Fleet Command: Crystal Angels

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**Darkvoidof40k**

lord commissar klimino wrote:issac watched joseph leave to go throw up. as he stood,he looked around.the admiral flaming,others standing straight. what a mess. he looked at his fellow officers. "permission to speak mam?"

Ain't nothing wrong with just having the Admiral say "Permission granted" in an angry tone and then continuing on.

Alrighty, new page! Lets try and keep this one clean.

**RaptorsTalon**

As he awaits the Admirals reply, Garan thinks to himself.
I hope we perform better once we have command of our ships, and have proven our loyalties and team work in a real battle situation. Mabey then the natural rage and affinity for combat of some of us will prove to be useful. If it isn't I dread to think what command will say when they find out some of their new commanders have been fighting each other in some of the navies best ships.

**sillyboy**

But one sentance..... A paragraph i can understand....but one...

@Rapto

Not to attack you, but.... not all of us are capable?

Its just practice, hell Darko shuddered when i wrote my first rp. Practice is all it takes. And with each passing rp, i find this to be easier and easier.

Its all about choosing a personallity, and think from that perspective... And the story will just flow out.

**lord commissar klimino**

Darkvoidof40k wrote:
lord commissar klimino wrote:issac watched joseph leave to go throw up. as he stood,he looked around.the admiral flaming,others standing straight. what a mess. he looked at his fellow officers. "permission to speak mam?"

Ain't nothing wrong with just having the Admiral say "Permission granted" in an angry tone and then continuing on.

true....

IC:"permission granted" issac heard in a very unsettling voice. "err...i know we messed up,but we should move on and either get to the party i heard someone mention or get to are ships and be launched into space." as he thought about it,he smiled at the thought of all of the being launched out of torpedo tubes for this annoying incident.

**RaptorsTalon**

sillyboy wrote:But one sentance..... A paragraph i can understand....but one...

@Rapto

Not to attack you, but.... not all of us are capable?

Its just practice, hell Darko shuddered when i wrote my first rp. Practice is all it takes. And with each passing rp, i find this to be easier and easier.

Its all about choosing a personallity, and think from that perspective... And the story will just flow out.

This is what I try to do, but i'm not the best writer, and this is only my second RP. When I said 'not all of us are capable' I mainly ment me. Sometimes, I will write really well, and produce indepth and interesing posts, but other times I just can't think of enough details to include.
I am sure, as you say, I will improve over time, but i'm just not that good at the moment.

**EagleArk**

RaptorsTallon wrote:
sillyboy wrote:But one sentance..... A paragraph i can understand....but one...

@Rapto

Not to attack you, but.... not all of us are capable?

Its just practice, hell Darko shuddered when i wrote my first rp. Practice is all it takes. And with each passing rp, i find this to be easier and easier.

Its all about choosing a personallity, and think from that perspective... And the story will just flow out.

This is what I try to do, but i'm not the best writer, and this is only my second RP. When I said 'not all of us are capable' I mainly ment me. Sometimes, I will write really well, and produce indepth and interesing posts, but other times I just can't think of enough details to include.
I am sure, as you say, I will improve over time, but i'm just not that good at the moment.

Yeah, its my seconf rp too,

**Darkvoidof40k**

Dudes.. it's still early in the morning.. the party is late tonight..

Starts: 7:30PM
Ends: When the last man collapses.

**EagleArk**

Darkvoidof40k wrote:Dudes.. it's still early in the morning.. the party is late tonight..

Starts: 7:30PM
Ends: When the last man collapses.

what time is it now?

**lord commissar klimino**

Darkvoidof40k wrote:Dudes.. it's still early in the morning.. the party is late tonight..

Starts: 7:30PM
Ends: When the last man collapses.

err...wow. and so much for keeping this page 'clean'

**Lord Harrab**

TheWildHost wrote:Walking over to Kessler Dylan whispers "I think she's on her period"

Sharpe's head turned to regard dylan, who suddenly felt like he was being aimed at, then she placed a finger on the headset in her ear and activated it, "Medical team to Sixth year quarters. and alert the MPs, Reynolds has gone AWOL, find him and take him to the brig."

Then she moved, faster than he had thought it possible, grabbed him by the back of the head and threw him into a nearby wall, not finished with such a simple punishment, she preceded to hammer his face into the concrete until his nose broke with a satisfying crack.

Finally letting him fall, she turned back to the room, "anyone else wish to be smart with me?"

"No Ma'am." came the reply.

"Good, you will report to Shuttle pad ten in fifteen minutes, and Dylan, learn to control that smart mouth. Before it gets you killed."

Suitably admonished, the Officers were silent as Sharpe crossed the room and left.

**RaptorsTalon**

EagleArk wrote:
Darkvoidof40k wrote:Dudes.. it's still early in the morning.. the party is late tonight..

Starts: 7:30PM
Ends: When the last man collapses.

what time is it now?

I would assume sort of midday

**Darkvoidof40k**

I'd say it's about 10-11 AM at the moment, in-game.

edit:

DAMN YOU RAPTORSTALLON WITH YOUR TWO-SECOND NINJA!

**lord commissar klimino**

issac looked at sharpe leaving. "15 minutes...hey,dylan,you ok?"

**Lord Harrab**

Darkvoidof40k wrote:

I'd say it's about 10-11 AM at the moment, in-game.

edit:

DAMN YOU RAPTORSTALLON WITH YOUR TWO-SECOND NINJA!

(OCC: Focus gentlemen.)

**Darkvoidof40k**

Lord Harrab wrote:"Good, you will report to Shuttle pad ten in fifteen minutes,

Aw damn, so much for the party..

..wait.. on-ship party. YES! THIS LEADS INTO MORE OF MY PRE-CONCEIVED PLANS OF MASS CONFUSION! Bwahaha.

**Darkvoidof40k**

Lord Harrab wrote:
Darkvoidof40k wrote:

I'd say it's about 10-11 AM at the moment, in-game.

edit:

DAMN YOU RAPTORSTALLON WITH YOUR TWO-SECOND NINJA!

(OCC: Focus gentlemen.)

(Mentlegen; focusing. Gonna go write an IC post; fairly long too, y'all should hold on

)

**RaptorsTalon**

Where is the party? Is it onboard our ships?

**EagleArk**

"dont worry, ill call medical for you dylan"

Joesph precededs to go to the wall mounted intercom and contact medical

"hello, what seems to be the problem?"

"we got sombody with a broken nose and possible concussion"

"how did this happen?"

"the admiral did it"

"ok...Okay, we`ll be there right away"

Thinking to himself joesph is astounded at the martial prowess of the admiral, and the fact she responded in such a violent manner. But still, the joke made was bad and sadistic, and if he was the admiral, he proberbly would of done somthing similar.

**sillyboy**

@Raptor

All you have to do is try and persist.

Some tips for rp-ing:

*Describe whats happening
*what does your char think about it
*What are his actions/ what does he say

This is just a basic template, don't be afraid to try.

And afterall, the edit function solves everything

(But maybe its because, i jumped in with the big fish of the rp-forum, that i evolved so quickly.... Thank you Dark, Fitzz, Ghosty,Scrazz, Etc...)

**Darkvoidof40k**

Ye be muchly welcome.

@RaptorsTallon - you're a good roleplayer dude, you've got nothing to worry about! With time, practice and experience, you'll improve.

**RaptorsTalon**

Thanks

Currently working on big post about my ship and crew for once I get onboard

**lord commissar klimino**

issac left before he got his awnser. on his way,he delivered the news to joseph in the bathroom. he felt like punching a wall sevral time,but shook the feeling off. he stopped and pulled out his sword. he remembered it meant something.he smiled,then frowned. none of them really had proven they deserved this,heck,he and a few others should be shot for their crying and brawling and smart mouthing. he sheathed it and walked on. when he arrived at the bay.he sat down and waited for the others,deciding to think more from now on. as they came one by one,he eyed them up. joseph,natalie, manfred, mark, garen ,trix, dylan. all were his allies,yet he and none of them had acted like it. as he got on last. he sighed and smiled, they would work it out,he was sure they would.

**sillyboy**

Waits after dark's rp

Don't be afraid to describe a raging Trix, honour is important to her... and these guys

**Darkvoidof40k**

Natalie never stopped crying. She was terrified now; the Admiral had just scolded her worse than ever before, and to make matters worse, the woman had just viciously attacked one of her fellow cadets. A slap would've been enough in her opinion. She was surprised that the Admiral hadn't cut her down where she stood for embarrassing her and herself so greatly.

Garan returned to her side and held her close once more after the Admiral left.
"It's not supposed to be like this," she whispered sadly.
"I know," He replied, his tone soothing, "But all we can do is learn and make the best of what we've got. C'mon, lets get you back to your quarters, we're all leaving soon."
"I'll come with you, I live on the same floor," Trix interjected.

The trio left for their quarters to collect up their personal effects, leaving the disastrous common room behind. Outside, they passed Mark, who began to speak.
"Boy am I glad I wasn't in there to brave the firestorm," He joked, but only received a mix of hostile and worried looks.
"You better watch out, the Admiral's got security looking for you. I suggest you collect your crap and be at the shuttle in fifteen minutes, we're leaving," Trix replied, before continuing on with her friends.

--

More soon.

**RaptorsTalon**

OOC: What year is it?

**Darkvoidof40k**

sillyboy wrote:Waits after dark's rp

Don't be afraid to describe a raging Trix, honour is important to her... and these guys

You can take it from here, just have 'em all drop Natalie at her room, then collect your own respective stuff, and then we can all leave.

**Darkvoidof40k**

RaptorsTallon wrote:OOC: What year is it?

It's in the OP. Something like 2104 or 2120 or something. /shrug

**sillyboy**

I have to write?

But i'm watching Bleach :(

**lord commissar klimino**

sillyboy wrote:I have to write?

But i'm watching Bleach :(

bleach? hmmm..not a bad choice....get to writing!

**Lord Harrab**

RaptorsTallon wrote:OOC: What year is it?

(OCC: 2220, take that Sci-fi stereotypes with awesome sounding years when cool stuff happens

as for Sharpe flipping out on you, that should get across exactly how pissed she was, Dylan's remark was poorly chosen and poorly timed, and coming after her star pupil just made her words seem hollow to THE CHEIF OF THE FRACCKING NAVY he should feel damn lucky he wasn't shot.

As for Reynolds, Heres a tip, don't stand next to him when the MPs find him.)