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You Sir Seanron are simply the best of the best, my hat is off to your talent at imagination and other good things

Candroth wrote:

Ennkay wrote:why isnt this thread stickied lol.

Q. F. T.

Mods?

no u

DAMN IT.... MMMMOOOOOOOOAAAARRRRR!!!

Hope you make the lion and the wolf clash at some point.

This stuff is simply amazing!!!!! I would love to read some more on the BA though they have to do something positive! Maybe even have Sanguinius reborn? Just an idea its great

'Internet up high'

+++ALL HANDS, BRACE FOR IMMEDIATE IMPACT+++

The bridge of The Heretic’s Bane shook violently for what seemed the thousandth time in the space of a minute. Sparks and steam erupted from consoles, and deckhands flew over railings, their broken bodies rolling with the myriad impacts. Admiral Thao gripped the iron railings of his command pulpit, primarily for balance, but mostly out of rage. Through a static-drenched viewport, he could see the traitorous Jupiter Fleet pummel the Flagship and its escort with seemingly endless broadsides. The Lord-Commanders plan required the utmost success of individual units, and Thao could see victory slipping through his fingers. Although the glorious fleet of Lord-Commander Creed far outweighed the heretic fleet in terms of firepower, technology and experience, the blasphemous Jupiter Fleet seemed to swarm the loyalists, their numbers slowly throttling the life out of the Loyalist plan in its infant stages. Through the steam and chaos Thao called out to his second-officer

“Tamier” he bellowed “Turn us around, show the heathen scum our strong side, rolling broadsides on my mark”

The tall man known as Tamier relayed the orders quickly and efficiently to his command staff despite the grievous gash on his forehead. When the enemy fleet had engaged a bulkhead had erupted fling metallic debris into his forehead. Tamier was bleeding and in pain, but he would not abandon his admiral, or the Lord-Commander. From the command teams, the order filtered down like rain down a creek, sweeping to every area of the ship. A Cadian crew prided itself on its efficiency and every member, from the lowliest deck-hand to the highest commander, was proud of the synergy of their vessel.

In the void of space, all was silent. Despite the horrendous violence being unleashed by both sides, there was no sound: no screams of rage or pain, no deep bass throngs of destruction, just the glacial calm of the stars. The Heretic’s Bane turned slowly to present its starboard side to the enemy. Miles of steel and industry turned gracefully through the glacial void, and vast gun ports capable of swallowing cities whole opened into the cruel blackness of the eternal expanse. Gun-gangs, hundreds strong, heaved on chains to pull cyclopean shells into the waiting maws of the Broadside Guns. Red Robed adepts raised their hands and cried out adulation to the Omnissiah in binary as the great impact chambers closed. Enormous cogs and gears, larger than any mountain on Terra, wound tight shut with the sound of planet cores erupting, gang leaders bellowed make ready, huge servitor-loaders checked pressurisation and safety-levels.

A moment of silence descended on the Gun Decks as all eyes looked up to the Vox-casters of the gun deck.

“FIRE”

The side of ship erupted like a chain of metallic volcanoes, their vicious payload vomited in the void like the fists of angry gods. The shells densely packed and on a single trajectory, impacted the heretic ships and cast them to the endless galactic sea. One of the ships buckled clean in half under the fusillade, its two parts spinning wildly and tearing rends into its comrades. Thousands of slain foes poured from the rents in the enemy vessels, freezing in the cold of night, looks of pain and horror forever etched on their faces.

“FIRE”

The second salvo shot into the enemy rearguard, impacting on engines and gunnery wracks and smashing them like dried wood. A large enemy cruiser, designated The Pride of Jupiter, took a shell direct to its engine and exploded with the force of a supernova. All ships, loyalist and traitor, were momentarily blinded by the blast, but the hostilities could no stop. Fighters plummeted, escorts diverted and the great game of interstellar hostilities continued.

“FIRE”

The final salvo punched a hole right through the enemy line, escorts scattered like ash to the wind, cruisers bleeding their vital gases to the sterile monster of the void. The slow dance broke apart at the fury of the Loyalist counter-assault, and soon pockets of the traitor’s front lines began to falter. Several of the traitors began to turn for a retreat, which the loyalists pounced upon with the righteous fury of the Emperor.

Admiral Thao grabbed the Vox again “All hands, I want immediate Sitrep. Get groups Alpha and Beta on the Horn, prepare for fleet link up. Prepare to approach primary target”

He could see through the viewport the other prong of the loyalist assault, including the glorious flagship Sword of The Emperor of the Lord-Commander. The enemy were fighting back, the mass of their secondary fleet slowly approaching the battle, but for the first time in this battle, Thao knew they could win!

wow...simply wow

epic
just read through everything ive missed and somehow its got even better than it was before!

well done again DLS

Great stuff my only complaint is well I need more!

QFT

Y.A.Y!!!!

My god that was some brilliant writing. Seanron, I was wrong -- I don't think I want to kiss you, I know I do XD

@Candroth: (And I'm assuming you're a girl)

How about this, if he keeps this story up and has a suitably epic ending (or never stops ) then you kiss him.

However, if he gives up or trails off weakly...I kiss him.

Is that motivation enough, Seanron?

This, this was the reason I joined Dakka. To join the chorus in PRAISING SEANRON!!!

Emperors Faithful wrote:@Candroth: (And I'm assuming you're a girl)

How about this, if he keeps this story up and has a suitably epic ending (or never stops ) then you kiss him.

However, if he gives up or trails off weakly...I kiss him.

Is that motivation enough, Seanron?

Indeed, I do believe Candroth is a girl, in which case *blush* aw shucks...

As for you EF, what new torture method is this? The Inquisition is imaginitive indeed! :p

Kveldulv wrote:This, this was the reason I joined Dakka. To join the chorus in PRAISING SEANRON!!!

We should make it into a real organisation... and by we i mean you guys since i'm too lazy

Keep it coming, great stuff so far, I even started taking a peek at work hoping for updates to the story.
Have you thought of writing it as a book, there plenty of potential customer here..

Harms66 wrote:Keep it coming, great stuff so far, I even started taking a peek at work hoping for updates to the story.
Have you thought of writing it as a book, there plenty of potential customer here..

Whilst I would love to (it'd be alot easier to compile all this into one book) I really would like to avoid a C&D from GW lol

Emperors Faithful wrote:@Candroth: (And I'm assuming you're a girl)

How about this, if he keeps this story up and has a suitably epic ending (or never stops ) then you kiss him.

However, if he gives up or trails off weakly...I kiss him.

Sounds like a plan, EF. If he gives up, I'll even hold him down for you.

*looks at avatar* I sure hope I'm a girl, either that or I need to ease off the chocolate.

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:Indeed, I do believe Candroth is a girl, in which case *blush* aw shucks...

As for you EF, what new torture method is this? The Inquisition is imaginitive indeed! :p

Call it 'the carrot and the stick', Sean ... I have a henna tattoo of an inquisitorial rosette on my collarbone. (:

Candroth wrote:

Emperors Faithful wrote:@Candroth: (And I'm assuming you're a girl)

How about this, if he keeps this story up and has a suitably epic ending (or never stops ) then you kiss him.

However, if he gives up or trails off weakly...I kiss him.

Sounds like a plan, EF. If he gives up, I'll even hold him down for you.

*looks at avatar* I sure hope I'm a girl, either that or I need to ease off the chocolate.

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:Indeed, I do believe Candroth is a girl, in which case *blush* aw shucks...

As for you EF, what new torture method is this? The Inquisition is imaginitive indeed! :p

Call it 'the carrot and the stick', Sean ... I have a henna tattoo of an inquisitorial rosette on my collarbone. (:

Eegad! You're in cahoots then? Damn Inquisition.

this thread is now officialy the most awesome one in the entire universe(provided that the rest of the universe has internet, of course)
thinks... this story should be made into a goddamn movie (the Lord Of The Rings kind, none of that Michael Bay bullshite)

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:

Candroth wrote:

Emperors Faithful wrote:@Candroth: (And I'm assuming you're a girl)

How about this, if he keeps this story up and has a suitably epic ending (or never stops ) then you kiss him.

However, if he gives up or trails off weakly...I kiss him.

Sounds like a plan, EF. If he gives up, I'll even hold him down for you.

*looks at avatar* I sure hope I'm a girl, either that or I need to ease off the chocolate.

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:Indeed, I do believe Candroth is a girl, in which case *blush* aw shucks...

As for you EF, what new torture method is this? The Inquisition is imaginitive indeed! :p

Call it 'the carrot and the stick', Sean ... I have a henna tattoo of an inquisitorial rosette on my collarbone. (:

Eegad! You're in cahoots then? Damn Inquisition.

The Inquisition, you never see us coming.

Bah,they can't against Creeeeeeeeeeeeeed!

Hmmm, yes, all that tactical outflanking genius...sounds suspiciously like deamon summoning...


...We'll look into it...

Sir your ability to astound is truly unfathomable... Well done!!!

Emperors Faithful wrote:Hmmm, yes, all that tactical outflanking genius...sounds suspiciously like deamon summoning...


...We'll look into it...

*manages to choke on her tea*

Brilliant!

OMG i have just read the whole section and I've been waiting to post something on this thread! I will follow you in the depths of the eye of terror if you asked me, my new lord and master, maybe the emperor's guiding light always shine on you so you may create more of this...awesomness...

yeppers. that there is a smilin' Space Marine. Excellent Work seanaron!
on the same note: angry space marine confused space marine... do i need to keep making the joke?
my one gripe is the Templars: ive been painting mine white for a year and a half now. totally jacked my pallate bro!

Dark Lord Seanron wrote:Deep within the Webway, in the twisted realm of Commoragh:

...

• The ancient Archon Akhara’Keth has a different suggestion however. The Bloody Claw has been quiet for several years, not raiding the prey-species at all; however it still thrives much to the confusion of the other Dark Kin. Akhara’Keth reveals the reason: he has bartered security from She Who Thirsts by throwing his Cabal’s loyalty to the Lord of Fate: Tzeentch.

Strange coincidence...

I posted this on Warseer Aug 2008

My name comes from a group of Dark Eldar who follow Tzeench's pursuit of knowledge and power instead of just the pleasures of the flesh- A fun homemade army that I justify by using Tzeench as a protector from Slaanesh letting me mix 1ksons and some Dark Eldar troups. Not imba at all eh?

The name was Archon of the Stolen Thought (from the respectively named Cabal)

Also, not accusing you of idea theft in the least bit, moreso, "Great minds think alike" (All are pawns to the Architect of Fate!)

Now I greatly anticipate the next parts of this reading. You are an excellent writer. Obviously, I can't wait for "what happens next" spefically towards Magnus the Red (possibly allying with the Space Wolves as a sign of forgiveness and apology in one, or helping Creed take back Terra) what Ahriman is up to (with the Eldar being like, almost dead and all) and where the ideas of this Bloodied Claw Cabal lead the Dark Eldar (I've always thought it interesting if Ahriman himself was acting as the emissary to Tzeentch for the Dark Eldar in exchange for assistance in obtaining the Black Library, thus my other Cabal, and custom codex for Cabal of Great Wizard aka Harry Potter army that consists of 1ksons and Dark eldar as well as new guys such as "rubric warriors" and "rubric Incubi"). Its very intersting the many directions you seem to be taking the plot without the old Emprah anymore.

For now, I'll sit and wait. I haven't had a good "Story time" in a while, so again thanks.