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Awsome stuff so far.

Please sir can I have some more?

MORE?!?

MORE!!!!??? lol shoor!

lol, awesome stuff I agree first post had me hooked keep up great work. They should have you writing 40k story instead of the current guys lol

Lord Chiasson wrote:lol, awesome stuff I agree first post had me hooked keep up great work. They should have you writing 40k story instead of the current guys lol

I concur. Have you ever taking any writing classes or anything Seanron? My attempts at story writing don't usually turn out so well.

Tragically no, I just write alot... lol, thx though

I'm planning on taking some creative writing classes when I figure out which college I wanna go to. I write/draw comics and my writing side of things is'nt as refined. Guess I just need some more practice. Oh well, keep it up though, I'm like an anxious kid who can't wait to hear the end of the story!

This thread has my vote for thread of the year.

“What is it you seek” hissed the Voice sibilantly.

“I do not know, my path forward is clouded” he answered, “I am lost”

“We are all lost” cackled the Voice “only the Great Shaper of Fate knows the path through the Great Maze, only He knows the answer to the Great Question. What makes you any different?”

“I think…” he hesitated “I think I made a mistake…”

There was a sudden gust, like an intake of breath upon the revelation of terrible news. The Voice mumbled to itself as it realised the enormity of the words it was hearing.

“You wish to turn your back upon your true Father? To cast aside the bonds of loyalty you forged in his service? I should not be surprised. You have done that once before. How very like you Magnus”

Magnus the Red closed his eye and breathed deeply. It had been almost two years since the Death of the Emperor, and the Second year of his seclusion in the Tower of Sorcerers. He had felt his former master’s death sharply, like a piece of him had been violently ripped from his being, leaving an aching hollow where something once was. He had only felt that feeling once before, before he turned his back on the Imperium, before his own Brother had broken his back in a psychotic rage, before he had bowed to the Architect of Fate. He had always doubted his choice, his intellect picking apart and rebuilding his logic and reasoning over and over again.

And he had been wrong. The past year it had been all that played in his vast mind. Cloying self-doubt had given way to a realisation that he had been wrong in so much. He was not the proudest or most fool-hardy of his kin; that dubious honour went to Angron and Fulgrim, both had embraced the changes wrought upon them, and the Gods that they served. Neither doubted their choice to turn from the Emperors Light. But Magnus had been. He had loved his Father; he was closer to Him in spirit than many of his brothers, except maybe his sibling Sanguinius. And he had thrown it all away in a moment of selfish hate and panic.

In his seclusion he gazed upon the strands of fate, linking together possibilities and outcomes to divine what he should do to silence his wracking self-doubt. He had almost given into despair when the thought came to him. It had been a small whisper in the roiling hurricane of his mind, but it spoke volumes to his soul. As soon as the thought had come to him, his inner voice became less violent, less mocking in its tone. As Magnus pondered upon the idea, he allowed it to grow, as a gardener tends to his plants, Magnus tended to the possibilities the idea presented. It was only now, that he had come to a conclusion that The Voice found him. The Voice always found him.

“You know our master will not allow you to leave unmolested” It growled deeply, each word dripping with magma and violent intent “He gave you the gifts that make you a God, he can take them away”

Magnus closed his eye once more and when he opened it again he stood in his old body. He gazed upon his hands, smiling as if seeing an old friend for the first time in many years. Their red, ruddy hue was pleasing to him, as opposed to the riot of colour and form that he formerly was. Yes, he thought, this feels right, this how it is meant to be.

“If that is my fate, then so be it” he said firmly “I will not shirk from it, for I know that this is the right thing to do”

There was a notable pause from The Voice, before the air around Magnus became incredibly cold. “Then you leave me no choice” hissed the Voice as it took corporeal form and lunged at the Former Lord of Sorcerers.

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:As for the correct Norse response, that's a slight sweeping generalisation. The Norse were human too, and were capable of intense sadness and meloncholy (as are we all) and even Tolkien's norse-esque characters (King Theoden of Rohan) are capable of great despair and sadness BEFORE deciding to actually ride out and face battle. I see the SW as the most supremely-confident of SM chapters, but when they lose both the All-Father and Russ, I see them as becoming lost, even more-so than everyone else, before coming out better at the other end.

I would again urge you to look over Shippey's work on Tolkien. "Insane courage" is Shippey's term for the idea of persisting without thought much less hope of salvation, eternal or otherwise. It is the orientation of Tolkien's characters toward their predicament that sets up what he himself called the "eucatastrophe," the victory snatched from darkness beyond all hope. The SW, I feel, would react to such a hopeless situation with a paradoxical grim cheefulness of festal battle lust--"raise your goblets for wrath and ride for ruin, lads!"--the sort of total commitment to achieve reckless feats of martial prowess that a warrior only reaches when he has nothing left to lose, which means nothing left in which to place his hope.

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:As for Russ riding out "full-orchestra twilight of the gods explosion carrying some traitor's head out of the Eye with a load of other enraged traitors limping after him" makes him slightly two dimensional.

Not at all. That's actually pretty dynamic. I didn't say it would be the end of his story--just the beginning of this "end times" saga.

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:I mean it was out of character for him just to stand up mid-feast and essentially bugger off for a few centuries.

Again, nope. That's one of the chief moments establishing his character. It sounds like you'd do better writing for the Lion than the Wolf, to be honest.

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:I know everyone has this romantic view of the SW as if they are a Chapter full of Thor-a-likes, but Norse Mythology has so much more to it, and I'd like to think that the SW mirror all those factors!

I don't think that they do, however. The SW are a caricature of Vikings, like Led Zeppelin's "Immigrant Song." Honestly, you hit the nail on the head by mentioning Thor. If Thor was a benevolent, meade-guzzling werewolf, that would pretty much capture it. That doesn't mean the SW are foolish or boring, either, given how many people absolutely love them. The point is that your view of the SW seems better fitted to DA.

The main point that the SW take from Norse mythology, IMO, is the idea that not even the gods can escape death in battle. This fits 40k very well because the Primarchs, however superhuman or nearly mythological themselves, are still subject death in battle. In effect, the SW realize that they can take on anything because they know that everything, even a god, can be killed somehow. This results in a sort of atheism or at least a marked lack of concern for the hereafter. The SW honor the Emperor as the greatest and most virtuous of all warriors as well as their ultimate progenitor, for example, rather than as a god. Other chapters, meanwhile, are to a larger extent caught up in the mysterious, quasi-religious character of the 40k universe.

This is fantastic I can't wait to read more you should write a book it would be better than a lot of BL authors

Manchu wrote:

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:As for the correct Norse response, that's a slight sweeping generalisation. The Norse were human too, and were capable of intense sadness and meloncholy (as are we all) and even Tolkien's norse-esque characters (King Theoden of Rohan) are capable of great despair and sadness BEFORE deciding to actually ride out and face battle. I see the SW as the most supremely-confident of SM chapters, but when they lose both the All-Father and Russ, I see them as becoming lost, even more-so than everyone else, before coming out better at the other end.

I would again urge you to look over Shippey's work on Tolkien. "Insane courage" is Shippey's term for the idea of persisting without thought much less hope of salvation, eternal or otherwise. It is the orientation of Tolkien's characters toward their predicament that sets up what he himself called the "eucatastrophe," the victory snatched from darkness beyond all hope. The SW, I feel, would react to such a hopeless situation with a paradoxical grim cheefulness of festal battle lust--"raise your goblets for wrath and ride for ruin, lads!"--the sort of total commitment to achieve reckless feats of martial prowess that a warrior only reaches when he has nothing left to lose, which means nothing left in which to place his hope.

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:As for Russ riding out "full-orchestra twilight of the gods explosion carrying some traitor's head out of the Eye with a load of other enraged traitors limping after him" makes him slightly two dimensional.

Not at all. That's actually pretty dynamic. I didn't say it would be the end of his story--just the beginning of this "end times" saga.

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:I mean it was out of character for him just to stand up mid-feast and essentially bugger off for a few centuries.

Again, nope. That's one of the chief moments establishing his character. It sounds like you'd do better writing for the Lion than the Wolf, to be honest.

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:I know everyone has this romantic view of the SW as if they are a Chapter full of Thor-a-likes, but Norse Mythology has so much more to it, and I'd like to think that the SW mirror all those factors!

I don't think that they do, however. The SW are a caricature of Vikings, like Led Zeppelin's "Immigrant Song." Honestly, you hit the nail on the head by mentioning Thor. If Thor was a benevolent, meade-guzzling werewolf, that would pretty much capture it. That doesn't mean the SW are foolish or boring, either, given how many people absolutely love them. The point is that your view of the SW seems better fitted to DA.

The main point that the SW take from Norse mythology, IMO, is the idea that not even the gods can escape death in battle. This fits 40k very well because the Primarchs, however superhuman or nearly mythological themselves, are still subject death in battle. In effect, the SW realize that they can take on anything because they know that everything, even a god, can be killed somehow. This results in a sort of atheism or at least a marked lack of concern for the hereafter. The SW honor the Emperor as the greatest and most virtuous of all warriors as well as their ultimate progenitor, for example, rather than as a god. Other chapters, meanwhile, are to a larger extent caught up in the mysterious, quasi-religious character of the 40k universe.

Guess we'll just need to agree to disagree old bean ^^

No don't! We're all having a great time reading and gathering so much information!Don't stop!

I'm afraid I'm going to have to side with the Dark Lord (lol ironic much?) on this one, Manchu.

While the SPEHZ PUPPEHZ are mostly know for drinking and beating carnifexes in arm-wrestling, they also have all sorts of healthy superstition. (Much like Viking warriors did of the Hags etc)

Hey that is ironic!

Aaaargh! Please cleanse your writing of the "sibilantly" and "cackled"!!

You obviously have the imagination, please please please go and learn how to write, or at least read some basic style guides so that you can make use of that imagination! And I mean that as a compliment, not an insult - I am trying to say it would be worth the learning in order to harness the imagination...

Fifty wrote:Aaaargh! Please cleanse your writing of the "sibilantly" and "cackled"!!

You obviously have the imagination, please please please go and learn how to write, or at least read some basic style guides so that you can make use of that imagination! And I mean that as a compliment, not an insult - I am trying to say it would be worth the learning in order to harness the imagination...

I will endeavour to take this as a compliment

Awsome stuff, and please people just let the man work lol. I think we can all agree that its all good regardless if its 100% what we imagined, I think its the best after emps death story ever

IMO, they'd probably just surge-up some poor servitor and plug him in again, just like they did the first time...
(Hehe, Yay for being heretical!! Conspiracy Theories )

Wow, just wow.

I was honestly expecting to see some really cheap and immature ideas when I clicked on this thread, but I agree with the others that the ideas here are even better than what the official GW writers come up with.

Please keep up the good work!

This is the first thread in DakkaDakka that has made me use the "Subscribe" feature

2.5 years after the death of the Benevolent God-Emperor of Mankind:

• Magnus the Red leaves the Eye of Terror aboard a ship named The Glory of Prospero. He has abandoned his master Tzeentch and leads a host of faithful warriors out of the Eye. In retaliation, he has suffered great wounds at the hand of a Lord of Change known as The Voice, and has been stripped of his Daemonhood. However, proud intent burns in his golden eye, and he has set a course for the Sol System. As to what he is planning is known only to him.

• As The Thousand Sons leave the Eye, their old enemies the Space Wolves arrive. The Wolves are led by a mysterious Loan Wolf Wodin, who informs them that their lord is being held on a Daemon World deep within the Eye. The Space Wolf Fleet shows no hesitation as it hurls itself into the madness of the Eye of Terror, their destination: Madrengard.

• The Octavius War ends with the Tyranids as the overall victors. Although the Ork hordes fought to the bitter end, the Tyranids eventually won through due to their ceaseless numbers. The Hive Fleet (now designated Hive Fleet Golgotha) then turns it attention back towards the Galactic West and plots its way toward Terra, more powerful than before.

• Mechanicum Adepts allied with the Tau finally crack the mystery behind Sub-warp travel. They board one of their ships, dubbed The Wrath of the Omnissiah intent on taking this latest development to Mars. The Tau arranges a blockade, more than aware of what the consequences of mankind gaining access to their sub-warp engines. A tense stand-off begins, with the Mechanicum on one side and their Tau ‘allies’ on the other.

• The Hrud Plague tears across the galaxy unchallenged. Several worlds fall prey to the hideous vermin armies, and much is lost. Even the Necrons are unable to halt the plague of filth unleashed upon them. The Necrodermis they are crafted from is apparently equally susceptible to the Hrud Decay weapons, and several Tombs are laid bare.

• Guilliman arranges a democratic election when it becomes clear that several worlds in the New Imperium are unhappy with his overall military and diplomatic leadership. The two other parties who are in the running is invited to Guilliman’s personal palace to discuss the upcoming election, however their ship suffers a severe ‘accident’ enroute claiming both their lives. The elections are postponed.

i like it, i like it alot.
although i dont believe it should be the end for the eldar, and thats what i think seanron seems to be leading towards, unfortunately :(

but that could lead (id like to think ) to somehow continuing the story of Ynnead the eldar god of the dead.
just so it wouldnt write out such a fun race...just a thought

Gorechild wrote:i like it, i like it alot.
although i dont believe it should be the end for the eldar, and thats what i think seanron seems to be leading towards, unfortunately :(

but that could lead (id like to think ) to somehow continuing the story of Ynnead the eldar god of the dead.
just so it wouldnt write out such a fun race...just a thought

I'm actually a huge supporter of all the races I don't wanna extinctify anyone, hence the resurgence of both the Demiurg and the Hrud (in their proper Skaven-esque form, none of this silly slime men form) The old Eldar got some tricks uyp their sleeves yet mark my words, they have big plans, except maybe the Dark Eldar, who are finally suffering due to their years of constant dickery.

good good thats all i needed to hear!
especially the bit about the dark eldar
cant wait to see what you've thought up, amazing work so far!

2.8 years after the Death of the God-Emperor of Terra

• The Culling of Calth: An event that will forever go down in the history books. Several thousand of political protesters congregate outside Ultramarine bases all over the New Imperium. They claim that the deaths of two leading revolutionary figures were orchestrated by the Ultramarines High Command, with particular vehemence toward Guilliman himself. The protesters draw comparisons between Guilliman’s Paranoia and Political orchestrations to those of The Arch-Heretic himself: Horus.

• As soon as these words are uttered, Guilliman orders an instant cull of the protesters in the interest of ‘maintaining order’. Hundreds upon thousands of people are butchered in the space of a few hours by the zealous Astartes. News travels fast around the New Imperium, with a particular demonising of the Primarch himself.

• There are some whispers that the Primarchs miraculous return two years prior may be tainted by the forces of the Warp, with some going even farther by suggesting that the Ultramarines have become unwitting pawns to the Dark Gods. Revolution is brewing in the New Imperium.

OMG

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:

Manchu wrote:

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:As for the correct Norse response, that's a slight sweeping generalisation. The Norse were human too, and were capable of intense sadness and meloncholy (as are we all) and even Tolkien's norse-esque characters (King Theoden of Rohan) are capable of great despair and sadness BEFORE deciding to actually ride out and face battle. I see the SW as the most supremely-confident of SM chapters, but when they lose both the All-Father and Russ, I see them as becoming lost, even more-so than everyone else, before coming out better at the other end.

I would again urge you to look over Shippey's work on Tolkien. "Insane courage" is Shippey's term for the idea of persisting without thought much less hope of salvation, eternal or otherwise. It is the orientation of Tolkien's characters toward their predicament that sets up what he himself called the "eucatastrophe," the victory snatched from darkness beyond all hope. The SW, I feel, would react to such a hopeless situation with a paradoxical grim cheefulness of festal battle lust--"raise your goblets for wrath and ride for ruin, lads!"--the sort of total commitment to achieve reckless feats of martial prowess that a warrior only reaches when he has nothing left to lose, which means nothing left in which to place his hope.

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:As for Russ riding out "full-orchestra twilight of the gods explosion carrying some traitor's head out of the Eye with a load of other enraged traitors limping after him" makes him slightly two dimensional.

Not at all. That's actually pretty dynamic. I didn't say it would be the end of his story--just the beginning of this "end times" saga.

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:I mean it was out of character for him just to stand up mid-feast and essentially bugger off for a few centuries.

Again, nope. That's one of the chief moments establishing his character. It sounds like you'd do better writing for the Lion than the Wolf, to be honest.

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:I know everyone has this romantic view of the SW as if they are a Chapter full of Thor-a-likes, but Norse Mythology has so much more to it, and I'd like to think that the SW mirror all those factors!

I don't think that they do, however. The SW are a caricature of Vikings, like Led Zeppelin's "Immigrant Song." Honestly, you hit the nail on the head by mentioning Thor. If Thor was a benevolent, meade-guzzling werewolf, that would pretty much capture it. That doesn't mean the SW are foolish or boring, either, given how many people absolutely love them. The point is that your view of the SW seems better fitted to DA.

The main point that the SW take from Norse mythology, IMO, is the idea that not even the gods can escape death in battle. This fits 40k very well because the Primarchs, however superhuman or nearly mythological themselves, are still subject death in battle. In effect, the SW realize that they can take on anything because they know that everything, even a god, can be killed somehow. This results in a sort of atheism or at least a marked lack of concern for the hereafter. The SW honor the Emperor as the greatest and most virtuous of all warriors as well as their ultimate progenitor, for example, rather than as a god. Other chapters, meanwhile, are to a larger extent caught up in the mysterious, quasi-religious character of the 40k universe.

Guess we'll just need to agree to disagree old bean ^^

Ha, I'll say!

Manchu wrote:Ha, I'll say!

Aw, don't be like that man, there's no point in getting riled over fictional charcters based on toy soldiers ^^ if you don't like it, just don't read it

can't wait for more!

This is great

But, wouldn't the Eldar see into the future to make sure they are benefitted the best? I would have thought they would have seen the Tau attack coming from ages away with enough time to create a small fight within their empire while they moved away into one of their great webway gates that they stay near.