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note that this is made by WarOne to help me (I noticed some very small spelling mistakes but dont mind them just enjoy)

The abhumans of Helstor II are lucky; lucky in the way that a cockroach is stepped on but still alive. With a dying sun destroying their planet and the Ordo Hereticus directing Imperial forces to exterminate them, the remaining denizens of Helstor II consider themselves very fortunate indeed to still be alive.

Before the star Helstor started flickering like a wild candle dancing in a ragged breeze back, Hellstor II was a world of beauty. With its sister plaent Hellstor I, these twin planets were abundant in rich soil, temperate climate, and ardent support of the Emperor. Each cycle, millions of citizens from the twin planets would join the Hellstorm Regiments, which numbered in the hundreds, and would join other infamous Imperial Gaurd units such as the Cadians (whom they shared an affinity for and adopted the wargear of) in defense of the Imperium. Hailed as an example of Imperial administration comparable to the domain of Ultramar, Hellstorians were thrilled to become host to a new Chapter of Space Marines known as the Ardent Flamekeepers after the last founding. At its height, the Hellstor system boasted a population of over 30 billion and was fast on its way to becoming a shining jewel of Imperial might.

Then the Hellstor star started to die.

At first, it flickered. This caused severe climate changes to both planets as Hellstor II became barely habitable. Billions died as the pleas for aid of the Imperial Governor were lost in the Administratum on Holy Terra. Once proud supporters of the Emperor began to turn on one another as foodstuffs became scarce. The Ardent Flamekeepers did their best to preserve peace as food riots erupted, but strained as they were in duties on multiple warfronts, the skeleton force of Space Marines was barely able to contain the revolt.

When the solar storms from Hellstor erupted, Hellstor I caught the brunt of the damage. Entire oceans of water and cities of men boiled away in an instant. The atmosphere was stripped from the planet, and all the inhabitants, including the fortress monestary of the Ardent Flamekeepers were incinerated or vaporized by cosmic radiation. Hellstor I became a husk world, dead in everything but the devestation that was wrought. Hellstor II itself barely survived the resultant ruination. The atmosphere became choked with the radiation pollutants of the Hellstor star. Sulfuric rain pelted the unwary masses, and millions more died as their bodies were rotted away by the poisonous and acidic gases that started choking the valleys and cities. All seemed lost as the decimated Space Marines and the thinly stretched Helstor regiments huddled with the masses in the hive cities to await the final deathknell of their doomed existence.

A miracle arrived in the form of an apparent Imperial vangaurd heralded by the Magos Biologis Ferin Invericus. With his technological assistance, he claimed to be able to adapt the surviving humans of Hellstor II to not only resist the climate changes, but to thrive in them as well. The remaining Space Marines, the de facto rulers of the planet since the original Imperial Governor and Chapter Master had died in Hellstor I's death, reluctantly agreed, and provided at Invericus's assistance their gene seed in order to help adapt the survivng populace.

After a cycle of experimental genetic work wherein millions more of the citizenry died to famine, disease, and poison, and countless others were tested, dissected, and warped by Invericus, the Magos Biologis finally unveiled the fruits of his work: an injected serum that reconstituted the respiratory track and epidermal resistance of the victim to poisonous gases, much like the enhanced superhuman qualities of a regular Space Marine.

Quickly spreading his miracle cure to the thankful, remaining masses, Invericus left the Hellstor system, with none the wiser that the entire populace had become victims of a disguised Fabius Bile, the Chaos Space Marine known for his vile and contemptable mutation experiments on mankind.

Within less than a cycle, Fabius' work came to fruition. Segments of the populace started going mad, crazily attacking anything that moved. Hellstor regiments quickly put down those that were stricken, but the mutations became worse. Hordes of monsters began roaming the streets as people with weak constitutions failed to adapt to the mutating serum they were previously administered. Worse, Fabius had also began experiments on the local fauna that survived in the stunted wilds of Hellstor II. Packs of thickly armored bipedal lizards known as dragonthoropes began joined the mutated abominations as they roamed freely dealing carnage to those who were unprotected. Survivors quickly filled the streets in anger and protest, as they now rightly concluded that their savior had also turned them into monsters.

And at the worst time, the Imperium finally answered the calls of distress in the form of a true Magos Biologis and a regiment of Imperial Gaurds carrying supplies and munitions to the beleaguered people of Hellstor II.

What they found was a fractured populace that now united in hatred of the Imperium. The remaining Ardent Flamekeepers, who had now turned bitter and furious at their own weakness and plight of the people they were sworn to protect, led the remaining Hellstor regiments in a massacre of the Imerpial representative and most of his retinue. The few gaurds who survived the onslaught boarded their ships and fled the system, intent on reported the uprising of a heretical Space Marine chapter and a renegade populace.

The army and people of Hellstor II were exhausted and moribund. In reflection, they realized their culpability in being duped by Fabius Bile and their actions against Imperial officials. Slowly, they also awakened to the realization that they were also not fullly human anymore. The Imperium would consider them second-class abhumans at best, and heretical mutants at worst.

But any hope of salvation was quickly dashed as the Imperium quickly responded to the supposed uprising on Hellstor by sending a Mission of Adepta Sororitas and ten Imperial regiments supporting the Ordo Hereticus to eradicate and cleanse the populace.

In preparation of their arrival, the Ardent Flamekeepers consolidated the Hellstor army into the largest remaining regiment of veteran soliders still active on the planet, the Hellstor 171st. A battle-hardened core of warriors, their greatest asset was the vast quantity of tanks and transports that made them efficient heavy support elements of any battle they joined. With their experience coupled with the last remaining reserves, Hellstor II bitterly hunkered down for a war in which they knew extermination would be the result if they lost. The battlelines became drawn as the Imperial Navy dropships unloaded their militant cargo upon the scarred world and prepared to face the deviant Ardent Flamekeepers and their heretical support army.

As a final and brutal reminder of the event that caused their current situation, the Hellstor star erupted one last time in a searing seizure of energy in the form of a gigantic solar flare. While too far away for Hellstor Ii to be affected, Hellstor I was engulfed by the gigantic explosion and subsequently torn apart.

The flaming debris of the planet scattered across the star system, pelting Hellstor II in an apocalyptic wave of meteors that eradicated large swaths of both the Ordo Hereticus and to a lesser extent the more apocalypse-experienced Hellstor 171st regiment.

In joking defiance to the event, the Hellstorians fittingly renamed their planet Hellstorm and subsequently called their sole surviving regiment the Hellstorm 171st. Further, they also saw one sole benefit of the new meteoric conditions of their planet; the forces they faced were now reduced to a third of their original size, and the Imperial Navy that supported them was virtually eliminated in the first wave of planetary chunks that immolated and destroyed their best and largest space crafts.

But the Adepta Sororitas was hardly defeated. Rallying their surviving soldiers, they then began the Battle of Hellstorm against the Ardent Flamekeepers and the Hellstorm 171st on a battlefield that knew the blood of billions, choked the life out of the unprepared with poisonous gases, and felt the rhythmic beat of asteroids that incessantly drummed the once proud planet.

Love it!

A bit how could I say novel ish.

Wow...... awesome!

Renegades FTW!!!

Chapter Approved!

M.

Moving thread to Dakka Fiction.

If you want, feel free to edit the mistakes. I went back over the original as much as posible to catch any mistakes i did make. Hmm...maybe copy and paste to Word Office and have it edit some bits; might make it better.

EDIT: Here is a copy and paste I just did fixing spelling errors and some minor grammatical errors:

The abhumans of Helstor II are lucky; lucky in the way that a cockroach is stepped on but still alive. With a dying sun destroying their planet and the Ordo Hereticus directing Imperial forces to exterminate them, the remaining denizens of Helstor II consider themselves very fortunate indeed to still be alive.

Before the star Helstor started flickering like a wild candle dancing in a ragged breeze back, Helstor II was a world of beauty. With its sister planet Helstor I, these twin planets were abundant in rich soil, temperate climate, and ardent support of the Emperor. Each cycle, millions of citizens from the twin planets would join the Hellstorm Regiments, which numbered in the hundreds, and would join other infamous Imperial Guard units such as the Cadians (whom they shared an affinity for and adopted the war gear of) in defense of the Imperium. Hailed as an example of Imperial administration comparable to the domain of Ultramar, Helstorians were thrilled to become host to a new Chapter of Space Marines known as the Ardent Flamekeepers after the last founding. At its height, the Helstor system boasted a population of over 30 billion and was fast on its way to becoming a shining jewel of Imperial might.

Then the Helstor star started to die.

At first, it flickered. This caused severe climate changes to both planets as Helstor II became barely habitable. Billions died as the pleas for aid of the Imperial Governor were lost in the Administratum on Holy Terra. The once proud supporters of the Emperor began to turn on one another as foodstuffs became scarce. The Ardent Flamekeepers did their best to preserve peace as food riots erupted, but strained as they were in duties on multiple warfronts, the skeleton force of Space Marines was barely able to contain the revolt.

When the solar storms from Helstor erupted, Helstor I caught the brunt of the damage. Entire oceans of water and cities of men boiled away in an instant. The atmosphere was stripped from the planet, and all the inhabitants, including the fortress monastery of the Ardent Flamekeepers were incinerated or vaporized by cosmic radiation. Helstor I became a husk world, dead in everything but the devastation that was wrought. Helstor II itself barely survived the resultant ruination. The atmosphere became choked with the radiation pollutants of the Helstor star. Sulfuric rain pelted the unwary masses, and millions more died as their bodies were rotted away by the poisonous and acidic gases that started choking the valleys and cities. All seemed lost as the decimated Space Marines and the thinly stretched Helstor regiments huddled with the masses in the hive cities to await the final death knell of their doomed existence.

A miracle arrived in the form of an apparent Imperial vanguard heralded by the Magos Biologis Ferin Invericus. With his technological assistance, he claimed to be able to adapt the surviving humans of Helstor II to not only resist the climate changes, but to thrive in them as well. The remaining Space Marines, the de facto rulers of the planet since the original Imperial Governor and Chapter Master had died in Helstor I's death, reluctantly agreed, and provided at Invericus' assistance their gene seed in order to help adapt the surviving populace.

After a cycle of experimental genetic work wherein millions more of the citizenry died to famine, disease, and poison, and countless others were tested, dissected, and warped by Invericus, the Magos Biologis finally unveiled the fruits of his work: an injected serum that reconstituted the respiratory track and epidermal resistance of the victim to poisonous gases, much like the enhanced superhuman qualities of a regular Space Marine.

Quickly spreading his miracle cure to the thankful, remaining masses, Invericus left the Helstor system, with none the wiser that the entire populace had become victims of the disguised Fabius Bile, the Chaos Space Marine known for his vile and contemptible mutation experiments on mankind.

Within less than a cycle, Fabius' work came to fruition. Segments of the populace started going mad, crazily attacking anything that moved. Helstor regiments quickly put down those that were stricken, but the mutations became worse. Hordes of monsters began roaming the streets as people with weak constitutions failed to adapt to the mutating serum they were previously administered. Worse, Fabius had also begun experiments on the local fauna that survived in the stunted wilds of Helstor II. Packs of thickly armored bipedal lizards known as dragonthoropes began joined the mutated abominations as they roamed freely dealing carnage to those who were unprotected. Survivors quickly filled the streets in anger and protest, as they now rightly concluded that their savior had also turned them into monsters.

And at the worst time, the Imperium finally answered the calls of distress in the form of a true Magos Biologis and a regiment of Imperial Guards carrying supplies and munitions to the beleaguered people of Helstor II.

What they found was a fractured populace that now united in hatred of the Imperium. The remaining Ardent Flamekeepers, who had now turned bitter and furious at their own weakness and plight of the people they were sworn to protect, led the remaining Helstor regiments in a massacre of the Imperial representative and most of his retinue. The few guards who survived the onslaught boarded their ships and fled the system, intent on reported the uprising of a heretical Space Marine chapter and a renegade populace.

The army and people of Helstor II were exhausted and moribund. In reflection, they realized their culpability in being duped by Fabius Bile and their actions against Imperial officials. Slowly, they also awakened to the realization that they were also not fully human anymore. The Imperium would consider them second-class abhumans at best and heretical mutants at worst.

But any hope of salvation was quickly dashed as the Imperium quickly responded to the supposed uprising on Helstor by sending a Mission of Adepta Sororitas and ten Imperial regiments supporting the Ordo Hereticus to eradicate and cleanse the populace.

In preparation of their arrival, the Ardent Flamekeepers consolidated the Helstor army into the largest remaining regiment of veteran soldiers still active on the planet, the Hellstor 171st. A battle-hardened core of warriors, their greatest asset was the vast quantity of tanks and transports that made them efficient heavy support elements of any battle they joined. With their experience coupled with the last remaining reserves, Helstor II bitterly hunkered down for a war in which they knew extermination would be the result if they lost. The battle lines became drawn as the Imperial Navy drop ships unloaded their militant cargo upon the scarred world and prepared to face the deviant Ardent Flamekeepers and their heretical support army.

As a final and brutal reminder of the event that caused their current situation, the Helstor star erupted one last time in a searing seizure of energy in the form of a gigantic solar flare. While too far away for Helstor Ii to be affected, Helstor I was engulfed by the gigantic explosion and subsequently torn apart.

The flaming debris of the planet scattered across the star system, pelting Helstor II in an apocalyptic wave of meteors that eradicated large swaths of both the Ordo Hereticus and to a lesser extent the more apocalypse-experienced Helstor 171st regiment.

In joking defiance to the event, the Helstorians fittingly renamed their planet Hellstorm and subsequently called their sole surviving regiment the Hellstorm 171st. Further, they also saw one sole benefit of the new meteoric conditions of their planet; the forces they faced were now reduced to a third of their original size, and the Imperial Navy that supported them was virtually eliminated in the first wave of planetary chunks that immolated and destroyed their best and largest space crafts.

But the Adepta Sororitas was hardly defeated. Rallying their surviving soldiers, they then began the Battle of Hellstorm against the Ardent Flamekeepers and the Hellstorm 171st on a battlefield that knew the blood of billions, choked the life out of the unprepared with poisonous gases, and felt the rhythmic beat of asteroids that incessantly drummed the once proud planet.