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Glad I escaped early!

Though Karak leaving may have badly hurt camp zonad power base.

 jhe90 wrote:
Glad I escaped early!

Though Karak leaving may have badly hurt camp zonad power base.

Doesn't matter much now. Zonand's dead as far as we know

 War Kitten wrote:

 jhe90 wrote:
Glad I escaped early!

Though Karak leaving may have badly hurt camp zonad power base.

Doesn't matter much now. Zonand's dead as far as we know

That may have made life easier for pavus though, well the captain.

Well, I wouldn't say the Minotaurs are in CoF 1 as much as they are given a message. They haven't been in an engagement and they aren't a standing force so... just my 3 cents.

They do like to deploy en masse, but that doesn't mean you'd actually have to. So someone should do Star Phantoms instead though

Getting all of the Badab Chapters, I see?

He seems to be on a Badab kick lately

Sgt_Smudge wrote:Getting all of the Badab Chapters, I see?

No, just Carcharodons, Minotaurs, and Star Phantoms

War Kitten wrote:He seems to be on a Badab kick lately

Just the above 3 chapters, I can't decide which I like best

It seems to be the 7th month anniversary of the crusade, but I'm not sure if that is the point or not. Other than that last guess, I have no idea.

Progress report of my own: The Kroot story had taken root, and after much redacting, I like the direction it is heading in.

So, I have a better idea than the Ork Skirmish intro idea.

So Imperial intelligence shows that there is a gathering of 'Enemy X'
They go to an attack on said enemy, when the Imperium gets their the enemy has been utterly destroyed and slaughtered.
And there stands the Carcharodons adorned in gore

Is this a better idea? How would I write that?

 Tainted wrote:
I don't understand why people are so mean about Pavus. He was a nice bloke.

I know right he was a lovable scamp

Hey guys, going off TS's advice of posting my intro here. Hope you lads like it!


In the Grim Darkness of the 41st millennium, there is only war. Humanity is beset from all angles, humanities hour is coming to an end, but there is yet hope. The Speehsh Mehrines are humanities greatest defenders, but they are spread thin, and there is less then one Space Marine for every colonised Imperial planet.

However, even among the ranks of the Space Marines, Heresy and confusion sow their way into the very heart of Chapters. The chapter [Insert Name Here] is one of these Chapters. Their Chapter Master, Bekon Gyrfen was once a proud Chapter Master, a veteran of nearly a thousand battles, Slayer of Daemons, and ally of the Eldar. He was at the peak of his rule, and respected throughout the galaxy, both by allies, and foes. However, even the greatest of Heroes are not immune to corruption, and Bekon's Pride blinded him to it until it was too late. Chaos flowed into his chapter, but he was too blind to see it. It slowly corrupted his captains, one by one, until finally the only warriors of his chapter to not have the taint of chaos on them were First-Captain Aladar Thahanas, Eclisiarch Iodius Benturus, Captain Kritanthus Jorven of the 5th Company, Captain Ceasar Xenthes of the 10th Company and Great Bekon himself.
Each captain saw the taint, and tried warning Chapter Master Bekon, however, all of their warnings were stamped out by the heretical Abadiah Ves, The chapters chief Librarian, and Bekons greatest friend...
Some say that Abadiah himself planted the first seed into the chapter, others say he was merely the vessel some greater entity used to get its way...One can not be certain, but he was however one of the first to fall to chaos.
This was not however the chapters direst hour, for that came upon them when the Word Bearers fleet appeared in the Sector Arches Praxes. Bekon saw the threat that had arrived, and recalled the chapter in response. It would take time for the chapter to return to the homeworld of Yhitxes, and time, was something they did not have.
Stationed in the neighbouring sector, the Chapters 3rd and 8th company returned with all due haste, unknownst to Bekon however, is that Abadiah had corrupted both captains, along with the majority of their companies.
Captain Aladar was next to arrive, with Chief Eclisiarch Iodius in tow. Having to leave one battlefront to return to his newly besieged homeworld did not sit well with Aladar however, as something did not seem right...Would they not have gotten word from neighbouring sectors? Wouldn't their Astropaths recognised some disturbance in the Warp? He confessed to Eclisiarch Iodius, who in turn stated he also had doubts. They arrived to see the destruction of the Sectors outlying planets, and the begining of the siege of 3 more.
Chapter Master Bekon was busy organising reinforcements to less defended planets, and further strenghtening of the inner-most planets. His strenght was waning, for even he had suffered wounds. He was at the forefront of the defense of the first planet to fall, and the last to leave it. This all was falling right into the plan of the devious Abadiah Ves, who foresaw all this. Bekon's final chapter as Chapter Master was coming to an end, and Abadiah knew it.
The 4th company arrived next, with the 6th and 9th close behind. However, not all came to pass as Abadiah would have liked, as the 2nd company became lost in the warp, how this anomaly occured was anyones guess, some say the few space marines still loyal to Bekon figured out their captain was tainted, and sabotaged its warp-drives, others state the Emperor looked upon his former sons with disgust, and smote them from this universe. What is certain however, is that the 2nd ocmpany was never heard from again.
The final battle was nearing, and the 7th company, 5th company and the entirety of the 10th company had yet to arrived. The [Insert Name Here] would fight the rest on their own. On his Battle Barge however, Bekon gave a inspirational, albeit final, speech. He said that no matter the outcome, he was proud to have served among them for all these years, and that if they die, then they shall with the Emperors word on their lips, and their weapons firing the Emperors fury made manifest. Abadiah snickered at his words, for his soul was already twisted into but a shadow of the once great warrior.
As the Word Bearer fleet came into view, Chapter Master Bekon recieved a hail from Captain Aladar, stating he had been betrayed by his closest friend, Abadiah. Bekon, enraged by this thought, exiled Aladar and his company on the eve of the chapters last battle. Bekon had reached the end of his patience, and Aladars insolence blew him over the edge. He ordered all his ships to move into battle position. Unknownst to him however, Abadiah also issued a order to the tainted crew members on board, to prepare to move against the Chapter Master.
Eclusiarch Iodius pleaded with Bekon to bring back Aladar, for his help would be needed if they were to win the Battle against the Word Bearers. His counsel, was disreguarded, and the Eclusiarch was ushered out of the bridge, only to encounter Chief Librarian Abadiah Ves and the majority of the 3rd Company on their way to the bridge. Only then did Bekon realise his mistake, and finally see the great heresy that had spread under his rule. The battle had begun, but not between the two fleets, but on the Chapter Masters own Battle Cruiser. Eclusiarch Iodius fought his way back to the bridge, only to encounter Abadiah standing over the still-living body of Bekon Gyrfen. Abadiahs force axe sheathed in the chapter masters blood. The honour guard who were not slain by Abadiah and his treasonous allies quickly arrived with Iodius, only to discover their chapter master, who they had sworn to protect, gravely wounded. In their grief and rage, they threw themselves at Abadiah, only to be cut down without remorse or mercy. Iodius himself prayed to the Emperor to guide his soul. Abadiah laughed and walked slowly towards Iodius.
"The Emperor cannot save you here Chaplain, if you cannot save yourself. Join me Iodius, and we can rule together, as equals! Throw down your petty worship of your Corpse-Emperor, and I shall spare you."
"I would rather die than spend one more moment listening to the filth coming out of your mouth. You think it is strong to choose another to venerate? No, it is not Abadiah, the true show of strength is to fight corruption, it is to fight for the ideals we hold dear, not take the easy way out. We were given this test the moment we became battle brothers, and our course through our lives have dictated what we will find in the afterlife, and you, my Brother, will find only Damnation.
"Sobeit. Kill him."
Three warriors stood forwards and pointed their bolters at Iodius. The end had come, death was waiting for him, and he would not disapoint. The crack of the bolters was loud, but the bolt hitting reinforced ceramite was louder. They did not find the target they were looking for. In the path of the shells was the Terminator armour-clad form of First-Captain Aladar. All around the ship sensors wailed. 100 Terminators of the first company teleported onto the doomed ship and with them, they brought the Emperors fury.
Captain Aladar did not take his exile lightly, and as he was about to jump out of the system as Lord Bekon ordered him to he saw it. Abadiah standing above his Chapter Masters body, Chief Eclisiarch Iodius' last heroic stand, and the absolute decimation of all other loyal Space Marines remaining in the Chapter. With one decisive decision, he ordered all Veterans to be clad in Terminator armour, and to make a short range jump onto his Chapter Masters ship.
Aladar was quick in assessing the situation, There were heretics aboard the ship, and heretics required purging. With a speed that surprised Abadiah, Aladar had already cut down two of the traitorous Space Marines. Chaplain Iodius was quick behind Aladar, putting a bolt round through the skull of the remaining traitor. Abadiah was taken aback, but even so, he was a formidable foe. The roots of chaos strenghthened his warp powers, and he sent out twin bolts of red lightning to assail Aladar and Iodius, sending both of them sprawling backwards. He was prepared to finish them both with one more strike, but he never got the chance. He was sent flying across the bridge of ship, behind him, the form of the Great Bekon Gyrfen, on one knee and holding his Thunder Hammer tightly. He began to stride forward with newly found strength.
"I trusted you...I held your opinion and word above all else...I had my First-Captain exiled because of you...I thought he was poison...but no...You spread it...You poisoned my Chapter...You killed my closest friends, not me, YOU!...YOU HAVE LIVED TOO LONG SPREADING THE CORRUPTION OF CHAOS! AND WITH THE EMPEROR AT MY SIDE I SHALL RIGHT THE WRONG YOU HAVE DONE TO MY CHAPTER... And you Abadiah, are the first wrong I must erase..."
With that, Chapter Master Bekon Gyrfen brought his massive hammer down upon the already broken body of his former friend, crushing all life from his body, and sentencing him to the Emperors Justice. Captain Aladar then repledged himself to die for the Chapter Master, who had happily agreed to it. The battle was won, but the war had been lost for sure. The traitorous Captains had their ships warp jump away to another chaos controlled sector, leaving only Chapter Master Bekons Crewless ship and Aladars Strike cruiser. Outnumbered nearly 30-1, Lord Gyrfen asked Eclisiarch Iodius to minister the proper rights to see their souls return to the Emperor. The Fates however, pulled different strings, and soon, The chapters 5th and 10th company emerged from the warp, bringing needed reinforcemnts. With them, two Companies of Imperial Fists, a company of Iron Hands and 3 sectors worth of Imperial Guardsmen. The battle was well and truly joined.
The aftermath of the battle was indeed grim. The Word Bearers had been repelled, but the cost was great...Chapter Master Bekon sucumbed to his wounds, his last words was that First-Captain Aladar would suceed him, and that he would have to rebuild the chapter, for this sector was in need of cleansing. The 5th companie's Strike cruiser was abandonned, due to massive damage to the reactors and the hull. The brave admiral piloted the dying ship into the heart of the Word Bearers fleet, before collapsing the reactors, and initiating the self-destruct of the ship. The 5th company was then collected by thunderhawks dispatched by The Imperial Fists and Iron Hands. Among the survivors, the Chapters last Tehcmarine and Apothecary, were recovered. Captain Kritanthus Jorven was one of the many who did not live to see the end of the battle, as his escape pod was hit by debris. His body was recovered, and gene-seed harvested.

The once proud Chapter was then deprived of a homeworld, as the Inquisition deemed it unsavable, and issued a Exterminatus upon all inhabited worlds of Arches Praxes. The Dying Wish set out to find a new recruiting world, where this search may lead them, none are certain...


Any input or criticism is encouraged and welcomed

Superb writing my friend

Nicely done Vanden. A penitent Crusade, and the search for a new recruiting world

Great work, Vanden. A few questions, what's the heraldry, color scheme, etc of the chapter? I can understand if it's WIP, but I figured like I should ask just in case. Other than that, I really like it, and I appreciate that it reminded me of DoW I, and the fall of Isador and his execution by Gabriel Angelos.

Heraldry is a Oval with the sign of the aquilla in it, Oval is coloured Teal.

Colour scheme is going to be majority of the armour coloured teal, with the left shoulder pad Black and bearing the heraldry. Trims are dependant on company, but for this crusade its going to be green.

And they're a imperial fists successor chapter.

I really hate libbys, so of course he had to be the punching bag of the story...

Sounds good. Although I'm not sure how much of a recruiting world Crion can be once we're done with it.

I guess their going to more of a 'preserve and try not to exterminatus the place' than most marine chapters...

Interesting. What's the chapter's regard to 'human' soldiers, such as guardsmen? Respect, pity, arrogance? I'm genuinely intrigued by your chapter.

Also, I'm not sure why I didn't ask this yet, but is Nox dead? He got dragged into a warp rift, but not necessarily dead. I mean, there's a good chance he is, but it's been something I've been curious about.

Easily corruptible, but respectable, for such measly things they certainly are brave. So my chapter would have no problem fighting alongside them, OR against them.

Great Writing Varden I was going over my old introduction and i was wondering if it was ok for an apothecary to become a chapter master, im not sure how he would balance his duties between chapter master and apothecary but is there anything against them being in a command position ?

Cheers m8, Though I personally gagged at the horrid grammar...Is this usually where you guys post your intro's?

 Sgt. Vanden wrote:
Cheers m8, Though I personally gagged at the horrid grammar...Is this usually where you guys post your intro's?

until the thread has been made for the second crusade i suppose it is we are currently wrapping up the the first one.

Glad to see another person joining in.

I will just say to anyone with truly un-negotiable murderous factions: Stay away from my Rogue Trader and ship, please. They're not a combat team, they are basically a civilian and exploration vessel. In CoF1 they were given a political mission rather than combat, and while I don't know if TS/Chazz are going to do those again, I'm not tooling them up to be combatants in 2...

The Admech, fine. They'll attempt to wreck face in return. But leave Ed and Co to do talky things, they'll only hurt themselves if forced to use weaponry.

 Buttery Commissar wrote:
Glad to see another person joining in.

I will just say to anyone with truly un-negotiable murderous factions: Stay away from my Rogue Trader and ship, please. They're not a combat team, they are basically a civilian and exploration vessel. In CoF1 they were given a political mission rather than combat, and while I don't know if TS/Chazz are going to do those again, I'm not tooling them up to be combatants in 2...

The Admech, fine. They'll attempt to wreck face in return. But leave Ed and Co to do talky things, they'll only hurt themselves if forced to use weaponry.

I wouldn't dare try to mess with them. I'd rather fight Skarbrand than get on the wrong side of Selka. Besides, if you get into trouble you've got the Kroot to back you up.

Selka survived CoF purely because Smudge said it wasn't fair to die before he was actually born.
With that in mind I edited my material and gave them a happy ending to that plot line. Originally the conversation with Fairfax about the "sleeping" gas was just Selka accepting the end. There was no psyker, and no reveal, and Ed still thought he blew Marcus' brains out.

I'd probably have regretted it, the snark is too much fun.

Buttery Commissar wrote:Glad to see another person joining in.

I will just say to anyone with truly un-negotiable murderous factions: Stay away from my Rogue Trader and ship, please. They're not a combat team, they are basically a civilian and exploration vessel. In CoF1 they were given a political mission rather than combat, and while I don't know if TS/Chazz are going to do those again, I'm not tooling them up to be combatants in 2...

The Admech, fine. They'll attempt to wreck face in return. But leave Ed and Co to do talky things, they'll only hurt themselves if forced to use weaponry.

How good are Ed and Co at cards? Grulahk my get a little bored

 Buttery Commissar wrote:
Selka survived CoF purely because Smudge said it wasn't fair to die before he was actually born.
With that in mind I edited my material and gave them a happy ending to that plot line. Originally the conversation with Fairfax about the "sleeping" gas was just Selka accepting the end. There was no psyker, and no reveal, and Ed still thought he blew Marcus' brains out.

I'd probably have regretted it, the snark is too much fun.

I can probably integrate some missions for you...

 Buttery Commissar wrote:
Glad to see another person joining in.

I will just say to anyone with truly un-negotiable murderous factions: Stay away from my Rogue Trader and ship, please. They're not a combat team, they are basically a civilian and exploration vessel. In CoF1 they were given a political mission rather than combat, and while I don't know if TS/Chazz are going to do those again, I'm not tooling them up to be combatants in 2...

The Admech, fine. They'll attempt to wreck face in return. But leave Ed and Co to do talky things, they'll only hurt themselves if forced to use weaponry.

They can have some nice chats with my Knights. They enjoy diplomacy

 War Kitten wrote:

 Buttery Commissar wrote:
Glad to see another person joining in.

I will just say to anyone with truly un-negotiable murderous factions: Stay away from my Rogue Trader and ship, please. They're not a combat team, they are basically a civilian and exploration vessel. In CoF1 they were given a political mission rather than combat, and while I don't know if TS/Chazz are going to do those again, I'm not tooling them up to be combatants in 2...

The Admech, fine. They'll attempt to wreck face in return. But leave Ed and Co to do talky things, they'll only hurt themselves if forced to use weaponry.

They can have some nice chats with my Knights. They enjoy diplomacy

Or they could not and your knights could go kill some gak...

You don't control my Knights TS. Nice try though