. The people in this thread are trying to help you, but they can only go so far before you have to help yourself.

This is getting off topic.

I have simply given harsh criticism, and nothing more. Your reactions have become annoying to say the least, and you continue to ignore advice given.

 Mynameisalie wrote:

 blood reaper wrote:

 Mynameisalie wrote:
Remember that discussion we had about Aspergers?
I really do have it. Don't make fun of that fact, please.

How does that have anything to do with this situation? I never mocked it.

I have Aspergers Syndrome, like I told you in those ridiculous PM's you sent to me.

The sarcasm thing. You kind of indirectly mocked me for not being able to detect sarcasm.

I wasn't mocking it, I thought you were trying to be smart or joking around. Nor is everyone with Aspergus able to not detect sarcasm, but don't bring it up as a defense, it doesn't work.

New idea:
Very quickly get the hell off this and back onto what this threa is meant for.
Those in favour?

 Mynameisalie wrote:
New idea:
Very quickly get the hell off this and back onto what this threa is meant for.
Those in favour?

Everyone is, now, please compile your modified ideas into one post which we can begin to evaluate.

Reaper, I've already said I can't now. Joshi wants everything, I will give him everything, but I can't at the moment.

You tell us to get back on topic, after you derailed your own thread, now you are telling us we CAN'T get back on topic, because you don't have anything to show that would justify BEING on topic.

 Arcsquad12 wrote:
You tell us to get back on topic, after you derailed your own thread, now you are telling us we CAN'T get back on topic, because you don't have anything to show that would justify BEING on topic.

I think I'm losing the will to post on this topic in the attempt to assist a random stranger to continue a project I'm not sure will be a success.

And, to clarify, EVERYONE wants EVERYTHING. Glass said it first, and Reaper seconded it.

 Arcsquad12 wrote:
You tell us to get back on topic, after you derailed your own thread, now you are telling us we CAN'T get back on topic, because you don't have anything to show that would justify BEING on topic.

Not the point. The point is that if we don't move off this, regardless of who started it, the thread will be locked. AGAIN.

Really? I thought I was doing pretty well with my critique of a single paragraph. I sure as hell don't want to read through 10+ page word docs and go through all that.

I want to critique, but I'm also lazy.

 Mynameisalie wrote:

 Arcsquad12 wrote:
You tell us to get back on topic, after you derailed your own thread, now you are telling us we CAN'T get back on topic, because you don't have anything to show that would justify BEING on topic.

Not the point. The point is that if we don't move off this, regardless of who started it, the thread will be locked. AGAIN.

Then stop posting this, AGAIN as in your own words.

Now, please give us a basic idea of what we've come to after all that criticism.

Erm...
-Awkward Silence-
What?
*Facepalm*
Can we do this in the morning? Please? I'm tired, washed out and have generally had enough for today.

lol. Stop posting and turn off your computer?

iPod.
I will get back to you guys in the morning.

Good.

A little more topic of the 'on' varity lads? Aye? Good. When it gets to morning for Ailie, we can continue this. We focus on the codex, not the novel, agreed?

Agreed.

 Mynameisalie wrote:

 liquidjoshi wrote:
Lonelictor is respected here for a good reason Alie; he writes very well, and has the rep to prove it. The first thing I learned about this site is that the occupants don't water down their advice. It's blunt and to the point, which can be harsh on a newbie. The plus side is that you develop a thick skin, and learn to take criticism. Reaper is being helpful in his way, but you see it as "whining". What we all want is for you to write something that is worthy of publication, and worth sending to GW. What you have now isn't, and splitting your efforts into a novel too won't help.

Trust us on this. Leave the novel, focus on the 'dex.

And cheers glass

glass is right, take it down. It's just a distraction.
And ghosts are a massive cliche, as well as a massive plot device to drop this early in. Not grimdark enough either.

I just don't see the advice he's giving me. I don't know what exactly it is he wants me to change: it's too general! I need a particular target!
Oh, and I had it planned to the point actually where it wasn't Sadron at all. It was a Tzeentchian daemon impersonating him. And lying to him.

Alright, here's what I have to say.

1. The Lynx society should not be utopian. It should not even be close. Look at the Tau; they're the closest thing to good guys in 40k, yet its a caste based society where an elite few lord over all others, going as far as to mind-control them. Look at the Eldar that your Lynx kinda mimic; they suppress emotion and freedom utterly, as taking too much enjoyment from life could be the death of them. So, make Lynx society dirtier. If it's communist, focus on how its an insane dystopian society where hardwork is punished and laziness rewarded. If it's capitalist, focus on how the average Lynx is left to starve in the streets while an elite and highly corrupt few control every aspect of society. If it's a democracy, make the average Lynx an idiot who supports dangerous policies he doesn't understand. If its a dictatorship, make the Lynxs' leader(s) corrupt and uncaring. Maybe gangs rule the streets. Maybe the government has set up a totalitarian surveillance system.

2. There are three main Xenos races; the Orks, Tyranids and Necrons. These are the only races who rival the strength of the Imperium of Man as well as the strength of the Traitor Legions. Tau, Eldar, Hrud, Squats, Zoats and all the other funky Xenos in 40k are minor races. They don't control more than a few planets. Though they most certainly have an affect on the galaxy around them, they aren't the center of attention. So the Lynx should be the same. They aren't a powerful Empire.

Despite not being powerful, they can still be compelling. The Eldar have a sizable fanbase, even though they're a dying race who fight for survival more than anything else. So, your Lynx don't need to be a threat to the Imperium of Man to be compelling. All they need to be is unique and indepth.

3. Read this and learn from my mistakes.

4. Lynx can't be stronger, smarter and faster than the average human, with better senses too. The Eldar are fragile, the Tau are clumsy, Orks are dumb, Tyranids are mindless without synapse and Necrons are really slow. Having paws rather than fingers isn't enough of a weakness. Maybe the Lynx should be more fragile than humans. Think Cheetahs; despite being one of the Savannah's top predators, they are incapable of taking a punch. If you hit a Cheetah, it's gonna stay down.

I'll be able to offer more helpful criticism after you make the bigass post about every Lynx thing you've written so far.

 Mynameisalie wrote:
Novels are different. You get the criticism after you write it.

If you only get criticism after you write it it won't be much good...
Having someone to just read through what you've written and then tell you what they find odd about it is important at all stages...

Thats why you never ask your family to proof read for you.