Forum adverts like this one are shown to any user who is not logged in. Join us by filling out a tiny 3 field form and you will get your own, free, dakka user account which gives a good range of benefits to you: No adverts like this in the forums anymore. Times and dates in your local timezone. Full tracking of what you have read so you can skip to your first unread post, easily see what has changed since you last logged in, and easily see what is new at a glance. Email notifications for threads you want to watch closely. Being a part of the oldest wargaming community on the net. If you are already a member then feel free to login now.

Ma55ter_fett wrote:As with before I’m not trying to steal your fire, it’s just that at times I find passages in your posts that don’t seem quite right. Such as the one below (again the bit I take issue with is the bit between the 's)

Miqit did a quick gear check before taking a closer look at his brothers. Captain Ruusa, with his double bladed power axe and storm shield, looked determined and anxious to find the fallen Captain Razzik. The Captain seemed to notice Miqit’s look and he nodded his pointed ice blue helm at him. Miqit returned the gesture before looking over to Bel Hando. Bel Hando is the sergeant to the Shwando, a newly formed devastator unit; his usual demeanor has been replaced by one of sorrow for loosing his first two battle brothers under his command. Ishtim took fire from a mob of lootas and Tock-tzu fell into the darkness with Razzik.

To me this reads like to me is that bit at the beginning of screenplays where each character is listed along with a short paragraph that acts as both a biography and an explanation of their motives. To me it seems to break the flow of the story. Thus far all the segments of this story that you have posted have been very much set in the present and are very much action driven. Stopping the current progression of events to reiterate something that already happened or to go into depth on a character breaks the immersion.

I would suggest having a paragraph at the beginning of each new post where you recap significant events in the story thus far that affect the current installment. Also in this paragraph you can include information about the characters that the reader might not know about.

Hopefully what I have written makes sense. Your writing is getting better but there are still a number of spots where the narrative gets a little rough on the reader.

I always appreciate your feedback and the CC. I am still trying to figure out when I should have a recap and when it isn't necessary. I thought about having an appendix, like what Whalemusic suggested, but haven't been able to determine a good way to do so in this forum format. I think in this particular highlighted section the recap seemed to fit in with what Miqit would have been seeing and thinking about, but not necessarily something the reader would have forgotten.

Other then explaining some unknown about a character, when should a recap such as the above be given in a story?

In my mind its usually at the beginning of a book, but here in the forum should I assume that everyone reading my story has read everything up to date? Or treat every post almost like a new book? Thoughts?

Maybe I could edit a post in the beginning and add all of the useful information, then put a link in newer posts referring back to the character list. More thoughts?

I dont think we can do sub or super script, but that would be the way to go if you could figure it out.

Really nice work Ice. I saved the reading of this until I had time to properly take it in. Thanks for your efforts, they are quite enjoyable. And yeah... I'm hooked too.

Gitsplitta wrote:Really nice work Ice. I saved the reading of this until I had time to properly take it in. Thanks for your efforts, they are quite enjoyable. And yeah... I'm hooked too.

I am glad you guys are continuing to read along and see where I am going. I feel that with the good feedback I've been able to really make some strides in the right direction. After thinking more on what Ma55ter_fett said, I am going to make some sort of appendix like post. I may just stick it here on page 5 and then link back to it on further posts. I already had a page that I used on a regular basis to keep my own guys straight so I just need to change it up a bit and we should be good to go. I think I am going to work on that before posting more on my story. I may be able to add some great pictures too. Most of these characters are actually in my army and painted, I just need to take some good pictures of them.

Thats an excellent idea Ice! Would be nice to be able to refer back to such a page.

Ice Angel Characters
Chapter Master Librarian Duggon: known for bringing Shattermantle to the aid of the Death Specters saving them from near annihilation, accredited for destroying Waaaagh Redface, participated in the third Armageddon War, carries into battle his two force claws.

Captain Ruusa – 2nd Captain, accredited for turning tides on Blavin IV, stopped a splinter cell of Hive Fleet Leviathan, wields poweraxe and shield

Captain Razzik: 12th Captain, recently promoted to Captain from squad Ashurbani, wields his powerfist and shield into combat. Known for holding Fortress Laven against the Cult of the Ebon Fist.

Techmarine Philosir: 2nd Techmarine, demolition expert, known for his great strives in space warfare.

Brother Frakatuzuli - aka Frank: The last remaining original Blood Angel in the chapter, now entombed in a dreadnought, wielder of the Anchor, known for his wisdom and story telling.

Ice Angel Units
Veteran Squad Uttuakki – Color Orange – infiltration and special ops unit
Sergeant Muttabriqu: wields a powerfist and plasma pistol
Bel Uri: Second in command. Wields a powerfist and chainsword and is known for his amazing combat prowess
Miqit: The newest member, wields his meltagun Kwu-akki
Sidana
Bennu
Sarabda: Meltagun
Tirid
Idiptu
Rabishu
Umru: Auspex and communications

Tactical Squad Kurigulzu
Sergeant Kadakrazz: power axe, plasma pistol
Mi-luqua Vaz: Helped train the Ivory Skull chapter and to this day wears his black skull helm they gifted him
Rattmu: Heavy bolter
Fwuapuu
T’Qwaba
Deemethresi

Veteran Squad Ashurbani – Color Purple – known for use of hand flamers

Assault Squad Labushi
Sergeant Shu-Turul
Ruqum
Dtril
Utaan
Tani

Tactical Squad Rimsin

Devastator Squad Shwando – one of the chapter’s newest units
Sergeant Bel Hando: Recently promoted, wields combi-flamer
Baris: Heavy bolter
Tock-tzu: Multi-melta
Gilgam Heavy bolter
Ishtin Heavy bolter

Other Characters
Sergeant Pyrox – Fire Angels – Rescued by Ice Angels aboard Dark Eldar ship.

After much internal discussion, I decided to start with a real basic list of characters. What, if anything, do you think I should add to that character list? Any other info, or descriptions?

Whats the (D) mean? Pronunciation might be good too.

whalemusic360 wrote:Whats the (D) mean? Pronunciation might be good too.

The (D) was something for me, not meant to be in the post. I'll have to write out all of those phonetically.

A short bio, with things like wargear, deeds, etc (where appropriate) would be cool too. I much more think "Multimelta Guy" then the actual name. Hell my guys are usually named with numbers denoting company, squad, and number in that squad. Fear Brother 3-5-3 and his mighty meltagun!

whalemusic360 wrote:A short bio, with things like wargear, deeds, etc (where appropriate) would be cool too. I much more think "Multimelta Guy" then the actual name. Hell my guys are usually named with numbers denoting company, squad, and number in that squad. Fear Brother 3-5-3 and his mighty meltagun!

I think I will add a little bit more, but I don't want there to be a whole summary, or a list of things they've done. That's what you have to read the story for!

I was thinking more like, for instance:
Uriel Ventris: Captain 7th company. Former Deathwatch. Leader during the defence of whatever that planet was from nids, quelled rebellion and slew unknown alien on that other place, slew traitor legion scum on their own turf. Know to carry a bloter, power sword, and bolt pistol. All around BAMF.

I just read the first chapter (The ice dangler hunt).

Your action scenes are nicely choreographed, although it would have been nicer to see more use of the jet (And I was confused at first about why it wasn't mentioned that much when they were in an asteroid belt). Whatever happens, you've got a new reader here!

Necroman wrote:I just read the first chapter (The ice dangler hunt).

Your action scenes are nicely choreographed, although it would have been nicer to see more use of the jet (And I was confused at first about why it wasn't mentioned that much when they were in an asteroid belt). Whatever happens, you've got a new reader here!

I'm glad you like! This is not only my army fluff, but a way to improve my writing skills. Read on and it will improve!

@ WM - hmmm, I like your summary. I may be able to do something along those lines, but keep the summary all pre-this-story stuff.

As the bombs went off a large majority of the vessel simply vanished. Gouts of flame shot into space, hues of purple and blue could be seen over the brief glimpse of red. The outer shell broke apart and shattered. The chunks flew through space in nearly every direction at once.

From a safe distance away the Imperial Fleet watched. All the fleet rejoiced as the last remaining rokk in this system was destroyed. All except one ship, the Frozen Rage.

Aboard the aft observation deck the Ice Angel officers along with several of the naval staff gathered. They watched in silence as the remnants of the ork rokk scattered into space. The loss of their brethren, especially Captain Ruusa, left the room a somber tone. Even the outspoken Bel Hando hung his head in quite contemplation.

As the last bits of rock dispersed out of view Captain Razzik turned from the glass to look over his command. At his movement many Ice Angels looked up and regarded the now 11th Captain of the Ice Angel Chapter. Unlike many chapters that follow the rigid Codex Astartes, the Ice Angels use a different system for their captains. When one falls in battle all other captains of lower rank are promoted. It is the only promotion that they regret.

After a few more moments of thought Captain Razzik addressed his command, “The history books and records of the Imperium will remember this battle on Rokk Mekaroid as the final stand against orks in this system, a minor victory in the grand scheme of the Waaaagh that plagues this sector. To us, it will be a great tragedy that will be etched into the ice tombs deep in Shattermantle. Even now the fleet rejoices and prepares to move towards the next system to begin anew the battle against the greenskin.”

Captain Razzik slowly began to prowl the room; every one he passed bowed their heads or nodded. “Instead of moving forward with the fleet we’ve been requested at high command to report our Dark Eldar findings directly to them. We will then be heading back to Shattermantle to tell our tale to Master Daggon and etch the final chapter of Captain Ruusa into his shard.”

Razzik ended his walk in front of Brother Frakatazuli, who was in his standard furiouso dreadnought suit. Razzik looked up into the ice blue light of Frakatazuli’s tomb. The dreadnought simply looked back and then turned to leave the room.

“Commander Seluku.” Razzik said as he looked over at a tall lanky naval officer.
“Yes, my Captain.” Seluku said with a bow.
Razzik turned to regard the loyal Commander of the Frozen Rage. The commander wore a dark gray long coat and his long skull plugs shined in the artificial light. They reminded Razzik of silver dreadlocks. “Send a signal to the Imperial Fleet of our departure then prepare for warp travel. I’ll be on the bridge shortly.”
“It shall be done.” Seluku said with another bow. He immediately left the observation deck along with all of the other naval officers.

When the double doors closed Razzik regarded his, command. Many of the pale faces had taken orders from Ruusa for many decades some even centuries; Philosir had been at Ruusa’s side from his beginning as a scout. Razzik’s light blue eyes met with Philosir and he stopped himself from speaking. Instead he dismissed the room. One by one they filed out, their black robes making little sound as they past by the captain. Finally only Razzik and Philosir stood in the room.

Techmarine Philosir was, as always, in his armor. Even with many of his weapon arms changed out to tools and his power axe replaced with his staff, Philosir still had an aura of power around him. One of the few parts of the techmarine that wasn’t machine was his face. Philosir always said that you can never have enough senses, why not keep your own and get mechanical ones. His scarred face looked paler then a typical Ice Angel and his once vibrant eyes were now cold and distant.

“How is our guest?” Razzik asked.

Philosir paused then said “He is awake and physically improving, but still keeping quiet.” He pulled out a datapad from a hip compartment. “According to Cyaxares and Attikusu he is both of able body and mind.” After pushing a series of buttons he turned the pad over to Razzik.

Razzik closely regarded the pad, “I think we should have a chat then. Any luck with the device?”

“Some, but it will take more time before I can unlock all of its secrets.” Philosir paused before continuing on. “It would be much more beneficial if I could dismantle it and try to understand the inner workings.”

Razzik turned and stared out into space, rules and regulations filled his mind, “I agree Philosir. Do what you must. Keep me informed.”

With a head bow the Techpriest turned and left the room.

* * * * * * * * * * * *

As the sleek black Ice Angel ship turned away from the fleet a bulky dark gray vessel turned in pursuit. The two ships were of similar size, but very different designs. The Ice Angel ship was bristling with artillery for ship to ship combat, the bow of the Frozen Rage was a giant ram that could deliver an entire detachment of marines directly into enemy vessels. If it had a hilt the ship would have looked similar to a sword.

The gray ship was now pulling along side, its armored bulk held banks of drop pods, space to surface weapons, and according to the wolf insignia, Space Wolves.

“Commander Seluku, we just received word that the Space Wolves will be accompanying us. They too have been ordered to high command. “The communications officer reported.

Seluku turned from his throne towards Captain Razzik, who was only a few steps away over looking the command compartment of the Frozen Rage. Captain Razzik looked out at the Space Wolf vessel, the Polar Kraken.

“Tell Andvett Rockstorm, we’ll protect his squat freighter any time.” Razzik said with a chuckle. As the message was sent Razzik could hear in his head the obnoxious belly laugh of Andvett Rockstorm. They had fought side by side on only a few occasions but during this small ork incursion they had spoke many times. A mutual respect had been bonded between the two space marine forces.

Without waiting for a response the Frozen Rage tore into the warp with the Polar Kraken at its heels.

* * * * * * * * * * * * *

After the warp transition was completed and all systems checked out, Captain Razzik headed down to the infirmary. The entrance to the medical facility was a bustle of activity. Several Brothers had been recently released from their injuries and others were coming in to visit the more seriously wounded.

Once inside, the Captain was reminded of how many losses the cursed Dark Eldar had caused. With a prayer on his breath he visited each marine. The last marine he met up with was Tock-tzu. He had severe internal damage, but will pull through in only a few short weeks.

As Captain Razzik left Tock’s room he heard a metal tray crash to the floor. Rounding the corner were several of the operation chambers, Razzik came up to one of the windows to see some of the medical staff and servitors fitting an Ice Angel with a bionic arm.

A burly marine named Rattmu was seated on the edge of a table, a massive bionic arm was straight out in front of him, silver tools were all over the floor. He was flush with frustration. At the sight of Razzik he immediately calmed down. “Captain” was all he said.
“Rattmu, hows the new arm?”
“If they could get it to respond correctly, it would be fine.” He responded.
A female medic named Arwia appeared from a small side room, “Actually, it appears to be responded correctly, your brain however is not properly….”
Rattmu shot her a glance that abruptly stopped her mid sentence. “We’ll have to make more adjustments before he is once again field ready Captain Razzik.”
“We have a few weeks before we arrive, I hope that will suffice.” Razzik added.
“That’s entirely up to Rattmu” Arwia said as she jabbed him with a syringe.

Trying to hide his smile, Razzik gave a short nod to Rattmu and turned away. A few minutes later he arrived at the guarded end of the infirmary. All of the cells were open and empty except one. In front of the last cell was Chaplain Cyaxeres. Cyaxeres wore his black ceremonial robes, his rosarius and Crozius Arcanum hung on his person. Next to him was Sergeant Pyrox of the Fire Angel chapter in a simple gray robe. In the week he had been aboard he had changed greatly. His body had begun to fill in with muscle, his skin had a more natural tone, his hair was chopped, and the scars from his mask had healed up leaving a permanent outline on his face. He turned to regard the approaching captain.

“The Emperor Protects, my captain.” Cyaxeres said quietly.
“How is our guest?” Razzik said.
“He is stable and recovering. The Dark Eldar machine brought him back, but he is still damaged from whatever they did to him.” Cyaxeres stated.
“I don’t recognize him, but I only saw a small group of prisoners. I’ve not seen a prisoner in this condition before.” Pyrox added. Cyaxeres nodded and then added.
“We’ve run all the tests we can. Attikusu suggested we take our time and not push him until we learn more.”

With a thoughtful nod Razzik moved past the marines into the cell. Strapped to the bed was the heavily wounded marine that Bel Uri and his unit had located weeks before. His body was heavily scarred, his imperial tattoos had been damaged, and he was in need of a new eye, leg, and serious arm repair. The small room had only the bed and a stool. Razzik cautiously came to the foot of the bed and looked over the tortured marine. As the door closed shut behind him the click of the door brought on a panicked look from the marine. He looked around the room frantically before his one good eye focused in on Razzik.

“Hello, I am Captain Razzik of the Ice Angels.” He paused to await a response.

The marine stared at him.

“You’re completely safe now, you can relax.” He once again waited.

The marine continued to stare.

“I see. When you’re ready, we’ll talk.” Razzik stood up. He waited and gave the marine a final nod before turning. He opened the door and gave the marine a final glance. The tortured marine continued to stare as he closed the door. The locks clicked back into place.

It really gives a good intro into something no one had heard of before, Brilliant!

I like it. Good job, i have started to do one of these.
Except i'm using famous characters.
Anyway its good to see you used the space wolves.

Excellent Ice. Anxiously awaiting the next installment!

Congrats! Nice job on it.
This chapter keeps getting better and better every day!

The windows all around him appeared to be empty. The doors to every building were closed. All around him was nothing but silence and ferrocrete structures. Cautiously he walked down the city block. His black armor was trimmed in ice blue; his white helmet was almost gleaming in the artificial light.

He heard a buzzing sound for only a millisecond before his targets appeared. To him though, that was all he needed. With super human speed he pulled up his heavy bolter and rattled off several rounds. In windows to his left three drones blew into pieces. Before they had even hit the floor he was swiveling to his right. One more drone was lining up a shot from the second floor. The drone fired its bolter the instant that he fired his heavy bolter. The heavy round took the drone out and the bolter clipped the marines shoulder. The impact turned him to the side making him move his feet and rebalance.

The sound of running feet brought him back to his right side. A smaller marine in red armor was running at full speed, two short blades in his hands. He covered the distance alarmingly fast.

The black armored marine did not hesitate to open fire with his heavy bolter. Anticipating the move the red armored marine tumbled to the side dodging the large caliber rounds. As the marine closed the gap the heavy bolter barked out again, this time the smaller marine leapt into the air, the heavy bolter clicked empty just as the marine lined up the shot. The red armored marine was hardly slowing down, only a few more steps and he would have his kill. He leaned forward to dive at the larger black target, but was surprised when the heavy bolter itself collided with his face. Caught off guard he collapsed onto the ground, he tried to recover but the black armored marine was on him stabbing with his combat knife. It took only one jab to the back of the neck before it was over.

“Damn Rattmu! You actually killed me!” Bel Uri shouted from his prone position. With a hearty laugh Rattmu picked up his downed brother. “It only took me nine tries!” He responded. Bel Uri reached down to pick up the heavy bolter, “I am not sure they’ll appreciate you throwing your weapon at the enemies.” Even under his helmet, Bel Uri could see Rattmu’s grin. The larger black armored marine held out his huge bionic arm.

Bel Uri handed over the heavy and then took off his red practice helmet, his vibrant eyes had a look of disappointment about them. Shaking his head a wide smile began to creep across his face. “Wow, I can already hear my squad giving me crap about this. I can’t remember the last time someone defeated me.” Rattmu let out another hearty laugh. “You know I’m going to tell everyone in the chapter right?” He added.

They both laughed and joked all the way out of the practice cityscape. Servitors scrabbled out and began to rebuild the destroyed drones.

After they had turned in their practice gear they left the facilities. Almost immediately after they had left they ran into Miqit. Miqit was in his armor, helmet on, Kwu-akki in his hand. “Bel Uri, suit up. Razzik wants us and Bennu to meet him in the infirmary.”

With a quizzical look on his face Bel Uri paused, “Did he say what for?”
“I didn’t ask.” Miqit responded before heading to the infirmary. With a shrug Bel Uri took off in a jog towards his gear.

“He probably wants to check out your pretty face after that whoopin!” Rattmu shouted.

Bel Uri just shook his head as he jogged away.

* * * * * * * * * * * * * *

“Now that you’re all here I want you to try and assist me.” Captain Razzik said. “The marine you captured we’ve been able to revive, but he hasn’t said a word or responded to anything we’ve done.”

Razzik, Bennu, Bel Uri, and Miqit were all in the hall way outside of the cells. Attikusu was not far away looking at a datapad.

“What do you want us to do?” Bel Uri asked.

Attikusu came over to the group and handed the datapad to Miqit, “Introduce yourselves. Tell a story. Talk about where you were when you found him. Try to get him to speak. We are trying to learn everything we can before he meets up with the Inquisition.”

“I’ve visited him every day for two weeks and he hasn’t said a word to me.” Razzik added. “I know he is aware. He is much calmer now then he was.”

The three members of squad Uttuakki all nodded their heads in understanding. “We shall try.” Bel Uri added before turning towards the door.

The door opened silently and the three armed marines entered. On the bed was the marine they had saved. He was in much better condition then when they had last seen him, but now the extent of torture was easier to see on his clean body.

The marines introduced themselves and for a few awkward minutes asked simple questions and tried to get any response from the tortured marine. The response was only a blank stare. Bel Uri told a recap of the battle on the rokk where they found him. Bel Uri at one point was on his feet reenacting some of the fighting. Still they had no response from the tortured marine. Bennu then began another story of their fight with the stompa on the Rokk Mekaroid. The marine continued to stare at the Ice Angels.

After several hours they ran out of things to talk about. Bel Uri was sitting on the stool in the room, his helmet in his powerfist. He looked over to Miqit and shrugged. Miqit looked down at the datapad and walked over to the marine on the bed, he handed him the pad. With a strange look in his good eye he hesitantly took the datapad. “I don’t know how long you’ve been gone, but I’ve adjusted the pad so you can see all the information we’ve gathered on you and some general information on what’s been going on for the past few years.”

The tortured marine looked from the pad, to Miqit, and back to the pad. With a sigh Bel Uri got up and put his helmet back on. He left the room with Bennu on his heals. Miqit stood up and began to turn around when the tortured marines hand shot out and grabbed Miqits elbow. Miqit looked down at the hand. A smooth voice spoke, “Can we speak, you and I?”

Miqit looked at the seated marine. His gravel gray hair was cropped short and his one good eye was a deep mahogany. Miqit took a glance out the door at Bennu who returned the look. Miqit gave Bennu a nod before the door slowly shut with a click. “Of course we can.”

Miqit moved around the bed and sat on the stool. The other marine took a deep breath and looked out in the distance. “My name is Vetov, Commander Vetov of the Emperor’s Tears.” He turned and his face quivered with inner turmoil. He paused and took another deep breath. Miqit waited patiently. Vetox looked over at the datapad.

“I was captured seventeen years ago along with many of my men.” The datapad in his hand began to shake, he looked at Miqit with a piercing glare. Through gritted teeth he spoke again, “I was betrayed.”

Thanks for all the great feedback guys! If you get a chance check out the appendix on the first page. Tell me what you think of that as well. Thanks!

Plot Twist!
Emperor's Tears.
Good job, like the time you put into it!

Great stuff Ice... nothin' else to say... just really great stuff.

Hey pal, I'm back. So... Much... Reading... Your stuff is really great, I might even say *addictive*. Haven't finished it all yet :( , although I will. Keep up the AWESOME story.

Finch Claw wrote:Hey pal, I'm back. So... Much... Reading... Your stuff is really great, I might even say *addictive*. Haven't finished it all yet :( , although I will. Keep up the AWESOME story.

welcome back! Good luck getting through everything. lol The story is getting quite expansive.

IceAngel wrote:

Finch Claw wrote:Hey pal, I'm back. So... Much... Reading... Your stuff is really great, I might even say *addictive*. Haven't finished it all yet :( , although I will. Keep up the AWESOME story.

welcome back! Good luck getting through everything. lol The story is getting quite expansive.

I agree with this statement. Yeah it is getting very intense. I wish i could write like you. All I can write are paragraphs of lore, I can't make novels. I can make history books but I cannot make character's or pllots. Yeah you have quite an amazing skill which alot of people like me would kill for.

Asherian Command wrote:

IceAngel wrote:

Finch Claw wrote:Hey pal, I'm back. So... Much... Reading... Your stuff is really great, I might even say *addictive*. Haven't finished it all yet :( , although I will. Keep up the AWESOME story.

welcome back! Good luck getting through everything. lol The story is getting quite expansive.

I agree with this statement. Yeah it is getting very intense. I wish i could write like you. All I can write are paragraphs of lore, I can't make novels. I can make history books but I cannot make character's or pllots. Yeah you have quite an amazing skill which alot of people like me would kill for.

thanks man! Keep at it Asherian, if you can do paragraphs of lore you're not to far from having a novel. The biggest key, just like painting, is to keep doing it and get some feedback from your peers. Thats why I enjoy writing on dakka, I get good critiques and good ideas on how to improve.

Just made it through both of the new parts, and they are great! Loving the plot twists.

If someone from BL gets this, your gettin a new side job I think. Better then some of the fools they have now.

In your appendix, these need to be formatted correctly:
Gilgam Heavy bolter
Ishtin Heavy bolter

Just need the : really. I'd run through it again an make sure all the name: information is good. Consistency makes it look purdy.

whalemusic360 wrote:Just made it through both of the new parts, and they are great! Loving the plot twists.

If someone from BL gets this, your gettin a new side job I think. Better then some of the fools they have now.

In your appendix, these need to be formatted correctly:
Gilgam Heavy bolter
Ishtin Heavy bolter

Just need the : really. I'd run through it again an make sure all the name: information is good. Consistency makes it look purdy.

Fixed! Thanks for spotting that one.

For those who want to see the updated appendix.

http://www.dakkadakka.com/dakkaforum/posts/list/264756.page

If there are any BL employees reading this, I am looking for a side job, lol.

The appendix looks good Ice. Very helpful in keeping everyone & everything straightened out.

I've had a bunch of deadlines that are coming due today at work, will work on your background info after that.