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A thread for any feedback about the story. Please use this Out of Character thread to keep the In Character thread free of clutter, thanks

A Puritan Man IC

I love your work so far. Please write here more often. Dakka Fiction needs more good content like yours if it is ever going to get more traffic.

Tbh you're lucky i was curious enough to hunt down the actual fiction. Please post a link in this thread. What's annoying is that you have a link in the fiction thread but not a link in this thread, sort it out.

The fiction itself is very good, nice 'en grubby and morally ambigious. One minor thing is you kept referring to the alien/vigilante as [EDIT:]'Nomad' (or a similar word, i cant remember off hand *gestures toward previous comment*). Perhaps go through it again and replace it were it has been used too often.

Thanks for the comments, I'll get on to adding some more when I get chance, real life is getting in my way recently.