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those books are amazing, i always thought the movie was funny too, it was never as good as thebooks, but it was really interesting to see how they used the books and old effects to make that movie!

Sageheart wrote:those books are amazing, i always thought the movie was funny too, it was never as good as thebooks, but it was really interesting to see how they used the books and old effects to make that movie!

no movie has ever improved a book series.

Not so fast ASH!
I know of one movie that was better than the book!

battle Brother Lucifer wrote:Not so fast ASH!
I know of one movie that was better than the book!

What Twilight HAHAHAHAHAHAHAH

Nope.
Big Fish.
Great, great movie.

Also, The Princess Bride.

battle Brother Lucifer wrote:Nope.
Big Fish.
Great, great movie.

Also, The Princess Bride.

Thats true.
But anyway Ice nice job so far looking forward to more fluff!

i didnt say it improved it, i said it was interesting watching how that old movie displayed the really complex and beautiful book.

and there have been movies that made the book better in some case: minority report for example. The short story by Philip K. Dick is okay, its not his best work, the writing is rushed, it becomes way too complex, it has a better ending and a more political focus but it can be a bore to read at times. I'm a die-hard Philip K. Dick fan, but the movie in that moment really improved the books in a lot of ways.

IceAngel wrote:

whalemusic360 wrote:Ok my long overdue homework.

1. I like the inclusion of GMS marines. It really makes it more personal for those of use who have been part of it. I know that wasnt the question, but it happens.

2. While much improved, your introduction to new characters is still a bit clunky. Also, not a fan of the name "Tundra Hawks". Confused me for a minute, as I thought you just spelled thunderhawk incorrectly or ork-y.

I liked the name Tundra Hawks, but if any one has a better suggestion. I may be persuaded to change it.

Alpine Angels or Alpine Hawks maybe?

Ice Eagles.
Tundra Foxes

Ice Foxes?

i like Tundra Hawks, i dont think those other names are as good. I would just make it look more on the page like Tundra Hawks with bold or italics.

i mean i guess i could throw some names out but im really stuck with keeping tundra hawks.

maybe

Tundra Corps
Tundra wings

Tundra Corps.

hmm, lots of good suggestions. After rereading everyone's suggestions, I am still not 100% sure on what I want. I think Lucifer's Tundra Foxes is the top of the list so far. I may make a D&D like name table if I'm feel up to it.

Hey, what about the PermaFox Company? lol, that's a good one.

I like the tundra fox or arctic fox for the name.

I agree, Artic Foxes or Tundra Foxes sound good

The holographic room’s servitor was twitching at all of the activity. The ork ships were departing from all over the system. The amount of warp activity was staggering as hulks, looted ships, and rokks activated their warp drives. It hadn’t even been 24 hours since the messenger ship arrived. The orks had clearly been ready to get into battle. Grand Master Warlord Gazzbat Boomfoot, as he called himself, had sent out a system wide message and like rounds in a heavy stubber the orks shot out into space.

As the red threat indicators began to disappear across the system, Razzik found himself being drawn to the area of darkness Jaska had pointed out. After a few minutes of staring a bright flash took his attention away to another area just outside of the fourth planet. Razzik watched the tail end of an explosion. He raised an eye brow. “Back up seven seconds.”

The holographic image rewound and Razzik watched intently as the rokk exploded. Nothing looked out of the ordinary. “Stupid Orks,” he added before turning towards the largest cluster of ork vessels. They were spreading out away from each other before disappearing into the warp.

Razzik watched for several hours before the number of warp flashes began to slow down. According to the holographic image nearly eighty percent of all of the ork vessels in the system had departed. Razzik began to say a prayer to the Emperor as he thought about all of the other crusading armies and the Imperial Forces that were tasked to stop this force. These orks were too well organized for his liking. Then again, when did an ork not speed at the mention of a good fight?

“Commander Seluku, resume our voyage. I’ll be on the bridge shortly.” Razzik said into his vox.
“Affirmative Captain,” Seluku responded.

Within a few seconds Razzik witnessed the image of the Frozen Rage begin to move and a thin blue line appear behind the image. “Let the hunt begin.” Razzik said as he turned and departed the room.

* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *

As Razzik stepped onto the bridge he was immediately hailed by Lieutenant Arwia. By her station were several other high ranking naval officers along with Cyaxeres. At the sight of Razzik approaching many officers bowed and stepped away leaving him alone with Cyaxeres and Arwia.

“Captain we have a problem, another ork vessel recently appeared in the system not far from here. It is close enough that it may pick up our signal. It does appear to have minor battle damage.” Arwia stated as she swiftly pulled up a distant view of the vessel.

“We may be able to commandeer the vessel or get a smaller ship from there. It would make our passage through the system easier.” Cyaxeres added.

“I would never trust an Ork vessel! I think we should destroy it and continue with our plan.” Commander Seluku quickly added from across the bridge.

“Clearly the Emperor has granted us this golden opportunity. I suggest we…..” Cyaxeres paused at the look from Razzik. The bridge was suddenly silent.

Razzik looked down at the screen. The ork vessel was half the length of the Frozen Rage but very squat, almost as if it had hit a wall and compressed. Razzik then looked to Cyaxeres. Razzik was about to give his command when he hesitated, the weight of such a decision suddenly weighing down on him. “What would Ruusa do?” he thought to himself.

“How far is that ship from us?” he asked Arwia.

A smile creeped onto Cyaxeres’ face as Lientenant Arwia responded “Current speed eight hours.”

“Which means we could be there in three if we hurried,” Razzik quietly said to no one in particular.

“We take the vessel. Seluku gain speed and bring us along side. Cyaxeres prepare the train!” Razzik shouted. As the members of the bridge spurred into motion he seemed to gather confidence in his decision. Cyaxeres slid on his skull helmet and strode out of the bridge. Razzik took one last look down at Arwia’s station. The ork vessel was beginning to look like a solution, not a problem.

You haven't traded for any orks in the GMS by any chance have you?

Ma55ter_fett wrote:You haven't traded for any orks in the GMS by any chance have you?

I have not.

The tension builds... but there's a good fight on the horizon I'd warrant!

can't wait to see a fight scene! Are the marine swap brothers goingto be a good part of the action?

The primary Ice Angel hanger was a flurry of activity. Servitors loaded up the Thunderhawks and checked systems. Weapon mounts were coming up out of the floor to prevent any intruders. Klaxons could be heard as various doors opened and cargo was moved. Techpriests and adepts gave their prayers before each Thunderhawk was woken. As they moved towards the last Thunderhawk, the lights in the hanger suddenly switched from white to red. The huge hanger doors slowly opened and the two ends of the hanger became curtains of pitch black.

Standing on a balcony over looking the hanger was Chaplain Cyaxeres, Captain Razzik, and a colorful crew of marines. Below them on the hanger floor units of Ice Angels were beginning to move to their respective transports. As they began their individual unit pre-battle ceremonies, Razzik turned around to face 11 marines, each from different chapters.

“Some of you are about to witness the fury of the Ice Angels for the first time. Our methods have been used by our chapter and it’s predecessors for centuries. It may not be your own, but when you are a part of my force you will follow the commands given. Rank in your previous chapter is irrelevant here.” Captain Razzik looked at each marine in turn, spending an extra few seconds on Brother Kvothe and his meltagun. “We’re commandeering this vessel, be extra careful what you shoot.” Brother Kvothe looked offended at the thought of hitting anything other then his target. Razzik smiled at the reaction before issuing his orders.

“Inushi and Aquilum you’re with Gamma force. Jaska and Kvothe you’re with Delta. Pyrox, Vetov, Reven, Walters, Evrard, Nefas, and Inigo you’re with me on the train.” Razzik slammed his helmet down and nearly every marine followed suit. “The Emperor Protects,” he added before marching off. Brother Desai was about to question the orders but a look from the Chaplain stopped him. After the marines took off towards their respective vessels, only Brother Desai and Cyaxeres stayed on the balcony. Cyaxeres walked over and placed his hand on Desai’s shoulder.

“Not yet Desai. Not yet.” Was all the Chaplain said.

Brother Desai looked into the skull mask of the Chaplain. Anger filled his mind, not at the Ice Angel Chaplain, but at himself for allowing his rage to take control. With a deep breath and a concentrated force of will he calmed himself down. Cyaxeres was right and he knew it. Finally with a slow nod Cyaxeres removed his hand and walked off towards the awaiting train. Brother Desai stayed on the balcony and watched the marines down below prepare for war.

He saw Inushi and Aquilum board one of the Thunderhawks. As he watched, his eyes began to wander around the hanger. Eventually he became transfixed with the void that loomed just outside the hanger, the cold darkness of space in which all things floated.

Even as the sounds of the engines firing up filled his head, he stared out into the void. To Desai, it wasn’t the darkness that bothered him. It was the cold. On his home world he spent most of his time around lava and searing heat, nothing like the frozen wasteland of the Ice Angels homeworld. Time seemed to slow down as a chill crept through his bones. Brother Desai began to notice the slow thump of his hearts. He began to remember what Cyaxeres had shown him.

* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *

In silence they walked. Desai was still full of inner turmoil from stabbing the statue. He couldn’t believe the rage had taken him in that place of beauty. Cyaxeres lead Brother Desai through a virtual maze of corridors he had never seen before. Finally they came to a series of doors, all of which Cyaxeres entered in codes or keys to open. After they passed through two sets they entered into a large room where a dozen servitors all armed with multi-meltas stood watch. Cyaxeres moved to the next door and began to say several phrases while entering codes into a pad. As he did, Brother Desai looked back and what he saw disturbed him. The servitors along with hidden wall guns were all aimed at the door they were opening, not the door they came through. These lines of defenses were meant to keep people in, not out. With a loud hiss the double doors slid open. A frigid burst of cold air nearly knocked Brother Desai over. Cyaxeres gave him a side long glance before heading into the freezing room.

After a moment of hesitation Desai followed him into the dark sub zero room. After taking a dozen steps the doors behind them quickly closed, their speed was alarmingly quick. “What is this place?” Brother Desai asked as he looked around at the columns of ice, at the base of each was a blank alabaster plate. Cyaxeres continued to walk through the room in somber silence. The constant sound of moving frigid air was only interrupted with their foot falls. Frost was quickly forming on their robes.

Eventually Cyaxeres came to a stop and looked up into a deep blue column of ice. Brother Desai took a few quick steps to catch up. At the foot of the column was a frost covered name plate, only the last “u” could be seen. Beneath it was a large bladed hooked spear. When he looked up, he saw what Cyaxeres was staring at. Inside the frozen column was an Ice Angel. He was in a pristine suit of white power armor.

“The Black Rage, Brother Desai, affects us all.” Cyaxeres began while continuing to look at the frozen marine. “All Sons of Sanguinius are forced to deal with the rage at one point or another. Some chapters hide their rage and view it as an affliction, a disease. Others urge on the Black Rage and believe it a gift from Sanguinius. We believe the rage is a test, a test given to us by Sanguinius in his final moments. All Ice Angels fight the urge, the hate, the need to blindly slaughter friend and foe, but the strong prevail. Those that fail the test dawn the white armor and are frozen until they can unleash their fury at the enemy.”

Brother Desai looked away from the frozen marine in self contemplation. His hands and feet were beginning to go numb from the extreme cold. Cyaxeres gave him a moment before continuing. “We all have a choice to make Brother Desai, whether to fight or give in to the rage.”

Desai looked at Cyaxeres and was about to speak when the old chaplain slowly shook his head and with a sigh spoke. “I believe you’ve already made your choice.”

Cyaxeres took one final look at the frozen marine before he began to walk back towards the entrance. Brother Desai took one last look as well before hustling after the chaplain. As he passed the other columns he noticed they were all empty.

When the door finally closed behind him the feeling in his extremities quickly returned. As the pair walked, once again in silence, Desai couldn’t help but wonder if his name would soon be on one of those alabaster plates.

* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *

Brother Desai gently shook away the cold as the memory of his visit with Cyaxeres left his thoughts. However his thoughts were soon filled with questions, one of which he couldn't answer. Brother Desai leaned over the balcony to try and get a better view, "Why are they bringing a vindicator?" he asked himself. The question dangled on his lips as he watched the heavily modified siege engine roll onto the awaiting Thunderhawk.

great work! love how this is ending up!

didn't know your death company also wore white armor, i like the frezing them in ice, great idea.

can't wait for more.

Sageheart wrote:great work! love how this is ending up!

didn't know your death company also wore white armor, i like the frezing them in ice, great idea.

can't wait for more.

Yeah, my avatar is one of my old old death company models. I should really change it to a more up to date figure.

nice! I like your avatar, its a nice model!

Do you have models for all the characters you've had within the story so far? If so maybe posts some pics of them? I mean non-MarineSwap models.

Sageheart wrote:nice! I like your avatar, its a nice model!

Do you have models for all the characters you've had within the story so far? If so maybe posts some pics of them? I mean non-MarineSwap models.

I have some of them. Of course I have squad Uttuakki, Captain Ruusa, and Captain Razzik all completed. I also have some other characters Cyaxeres, Attikusu, and Philosir. I have Frakatazuli in his normal dread suit, but I havn't yet made him in his awesome zero gravity dreadnought suit with the anchor. Squad Shwando is completed, I am currently working on Ashurbani, and then I've got some other random members. For example, Mi-luqua Vaz is an actual member of a tactical unit. I even have some other guys you haven't even met yet. So my story is a mix of characters I have and characters I made up specifically for the story.

We actually have a rule at my house when we play. If you have a model that doesn't something crazy cool, or a unit that beats the odds, you must name them and paint it on their base. Thats how Mi-luqua Vaz got named actually. He killed three terminators in close combat by himself! Not bad for a tactical marine.

that's a cool house rule, i like it!


If you get the chance some pics of the characters you have madeup would be nice.

Very nice

But I don't know if there is sufficent indication that the account of Cyaxeres and Desai's visit to the frozen ice angels was in the past.

Also, good job on the frozen marines, its pretty much as I had imagined it.

I guess I hadn't realized that either. Really gripping story though Ice... extremely well done.

Ma55ter_fett wrote:Very nice

But I don't know if there is sufficent indication that the account of Cyaxeres and Desai's visit to the frozen ice angels was in the past.

Also, good job on the frozen marines, its pretty much as I had imagined it.

Thank you Ma55ter_fett, I think I'll actually add a little sentence or two at the end of the last story to show Desai coming back out of his short dream to the present. That should help cover both ends of the flashback.

Gitsplitta wrote:I guess I hadn't realized that either. Really gripping story though Ice... extremely well done.

Thank you Git, I am glad you actually found my latest edition and read it! lol.

Looking at my schedule I think it will be awhile before I can really add on. The Holidays are approaching and I will be out of town, but please do not fear! For fear is the mind killer........ wait, I mean don't worry the story will go on once I return!

Have fun ice... let your creative batteries re-charge!