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The epistolary's supernatural powers will forever seperate him from others, but Lenore resolved to soften that barrier as best he could.
Everyone in the talons was sat around the steel table, and when Agapito himself entered, all stood. "Be seated, brothers." They all sat back down, chairs supporting thier massive weight, thanks to the reinforcing ceramite running inside them. the commanders were gathered according to thier detachments- Corax, Praxis, Audax and Validus were seated to the left of Agapito and his honour guard.
"We have suffered a crippling blow, this chapter, and several others have too. The imperium is in dour need of warriors to defend us from Xenos, traitors and heretics." the latter of the three earned hisses of hate through grimacing faces. "We have decided that around 600 astartes will stay here, in deliverence, to oversee the rebuilding of this once-noble chapter." Cortus, a Commander, in the same rank as Lenore, opened his mouth to speak. Agapito cut him off with a hand, palm out. "But that is not us. Arendi's astartes will do that duty. We have been chosen, along with commanders Branne and Alconi, to be split up to multiple worlds an systems, where the need for us is great." "What of deployment, commander?" Asked commander Hudon.
"There will be companies of 100 or so, a mixture of crusade, tactical, assault, scout and bike squads for more variation and adaptability. "the only exception will be that I will lead 220 astartes, including 10 crusaders, 20 assault marines, 18 bikers, 30 scouts, 130 tactical, and my personal honour guard. "Lenore will lead 70 astartes, a mixture of his choice." Then came the other commanders, each getting thier choice of mixtures, but being set a specific number of men, with orders to include at least a squad of each speciality, with at least 2 full tactical squads.
They then left, to think of who they shall take with them on this crusade of vengeance.
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DS:90-S++G+++M++B++I+Plotr06#+D+++A++++/eWD251R+++T(Ot)DM+ JB: I like the concept of a free Shrike roaming through the treetops of the jungle. I'm not sure that I like the idea of a real Shrike sitting on my couch eating my Skittles. corpsesarefun: Thank god I missed be nice to shrike day. greenskin lynn: because of all the skittles and soda, you basically live off sugar water, like some sort of freakish human-hummingbird hybrid.
i would chnage dour in dire as this would be more apropriate in that context... also the first sentence is a really good one but stay in one tense... past that is...so will will be would...
otherwise i think the story is developing quite nice and i think this will be a good opener for further , maybe short spotlight story parts... i think the storyline is now forking into many subplots...maybe you should now make in your secret hideout a flowchart so not to loose controll of subplots! that might help.
the preperations of war sound mightyly like armylists^^ and i would think about that a tad... but honestly i can´t thinkabout a way to keep forcenumbers out of sucha storyline^^
soooo... you already gamed through space marine yet...you´ve been awfully quite the last days^^
Viktor von Domm wrote:i would chnage dour in dire as this would be more apropriate in that context... also the first sentence is a really good one but stay in one tense... past that is...so will will be would...
otherwise i think the story is developing quite nice and i think this will be a good opener for further , maybe short spotlight story parts... i think the storyline is now forking into many subplots...maybe you should now make in your secret hideout a flowchart so not to loose controll of subplots! that might help.
the preperations of war sound mightyly like armylists^^ and i would think about that a tad... but honestly i can´t thinkabout a way to keep forcenumbers out of sucha storyline^^
soooo... you already gamed through space marine yet...you´ve been awfully quite the last days^^
space marine and minecraft, been busy lately ^^
DS:90-S++G+++M++B++I+Plotr06#+D+++A++++/eWD251R+++T(Ot)DM+ JB: I like the concept of a free Shrike roaming through the treetops of the jungle. I'm not sure that I like the idea of a real Shrike sitting on my couch eating my Skittles. corpsesarefun: Thank god I missed be nice to shrike day. greenskin lynn: because of all the skittles and soda, you basically live off sugar water, like some sort of freakish human-hummingbird hybrid.
so, one more thing to add to the 'Things-Shrike-Is-Adictted-to' list
Shrike, get Terraria, cheper then Minecraft and, imho, better
And they developers are always improving it (next update they are making for the game has been revealed (by them) to include drills, dragons (that look like the one of never-ending story, great movie ) , faries (that look like Navi off The Legend Of Zelda) and lots more (including multi-coloured torches!)
U know you want to
OnTopic: Great looking fluff
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Matt.Kingsley wrote:so, one more thing to add to the 'Things-Shrike-Is-Adictted-to' list
-dakka
-minecraft
-warhammer
-space marine
-youtube
-gaming in general
Shrike, get Terraria, cheper then Minecraft and, imho, better
I'll think about it
And they developers are always improving it (next update they are making for the game has been revealed (by them) to include drills, dragons (that look like the one of never-ending story, great movie ) , faries (that look like Navi off The Legend Of Zelda) and lots more (including multi-coloured torches!)
U know you want to
OnTopic: Great looking fluff
DS:90-S++G+++M++B++I+Plotr06#+D+++A++++/eWD251R+++T(Ot)DM+ JB: I like the concept of a free Shrike roaming through the treetops of the jungle. I'm not sure that I like the idea of a real Shrike sitting on my couch eating my Skittles. corpsesarefun: Thank god I missed be nice to shrike day. greenskin lynn: because of all the skittles and soda, you basically live off sugar water, like some sort of freakish human-hummingbird hybrid.
thanks matt... getting a young already addicted an even better drug....thanks a heap...now he will never be able to get anything worthwhile done...i think i have to make some calls to get a nice powershortage in GB to finally get shrike to paint in candlelight^^
Viktor von Domm wrote:thanks matt... getting a young already addicted an even better drug....thanks a heap...now he will never be able to get anything worthwhile done...i think i have to make some calls to get a nice powershortage in GB to finally get shrike to paint in candlelight^^
^^
I'll try and paint up some raven guard for you this weekend, vik.
No promises though ^^
DS:90-S++G+++M++B++I+Plotr06#+D+++A++++/eWD251R+++T(Ot)DM+ JB: I like the concept of a free Shrike roaming through the treetops of the jungle. I'm not sure that I like the idea of a real Shrike sitting on my couch eating my Skittles. corpsesarefun: Thank god I missed be nice to shrike day. greenskin lynn: because of all the skittles and soda, you basically live off sugar water, like some sort of freakish human-hummingbird hybrid.
and because I can, here's a brief introduction to space marines, as if we don't already know it ^^:
DS:90-S++G+++M++B++I+Plotr06#+D+++A++++/eWD251R+++T(Ot)DM+ JB: I like the concept of a free Shrike roaming through the treetops of the jungle. I'm not sure that I like the idea of a real Shrike sitting on my couch eating my Skittles. corpsesarefun: Thank god I missed be nice to shrike day. greenskin lynn: because of all the skittles and soda, you basically live off sugar water, like some sort of freakish human-hummingbird hybrid.
Lol, and your probably gonna get eaten by Nids. Btw, great story so far, just dont like how quishy your necrons are.
Veteran Sergeant wrote:In the grim darkness of the far future, the guy with a rifle is the weakest man on the battlefield, left to quake in terror, hoping the two or three shots he gets do the job before somebody runs screaming across the battlefield to hit him with an energized stick.
Veteran Sergeant wrote:In the grim darkness of the far future, the guy with a rifle is the weakest man on the battlefield, left to quake in terror, hoping the two or three shots he gets do the job before somebody runs screaming across the battlefield to hit him with an energized stick.
JohnnoM wrote:Lol, and your probably gonna get eaten by Nids. Btw, great story so far, just dont like how quishy your necrons are.
Well a friend of mine pointed out earlier how 'crons awoke well after the horus heresy, so I'm gonna change it to a similar race later.
DS:90-S++G+++M++B++I+Plotr06#+D+++A++++/eWD251R+++T(Ot)DM+ JB: I like the concept of a free Shrike roaming through the treetops of the jungle. I'm not sure that I like the idea of a real Shrike sitting on my couch eating my Skittles. corpsesarefun: Thank god I missed be nice to shrike day. greenskin lynn: because of all the skittles and soda, you basically live off sugar water, like some sort of freakish human-hummingbird hybrid.
Veteran Sergeant wrote:In the grim darkness of the far future, the guy with a rifle is the weakest man on the battlefield, left to quake in terror, hoping the two or three shots he gets do the job before somebody runs screaming across the battlefield to hit him with an energized stick.
now here´s a thought... i think in the long run we need more new races in 40k anyway...becuzase lets face it the IoM needs new xenos once in a while to blast them into orbit^^
I agree. But what should they be based on? E.g bovine (tau) etc.
Veteran Sergeant wrote:In the grim darkness of the far future, the guy with a rifle is the weakest man on the battlefield, left to quake in terror, hoping the two or three shots he gets do the job before somebody runs screaming across the battlefield to hit him with an energized stick.
Veteran Sergeant wrote:In the grim darkness of the far future, the guy with a rifle is the weakest man on the battlefield, left to quake in terror, hoping the two or three shots he gets do the job before somebody runs screaming across the battlefield to hit him with an energized stick.
Veteran Sergeant wrote:In the grim darkness of the far future, the guy with a rifle is the weakest man on the battlefield, left to quake in terror, hoping the two or three shots he gets do the job before somebody runs screaming across the battlefield to hit him with an energized stick.
Bobbing along on the briny North Sea, and Montrose, Scotland when home
You could have Hrud migration to deal with?
Loved the WH40K in a minute, and your story is sounding great.
If interested I could get info from the Xenology for you.
Kanluwen wrote: What's that quote from Mauleed? "When you can make complete strangers on the Internet hate you, you know you're doing something magical."?
Hatemonger wrote: If that is true, then GW must be run by Gandalf and Nagash and Harry Potter and Tinker Bell, because this site alone is crapping rainbows worth of magical internet nerdrage.
- H8
dantay_xv wrote:You could have Hrud migration to deal with?
Loved the WH40K in a minute, and your story is sounding great.
If interested I could get info from the Xenology for you.
sure!
I'm liking the insect-themed idea, with the tomb stalkers as giant centipedes and the lord as a cockroach... hmm...
think the peter jackson king kong in that ravine
DS:90-S++G+++M++B++I+Plotr06#+D+++A++++/eWD251R+++T(Ot)DM+ JB: I like the concept of a free Shrike roaming through the treetops of the jungle. I'm not sure that I like the idea of a real Shrike sitting on my couch eating my Skittles. corpsesarefun: Thank god I missed be nice to shrike day. greenskin lynn: because of all the skittles and soda, you basically live off sugar water, like some sort of freakish human-hummingbird hybrid.
Bobbing along on the briny North Sea, and Montrose, Scotland when home
Hmmm, let me take pics or scan the pages of xenology for you, I do noty think they are insects
Kanluwen wrote: What's that quote from Mauleed? "When you can make complete strangers on the Internet hate you, you know you're doing something magical."?
Hatemonger wrote: If that is true, then GW must be run by Gandalf and Nagash and Harry Potter and Tinker Bell, because this site alone is crapping rainbows worth of magical internet nerdrage.
- H8
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